Reviews For Straight Lines
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Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 03, 2007 04:39 am Title: The Kiss

This is awesome and I'm pouting a bit as I write this review because they are simply KILLING ME.  Both of them.  Ugh.

Love how you're saying so much in such tiny snippets.  Keep 'em coming!



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Well, it's supposed to be hopeful!  They're taking a step towards each other!  Sort of, anyway.  It may take some time, but I'm loving all of this tension building up.  I think when JAM finally get together it's going to be worth all of the torture we had to go through.

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: January 03, 2007 04:11 am Title: The Gift

it hits him like it used to

Yes! It was exactly the same expression. It gave me a lot of hope for these two silly kids. I love all of this- the short, parallel snippets appeal to me very much. These two are so connected, of course their story works like this.



Author's Response: Thank you.  I hate the fact that Jim can see them hug.  But it made me hopeful too, because as long as it still makes him sad, then that means he still cares about Pam.  Weird logic, but whatevs.  Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: January 03, 2007 04:09 am Title: The Silence

Too soon, though, they’re not them anymore

Owie. Yes.

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: January 03, 2007 04:07 am Title: The Kiss

Oh, their two kisses both hurt, in such different ways. Beautiful structure.

Reviewer: the_musical Signed [Report This]
Date: January 02, 2007 11:30 pm Title: The Kiss

i really like the juxtaposition of the events.

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