Date: March 12, 2007 07:13 pm Title: Pam
Oh that last line's a killer. This is really well done.
10 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2007 03:09 pm Title: Pam
I don't know how I missed this awesome story when it was first posted. I love your style here - short but powerful sentences that say so much.
9 [Report This]Date: January 26, 2007 10:40 pm Title: Pam
This is so beautiful and I love it so far. I love how every short sentence has so much meaning.
Date: January 26, 2007 07:50 pm Title: Pam
Possibly one of the greatest, most brilliant, most lovely, most awesomely-written stories I've read in recent times.
I freaking love the way you've written it, as the PaminHerDad'sTruck disappears and brings out PamintheBlueDress, how it's only Jim who brings out the PaminHerDad'Truck, how she's losing herself, how she realises there's a world of dreams between her and the guy she thought she needed to love and was meant to love, how that world the GuyintheParkingLotwiththeGoofyGrinandtheEyesandtheLooks offered to her - this moment of realisation was beautifully captured in the way she slides off her ring and feels weight fall away - she's breaking free.
Can I say that I adored this? I loved this? I think it's brilliant? And
And then he kissed her, no, she kissed him, no...they kissed made me sniff and smile at the same time.
I don't think I can possibly articulate what else I love about this, because oops, I think this is already longer than the story itself. =P Brilliant job, though; you deserve more reviews.
Date: January 26, 2007 06:25 pm Title: Pam
Oh, this is like that Lite Cream Cheese you can buy; it's just as heavenly, but it's just...Lite. This is poetical. ;D Very nice!
Date: January 26, 2007 10:46 am Title: Pam
Oh, that was lovely. I love the distinction between Pam the girl and Pam the woman, and the obvious difficulty she has in accepting that she isn't the girl anymore.