Date: February 06, 2007 12:59 am Title: Just a Kiss
ok, i don't even know where to start. ok, how about with this? i LOVED this story and if you tell me this is it, i will have to flog you. or flonker you. seriously you should keep going with this. you can't leave off with "baby steps..."
things i love:
"She’s trying to get answers from the back of Jim’s neck, but she’s finding that she and the back of Jim’s neck have communication problems. Much like she does with Jim himself. " awesome. sarcasic, witty and perfectly describes Pam thinking she can read him but maybe not...
other things i loved: jimpot - omg! that is just freakin awesome!!!! i love that she gave it a name. i can't even tell you how much this made me smile.
the fact that jim told karen about the dundie kiss? wow! i have not seen this idea before and i was blown away by that! so, great job on thinking of that one.
i think this is your first fanfic, or at least, first one posted here, right? well, let me just say that this line: "“Just” belonged nowhere near that night. That kiss." (and the paragraph is comes from) is just incredible. I know that everyone's heart broke along with Pam when Karen called it "just a kiss" but the way you describe Pam's pain at this dismissal, well, i just loved it. short and sweet and witty and right on.
lastly: "Psyches kind of rock." hell yeah! go pam go. even if it takes all of february sweeps. but in the meantime, maybe shan21 can fill in the gaps. right???
Author's Response:
Wow. So you clearly get the award for best reviewer EVER. I imagine it as a tiny dundie.
I'm so glad that you liked this, because as you pointed out, it is my first Office fic. It's actually the first fic I've posted online in years. I'm especially glad that the "just belonged nowhere near that night" paragraph worked. I've never had trouble writing humor, but I'm always worried that my sentimental stuff will come off cheesy.
As for your threat to flonker me... You are really tempting me to continue this. You might have a mean flonker. I'm worried. We'll see how it goes. I've never been good at anything but one-shots. I have commitment issues!
Whoa. This was long. Well, long response for a long review I guess :)
Date: February 05, 2007 11:27 pm Title: Just a Kiss
I was reading this, going, "Ohhh...Oh my gosh...nooo...what?!?" Haha! This really makes me wonder which kiss he DID tell Karen about. I could totally see this happen. Great job!
Author's Response: Hahaha! I love your reaction. Any time I can evoke "nooo" and "what?!?" in the same fic, I feel successful. Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: February 05, 2007 11:16 pm Title: Just a Kiss
Yay for Jimpot! Love it ;) My story will be coming your way OH so soon!
Author's Response: Yay!! Can't wait to read it! Thanks so much for your help.
Date: February 05, 2007 11:10 pm Title: Just a Kiss
Oh my God!!! I never even thought of that...of course that kiss was JUST a kiss!! ahhh it all makes so much sense! I love you for opening my eyes
yay for Jimpot!!
Author's Response:
So glad you liked Jimpot. I was worried that it was too corny.
As for opening your eyes, it was actually John D'arc in the Office Tally comments for Ben Franklin opened my eyes :)
He wrote:
maybe, people, it was
“she kissed me, but she was drunk at this stupid awards show we have every year.”
And I thought, 'OH MY GOD. I must write a fic about this.'