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Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: February 26, 2007 05:20 pm Title: Chapter 1

These 5 elements improv fics are so awesome!  You worked your words in so seamlessly - now that I know what the prompts were, your use of them was just so natural.  I loved Dwight wearing the eyepatch but I think my favorite was Pam wondering how much it would cost to ship her heart to Stamford.

Author's Response: yay! reviews from administrators are so exciting! so glad you liked! thanks for the review!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: February 26, 2007 01:49 pm Title: Chapter 1

Ouch -- the angst fairy has visited you alright!!!  For five random elements, they are integrated into your story so well, it was not obvious which elements you were given.  Nicely done.

Author's Response: yay! i was afraid my five things would stick out like sore thumbs, but yay! thanks so much for the review!

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: February 26, 2007 01:35 pm Title: Chapter 1

aww, sorry your day has sucked. well, this is a review and it was a really great story. a sad, angsty story, but i enjoyed it none the less.

Author's Response: thanks for the review! decided to try my hand at angst..

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: February 26, 2007 01:26 pm Title: Chapter 1

Really nice.  The use of 1st person works well and I like how it's addressed to Jim.  I don't really get the part about multiplying the date by the days, but that may be just me and my math-a-phobia as I age!  Love the yogurt lid, Phyllis (Jim) coming alive, the eye patch in honor of Pirates 2, and all the great detail.

Hope your day has gone better since this morning!   

Author's Response: sorry, i struggled with bringing that through clearly (i had a two-hour time limit). the whole multiplying thing works like this: 7 (the date) times 42 (# of days since jim left) equals 294 (the title).

Reviewer: SmartSexyTemp Signed [Report This]
Date: February 26, 2007 12:52 pm Title: Chapter 1

Nice job! I especially liked this:

Dwight's wearing an eye patch "In honor of Pirates 2 opening today," and I want to cry because you're not here to laugh with me.

What a creative (and heartbreaking) way to mention a pirate eye patch!

Author's Response: hehe.. don't know how many people with notice this, but july 7, 2006 really was opening day for Pirates 2! yes, i'm an all-around geek.

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: February 26, 2007 12:28 pm Title: Chapter 1

I'm sorry for your rough managed to take it and craft something beautiful. Poor, poor Pam. You just absolutely inhabit her, here.

You had said something about Phyllis coming alive, but it was you who was full of life, and it was downright contagious.

Gorgeous. Thank you for brightening my day by sharing this. And congrats on using your prompt items so well!

Author's Response: thanks so much for the review! i'm glad it brightened your day!

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 26, 2007 12:15 pm Title: Chapter 1

I hope this is a letter she sends to him.  Because she totally should have, the big wuss.  ;-)

Good job on writing under pressure!  Sorry you day is going so sucky!!  *hugs* 

Author's Response: i totally agree! but i'm fine with the baby steps. at least roy's out of the picture! thanks soooo much for the review! definitely helped my day!

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