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Reviewer: annagirl93 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 15, 2007 07:58 am Title: Chapter 1 -- Broken

okay, this is awesome. loving it!!! perhaps an MA rating later on????

Author's Response: Hahah....I don't expect the explicit hot monkey love to go down....(TWSS), but I do anticipate some hot smoochage, at the very least.

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: April 15, 2007 05:33 am Title: Chapter 4: Befuddled

How did I miss this, the first go-round? Hooray for Pam, not pussyfooting around. And how much did I want to throttle Karen when she trash talked Pam - girlfriend seriously needs to re-think her stategy. (Has she met Jim? Actually, no she hasn't.) Can't wait to see what happens, now that he's headed in the right direction. About freaking time!

Author's Response: Poor Karen.  She is the perfect girl for the guy Jim is pretending to be.   

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: April 14, 2007 08:33 pm Title: Chapter 4: Befuddled

I didn't remember this one...but I'm so glad you're updating it so I can read it all now! Pam's outburst seems so possible- that her "I love you" will come in a moment of frustration and anger and even of resignation to her Jim-less fate. I like that it didn't really hit him until later...exactly what she'd said. What they'd both said. And if they both love him, and both want him to be happy, then the decision rests with him. In some ways, it always has. Love this!

Author's Response: Sometimes, I think BOTH Karen and Pam owe this child a smack upside the head............

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: April 14, 2007 08:14 pm Title: Chapter 4: Befuddled

YOU! *points finger accusingly*
Okay, so I will admit, generally I kinda suck at connecting stories with authors. I only really remember a few of them (*hides in shame*)... so, when I saw this was updated, um, well, wait, that really is a nonsequitor or something. But anyways, when I saw this was updated, I was like, okay, let me go remember where I left off. And then i read my review. And then your reply. And then it all comes back to the YOU.
So, yes, I blame you. Not for all of this, but well, for part of making me start. Start to think about Jim/Pam/Roy/Karen, think are they right for each other, what is wrong with them specifically, and think about their personalities for longer than I know what to do with myself. I blame you.
Not that I am sure that is a bad thing. Because I have enjoyed it. And the nerd in me really loved it. So, by blame I may really mean um... a positive form of blame. But since my vocabulary sucks, I am going with blame.
And yay me (because just now am I actually starting to READ this). Because I do remember it. Just (as stated before), not really who writes what. I really have to get better about that. And my dog is glaring at me. This is totally unrelated, but I think the sound of my typing is disturbing her sleep. And her eyes look really weird. So, this is going to be a short review - well, besides the massive amount i have already typed.
he turned right! i really hope that is the way to Pams. That it isn't a circle and he is really just trying to get to a good milage or something. it better be to Pams. Thats all I'm saying.
Okay doggy, thats all my typing for now :)

Author's Response: Oh, My GOODNESS, Emily.   This review is a flippin' RIOT.   You ROCK, my girlie.   You're awesome.

Reviewer: invis Signed [Report This]
Date: April 14, 2007 07:46 pm Title: Chapter 4: Befuddled

I hope you continue to compulsively update, because I'm really enjoying this story.


Author's Response: Oh, I'm so glad...I assure you, the story will haunt me until I wrap it up .........

Reviewer: invis Signed [Report This]
Date: April 14, 2007 07:45 pm Title: Chapter 3: Betwixt

Oh, Karen.  That's no way to be, girl.  If your guy's in love with another girl, you've got about a 1% chance of making things work with him, and being a snarky bitch does not work toward that 1-in-100 shot.  Bad Karen.  No biscuit.

Reviewer: invis Signed [Report This]
Date: April 14, 2007 07:43 pm Title: Chapter 2: Begrudge

Yes!  Exactly!:

"I know I hurt you, Jim.  And I am so, so sorry.  But I wasn't in the position to handle things any other way."

A lot of fics have Pam calling Jim on the fact that he didn't give her very much time to choose him before he up and left, but this is the first time I've seen her articulate it so well.  Very nice job. 

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 14, 2007 07:34 pm Title: Chapter 4: Befuddled

Are Bothered and Bewildered coming?  Bedazzled?  Bedroom?  Backsides?  (Quiet, you!)

Hooray, he's not going to Karen's house and he realized that Pam said she loved him!

And of course I remember your WIPs.  And if I don't, I just re-read chapters.  Because Reading is Fundamental.

I look forward to more!! 

Reviewer: Klankie Signed [Report This]
Date: March 27, 2007 03:18 pm Title: Chapter 2: Begrudge

There are so many things that I am loving about this story.  The imagery of the pencil snapped in half.  How Jim does seem to be less happy now although technically things are working out for him.  I especially love this line "But don't YOU begrudge ME the right to be really, really sad about it."  Great job and I can't wait fo rhte next update.

Author's Response: Thanks...sorry it took so long to update!

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: March 23, 2007 07:45 am Title: Chapter 3: Betwixt

ah, he may have reasons to be happy, but the main reason to be unhappy is his lack of pam. and karen insulted pam. therefore, karen sucks.

Author's Response: Yep....but, if situations were reveresed, would she suck so badly?   In the end, Jim needs to axe Karen because every annoying thing she does is annoying only because she Is Not Pam.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 21, 2007 06:58 pm Title: Chapter 3: Betwixt

I think this can definitely fit into post-Cocktails (as we know it so far...)

Hey, did Jim just not even pay any attention to the fact that Pam said she loved him and that she wanted to tell him to dump Karen and be with her instead?  

I like how your Jim doesn't want Karen to call him cutesie names.  It's cuz he's not her cutesie... he belongs to someone else... 



