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Reviewer: MaiaDawn Signed [Report This]
Date: February 06, 2007 03:25 pm Title: A Benihana Christmas Part 1. Pam.

My comment would be in regards to formatting.  I'm kind of a stickler on formatting the story so that it's slightly easier to read...

 

Other than that, pretty good start!



Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! About the formatting, I'm still trying to figure out paragraph styles and whatnot. I'll smooth out the bumps when I do. Thanks.

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: February 03, 2007 04:36 pm Title: A Benihana Christmas Part 1. Jim.

Ooh, I can't wait for more... It is interesting hearing the thoughts also... I wanna see that episode again now.

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