9 [Report This]Date: January 10, 2007 11:03 pm Title: In The Dust
That was great! I loved the last bit especially. Jan would TOTALLY cut off his hair beads!
Author's Response: Thanks for commenting, Kristen!
8 [Report This]Date: January 09, 2007 07:18 pm Title: In The Dust
These were all awesome and so in tune with the characters, but I really, really love the Michael and Jan ones.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! Jan came first, then Michael; I think that's why they're stronger. The rest just butted their heads in!
Date: January 09, 2007 05:12 pm Title: In The Dust
Oh, man, I love this. The first section is SO great and Michael and I love the details of Karen's hotel life, Roy's confusion, Pam's so perfect and true observation about how they're all changing. And the last lines of both the Jim and Jan sections are fantastic, for different, awesome reasons.
Author's Response: Thanks for the awesome review, kyrafic!
Date: January 08, 2007 05:39 pm Title: In The Dust
I loved each one of these - so well written and so perfect!My favorite was Jim, especially the last line ".... so he prints off the rental listing and hands her his future" . And the section titles were so perfect - I'll have to listen to that to see where you got your inspiration.
Author's Response: Thanks, kaystar! Definitely check out the song, it's one of my favourites!
Date: January 08, 2007 02:51 pm Title: In The Dust
This was lovely as is all your writing. You captured each character in so few lines. Michael's reverence for Jan, Roy's confusion at Pam's sadness, Karen's surprise at Jim's hidden side, Pam's inability to figure out anything anymore, Jim's resignation, and Jan's reflections on love. I really like that line, because it is so true (and poor Jan.):
Not the one she thought she'd marry as a young girl (god damn fucking Gould), but the one that suits her emotionally damaged, tired, stressed-out self.
Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review! And, yeah. Poor Jan. She has a lot of work ahead of her.
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 02:47 pm Title: In The Dust
This made me unexplicable sad...and then had me laughing at the Jamaican beads cutting Jan is going to be doing. Jim's part, especially, because I hadn't caught that when I saw the show on Thursday, hadn't realised that Pam's selfless helping of a friend would be misinterpreted. Vicious cycle, indeed.
Author's Response: I know. These people are sad, but they also bring the funny, so all is forgiven! Thanks for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 01:36 pm Title: In The Dust
I love how at the end of every inner monologue you have something that is just completely true to the caharacter. Especially Jan and Pam's last lines. I like the structure and I love ensemble pieces. Thank you!
Author's Response: No, thank you, chicgeek!
Date: January 08, 2007 01:14 pm Title: In The Dust
Still, the first thing she's going to do when she gets him alone in his condo is hold him down and cut off those stupid Jamaican beads. Because she has to draw the line somewhere.
Haaaa!!! Oh, man, that is hilarious!
I liked the rest, but hoooo... those last two lines were priceless.
Author's Response: I think that is the only line I've ever written that makes me crack up every single time I re-read it. It had to be saved for last. Thanks for reading!
Date: January 08, 2007 12:38 pm Title: In The Dust
so he prints off the rental listing and hands her his future.
Such a great line, which is probably why I found it so heartbreaking.
Author's Response: Yeah, it broke my heart a little to write it. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: January 08, 2007 12:27 pm Title: In The Dust
Another terrific piece- thank you!
I come here for Jim and Pam, but your Jan was perfect. Loved the last line.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: January 08, 2007 11:30 am Title: In The Dust
Jim realizes Karen is the safe, sane choice, and (except for that one time last May) he has always gone for the sure bet
This stings. It's so true, and it reminds me of when he said, "You have to take a chance on something sometime," and he did- on her, and he thinks he lost. These are all so beautiful and so truthful. Fabulous piece.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: January 08, 2007 11:23 am Title: In The Dust
These were wonderful little snippets that really effectively capture a lot of emotion beautifully. Loved them all, they seemed so spot-on for the characters and the mix of funny, wistful, sadness is perfect.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was trying to find the same balance the show does, but reveal a little more emotion. I'm glad that came across.