Author's Response: Jim is too absorbed in himself to register the impact on Pam or Karen....he is about to have a wake up call,don't worry....

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2007 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 2: Begrudge

Since my name is Karen I'm going to pretend that Jim was calling me and my answer is "No, Jim - you do not seem happy.  You are doing a piss-poor job of acting happy at times but you have been unhappy for so long that you forget what it's even like to be happy.  What?  That question really wasn't for me?  Oh. Never mind!/Emily Latella.

Author's Response: See, I knew there was a Karen somewhere with an ounce of sense in her....

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2007 06:33 pm Title: Chapter 2: Begrudge

i want more. and yeah, jim just isn't jim this season. but a reallygood way i like the way pam said like how come if he was so sad he seemed so happy and that is good


Author's Response: Like I said, Jim is just crying out for a smack upside the head this season, isn't he?

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2007 01:57 pm Title: Chapter 2: Begrudge

Ooh -- I like the point about the power shift from Pam to Jim -- kind of like the difference between S2 & S3.  Cannot wait to see where this leads -- hopefully to Presumptious (and Loud) Karen on her way outta Scranton!

Author's Response: We all see the shift...I feel I need to give Jim a surgical head-from-butt-ectomy, if you know what I mean.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2007 11:59 am Title: Chapter 2: Begrudge

Interesting.

Jim seems to not even have heard the "I love you" part of Pam's little speech.  Will his  brain catch up with that at some point?

I actually don't think Jim or Pam would use the word "begrudge" here; that doesn't ring true to me (just my opinion, though).

I love how Jim doesn't mind Pam's presumption.  This is so typical of all of us - the more you like someone, the more slack you cut them.  

Hmm ... what's next? 



Author's Response:

Now that you mention it,"begrudge" probably is a bit literary for a heated conversation.....but, I'm wedded to my single word "B" titles (I'll explain later) so let's pretend that bit isn't so jarring.....

And, you're right about Jim not registering the PamLove yet.  That will be addressed in a coming chapter.  HINT:  notice who he's focused on.  Again.    

Reviewer: Team_Pam Signed [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2007 08:56 am Title: Chapter 2: Begrudge

Wow. Nice new perspective. It's totally Jim in the driver's seat. I love that Pam's not trying to break them up in this, she's just showing how she feels. Shows alot of strength on her part. Love this line: But don't YOU begrudge ME the right to be really, really sad about it.


Author's Response: Thanks!  I honestly believe that Jim is such a doofus that he hasn't figured out that he CAN hurt Pam yet.....

Reviewer: DunderSnob Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 09, 2007 08:43 am Title: Chapter 2: Begrudge

HELL NO he's not happy!!!! And neither are we!!!

This is a great fic!



Author's Response: Thanks!   It was hard to keep Pam somewhat in character during her little speech, I want to yell at him a bit myself, and so I tended to start writing like me, rather than more like her....LOL.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08, 2007 07:43 pm Title: Chapter 1 -- Broken

I like this.  I'm glad to see it's NOT complete - more coming!!! 

Karen is not a very good girlfriend in your story - assuming they'll go to dinner, not moving to close the car door (???), and giving him about 2 seconds inside before coming after him.  Ugh.  Ditch that girl, Jim, and find another.  Maybe in the ... kitchen? 



Author's Response: Ironically, I don't think Karen was THAT out of line...when you are really coupley with someone, you tend to assume that you will spend a lot of time with them....only problem is, Jim doesn't want to be as "coupley" as she does...

Reviewer: Jen74 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08, 2007 07:26 pm Title: Chapter 1 -- Broken

Now this is interesting.  I'm intrigued to see where this goes!!

Author's Response: Thanks....um, me, too....I haven't worked the whole thing out yet, so, gulp, let's hope it keeps coming, and nothing too horrible happens.............

Reviewer: ceia Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08, 2007 07:16 pm Title: Chapter 1 -- Broken

Wow! I absolutely love this beginning. I can just picture the expression on Jim's face when he first sees her at his old desk. Please post a new chapter soon! This looks to be a fantastic story!

Author's Response: The Desk of Love is so important, don't you think?

Reviewer: colorblind Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 08, 2007 06:53 pm Title: Chapter 1 -- Broken

I really love this idea.  Jim needs to see that he's hurt poor Pam and he did!  More, please!

Author's Response: Jim has spent the whole season in a Cone of Selfishness.   Jim!  Come out of there!

Reviewer: Joni24 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08, 2007 06:51 pm Title: Chapter 1 -- Broken

Aw, poor Pam! Please update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks, I'll keep going!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: March 08, 2007 06:04 pm Title: Chapter 1 -- Broken

"The desk was empty, except for that single pencil, snapped neatly in two."  Perfect reaction to the Karen show she just witnessed.  Can't wait to read more!



Author's Response: The Karen Show makes me want to break things, too.

Reviewer: lapdogdesign Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08, 2007 05:57 pm Title: Chapter 1 -- Broken

Ooh. Great start! I can see something like that happening in canon with Pam and The Desk, and Jim coming upon the scene. And grr to Karen, but I can understand her position too. Can't wait to see what else you have up your sleeve!


Author's Response:

Elbows.

 Thanks for the review, hope you like the rest!

Reviewer: janelle Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08, 2007 05:42 pm Title: Chapter 1 -- Broken

ooh, I like this idea!  I really wanted him to see her crying in Back from Vacation, so I'm glad he saw that.  They both need something to spur them into action! :)

Author's Response: Jim needs a blatant reminder that he is not the only individual in the world with feelings and emotions.

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