10 [Report This]Date: January 14, 2010 11:53 am Title: Chapter 1
I feel like I found a hidden treasure, allibabab. Not sure if you still check your reviews, but I'm really enjoying your writing. This was so painful, heartbreaking and seemingly real, like you (and I) were a fly on the wall.
10 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 08:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
sensory overload! you use beautiful imagery. i especially enjoyed paragraphs 3 and 4... more, please.
Author's Response: Sensory overload? I hope that's a good thing! Thanks so much for your comment.
Date: January 11, 2007 09:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ooh that last line kills. Really well written!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked the story. :)
Date: January 11, 2007 06:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love the way Jim's thoughts flip-flop from the end of one paragraph to the next - it really shows his inner turmoil and indecision. Awesome job on this.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's always nice to hear when people catch on to the tricks you use in a story to lead them forward... glad you enjoyed the story. :)
Date: January 11, 2007 04:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is sad and bleak and so, so poignantly beautiful.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it.
Date: January 11, 2007 03:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this is so heart breaking,and amazing. I absolutely love it. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Date: January 11, 2007 11:18 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, Jim :(
I really hope that Jim on the show doesn 't have this level of awareness about his (lack) of feelings for Karen, but this was a definite possibility. The way you wrote this made me feel Jim's hurt and confusion and need. Loved the part at the end where he recognized himself in Karen, but can't quite take his own advice.
Author's Response: Thanks for your thoughtful response. :) I'm really glad you picked up on the ending so clearly -- I had a lot of trouble with it while I was writing, so it's nice to hear that you think I got it right. Thanks again!
Date: January 11, 2007 07:41 am Title: Chapter 1
wow -- this cuts like a knife. "It’s even harder to lose things when you don’t have much to begin with" I guess it's just as painful on the other side of the triangle, isn't it?
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I can't tell you how much I love it when people pick out specific lines from the story to comment on -- it really means a lot. I'm really glad to hear you liked the story. :)
Date: January 11, 2007 07:22 am Title: Chapter 1
This is great, great writing. I love your Jim-voice and your use of imagery. Write more!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad to hear you liked it.
10 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2007 06:31 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this was really beautiful, and so sad. I loved it.
Author's Response: Hey, thank you so much. :)