Date: January 08, 2007 11:18 am Title: In The Dust
NO. Please, don't scare me like that again! Jim's was so frightening; the thought that he would just give himself away like that - as though he's right to be with Karen. Oh, boo.
The rest of it, however, ;D, was lovely and sweet and so insightfully delcious.
Author's Response: Don't be sad about Jim! He's work it out in the end, fear not! Thanks for reading!
Date: January 08, 2007 11:16 am Title: In The Dust
You wrote all of the characters in this piece really really well, I especially loved the very last two lines as well as "so he prints off the rental listing and hands her his future." So good.
Author's Response: It's funny, but that line in Jim's section came from nowhere, and I was like "What? That's way too dramatic!" Except I posted without re-reading and now it's kind of growing on me. Thanks for reviewing!
7 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 10:07 am Title: In The Dust
First - great song, and it's surprising how each line fits the character you paired it with. Nice insights here, and the final lines of both Michael's and Jan's are LOL funny (as they should be). :)
Author's Response: I know, I was surprised, too. But I heard the song after BfV and each line just seemed to click. This was supposed to be just Jan/Michael. Then all these other characters claimed some lyrics and I couldn't resist. Thanks for reading, shan!
Date: January 08, 2007 09:42 am Title: In The Dust
She has to draw the line somewhere.
AWESOME.
Also, the fact that Karen is masquerading as Jim's replacement is just PERFECT. Everything in Pam's life is totally different now. It's just bizarre.
Anyway, thanks for this. Don't regret it in the morning.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I guess I'll try to ignore that Poster's Remorse.
Date: January 08, 2007 07:46 am Title: In The Dust
Jan and scissors! Freaking awesome! And I love the Michael & Jan in this -- there is something about the two of them -- only therapy can explain it!
And Pam is ripping my heart out -- even more than seeing her crying, if that is possible. Maybe it's the line about Jim handing Karen his future. Ouch, that hurts. They have GOT to break up Jim & Karen for sweeps.
Author's Response: Thanks lisahoo! (for this and the pimp on TWoP) Sorry my Jim hurt your feelings! serez heureuses (Be In Love and You Will Be Happy), 1
Author's Response: ETA: I cannot possibly explain why my response also includes half the title of a Gauguin painting. One of those crazy internet things, I guess. Must be a sign; maybe I can work it into my next fic?
Date: January 08, 2007 03:48 am Title: In The Dust
I am a sad person who keeps refreshing MTT's most recent page.
OK. Seriously? I love this to bits. I've seen so much speculation on Roy and Jim and Pam and Karen but it didn't ever seem definite or anything, before I read this: like Pam's helping him being Jim's greatest fear and most fervent wish [oh, JIM.], like Pam seeing things so completely differently [PAM.], like Pam's laugh making Roy feel whole again [roy.], like Karen seeing the metaphors that obviously we thought only the viewers could see. =P I loved that.
But what I loved the most about this was Jan's and Michael's small set. Their scene single-handedly made me smile so much my teeth hurt, which is a feat considering I was still a little bummed about Pam's crying, and God, their relationship is screwy and dysfunctional and there are a thousand reasons they can't work, which is exactly what makes them so freaking perfect. Michael's drabble was especially brilliant, because the solemn side of him is not often explored in fics, even though mostly everyone agrees he does have that solemn side.
And he keeps trying to get her to see how perfect she is and how he's better with her, and finally, finally she does (even though her doctor ordered her to).
That pretty much sums up that relationship. Goodness. I love these two.
And I loved the last line of Jan's, because HA. So completely in character.
I still don't think this is a comprehensive enough review so if I see anything else later that I simply loved, you can expect another review. ;)
I seriously love your work.
Author's Response: Bless you soul, what a review! Thank you so much! And feel free to come back as often as you like ;)