10 [Report This]Date: February 27, 2007 08:55 am Title: Two beds
Okay, I may have already reviewed this once before (I've been so behind on reviewing and reading - too, too little time), but it bears noting again: This chapter was just so...sad - just left me feeling very blue for Pam and for Jim. As usual, you capture the nuances here with such simple, effective prose:
"she'd given in with no resistance when he invited her "home." Being with him was comfortable- he knew what she liked, all the ways to touch her that she hadn't been touched since she had left him." You know, I think it's really easy to forget how much this would be a factor in her falling back into things again.
"She loved him with the sentimental, childish love of a schoolgirl, and with the fond devotion of..well, a sister (they had grown up together, in many ways). There was no passion, no maturity, no room for growth in their love. He wanted her to come back to him the way she had been, and she couldn't. She wasn't."
Yes. It's too easy to think that, because of her feelings for Jim, she'd just have little in the way of emotion for Roy, but you articulate it beautifully here.
"It was the first real lie he'd told her. He'd evaded, exaggerated, made light of, omitted, and hedged, but he hadn't lied until now."
Guh. I'm one of the few (I think) who isn't totally disgusted with Jim right now, and it's because of what you expressed here - he's just caught in such a nightmare, trying to do the right thing and move on, knowing that it'll be damned near impossible to do so.
So in short - yes, loved this. On to the next chapter --
Author's Response:
I don't know how to even start to respond to your comments- they're so thoughtful and detailed. I really appreciate you taking the time to articulate all of this. I'm thrilled that you reacted so strongly and so positively! This is the longest story I've done by far...I feel I owe you a debt! LOL
I totally get where they are both coming from right now. No disgust, just a lot of pity for all four of them (less now for Roy after the bar-trashing, but still...).
Thank you again...
Date: February 06, 2007 06:52 am Title: Two beds
I'm so glad that you're continuing this. Way to go, Pam, staying firm with Roy despite...that. Loved all the details in their old apartment.
Author's Response: Thank you! I may need some help with the next chapter. You game?
Date: February 05, 2007 11:31 pm Title: Two beds
i like it!! keep writing
Author's Response: Thanks, I think I will!
Date: February 05, 2007 10:55 am Title: Two beds
He'd evaded, exaggerated, made light of, omitted, and hedged, but he hadn't lied until now. I love your explanation for all his behavior over the past months. Obviously, I'm not liking that Pam ends up with Roy but it was well told, realistic, and as you so nicely pointed out, not likely to come true! Nice one, lis.
Author's Response: Thank you, ma'am. I don't like it either, but maybe she just needed one last reminder of why she doesn't, in fact, live there anymore. Stay tuned...
Date: February 04, 2007 05:49 pm Title: Two beds
I can certainly understand how this happened, especially under the influence of a few drinks, but I hope it doesn't happen on the show. I think sleeping with Roy again would mess up the progress that Pam has slowly made so far. I think he will try to remind her of how good they were together, but hopefully it won't lead to anything else. JMHO.
But am eagerly awaiting the next installment! Poor Jim, all alone with the garter, knowing Pam and Roy probably left together.
Author's Response: Oh, I hope you're right! I don't want this to happen, but it played itself out so believably in my head that I decided I needed ya'll to share my suffering. Thank you for your eagerness!
Date: February 04, 2007 04:41 pm Title: Two beds
Gah. Okay, it's a testament to how freaking amazing you are that I was actually holding my breath at Pam waking up in her old bed. And god, I feel so much for them both - for Roy, who's trying so hard, and for Pam, who's still so lost even though she's taking steps forward (or trying to).
Is it wrong that I wouldn't hate her for it if this happened on the show? Because it would be so real and so understandable.
Your last paragraph about Jim? Killed me. Of course the universe would shift that way -- he'd wake up alone on the very morning that she wakes up in her old bed, her old home.
Okay, so you must continue this.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I think all four of them are still in for a world of hurt before it all gets sorted out, and suddenly Roy is almost the most innocent party (quite a shift since season 1, isn't it?). Can you imagine the forum outcry if Pam would do this? Hee. You and I would be the lone voices supporting her, I think! Anyway, thank you so much for the encouraging comments. I hope you enjoy whatever I come up with next.
Date: February 04, 2007 03:43 pm Title: Two beds
Oh, I'm hooked. Because I don't liver here anymore. How satisfying was that line? And even though it's so sad, and I can so feel Jim's pain at the end...it's so nice to read him acknowledging what he does - and doesn't - want. I really hope you'll update soon (yes, I'm insatiable!)
Author's Response:
Oh, thank you! I'm trying to figure out where to go here. I have a final destination in mind, but the next step is perplexing me. And yes, it was satisfying, but also sad. Poor Roy, you know?
Date: February 04, 2007 01:23 pm Title: Two beds
I can't tell you how happy I am that you've continued this! This chapter was great. Nothing overdramatic over OOC. Just really simple and honest.
and Roy did not wash those hand towels. I am 99% sure [/Dwigt]
Author's Response:
Yeah, I'm with you. Handtowels are just not on Roy's list of priorities! :)
Thank you for the encouragement- I hope you like future chapters!
Date: February 04, 2007 01:22 pm Title: Two beds
I think you've made this storyline very believable, and hopefully she would indeed conclude, "Because I don't live here anymore." Pam pressed her lips lightly to Roy's cheek. With a sad smile, she left without another word." I am really enjoying this story; happy you decided to continue it.
Author's Response: Thank you! "Believable" is what I'm going for here, so that's very good to read! I'm going to try to keep going until things come to a logical conclusion or I get too tired (this is long for me!).
Date: February 04, 2007 01:18 pm Title: Two beds
she went home with ROY.... while I can totally imagine it, its just one of those times I want to throw something at her.
Author's Response: Ha! I sympathize with Pam a whole lot, but she doesn't always do the things that will actually bring her happiness. I thought this seemed realistic, at least. :)