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Reviewer: super_perfect Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 21, 2007 08:02 am Title: Explaining Nothing

i hope the evil ghost disappears into a puff of smoke so we can enjoy therest of the story. love the idea of jim's secret! esp loved the "converstation" between jim and pam and nick's reaction to it. poor nick - i've been there and you are just thinking...well, ok, i am invisible. time to go!

nice job. and i love the pics to go along with it. perfect!

 



Author's Response:

You and me both. I swear, I am cursed. My first computer had everything go wrong from broken usb ports, broken cd drives, broken hinges. so it was declaimed a lemon. i get a shiney new computer. my harddrive gets corrupted, i can't install fonts, and now a ghost. seriously.

i have that experience way to often - i try to resist the urge to be like, um, hey guys, i am here also.

there will be one more chapter with pics. hehe. i have so much fun with photography, i kept wanting to make it the entire story, but i figured then it would be more of a just say how awesome all my pictures are instead of my writing, and i have other sites for that :)

i just posted the next chapter... and now am going to try to ignore this site while i do work (icky) 

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 20, 2007 05:43 pm Title: Explaining Nothing

“Hey, babe. I’m just leaving Mark’s now.” - Busted!

As long as Karen had Jim on speed-dial (so she didn't have to dial all those numbers), her voice was certainly realistic enough. 

And if the choice is 'fess up or break up, guess which one I'd have Jim choose?  Go ahead, guess!!!

I'll wait and see what you have Jim choose... 



Author's Response:

Let me guess. You want Pam to be murdered by Dwight, and then Jim and Karen have lots and lots of babies, and live happily ever after? Right?

Darnit, I just gave away the ending. 

Reviewer: takemyhandx Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 20, 2007 04:23 pm Title: Explaining Nothing

No, this is cool! Karen, wow. Lol that was very funny!

Author's Response: haha, i know. i think my drunk karen is my favorite karen of all. but drunk karen doesn't last... next up is angry karen :P.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 19, 2007 06:54 pm Title: Author's Note

Fluffon stinks.  Bad Fluffon.  I will await new chapters patiently.  I'm a patient person.  

Fluffon still stinks, though. 



Author's Response: I know, Fluffon is evil. Right now, he is behaving, but like, still threatening. Like, showing what he is capable of.but thankfully, i was able to at least get back all the chapters i wrote, all my new pics, and school work. so thats good. and if fluffon behaves, the new chapters will be posted as fast as i get them back from my betas. :)

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 19, 2007 06:52 pm Title: Mixed Messages

Not at all confusing.  Ooh, another chapter!  (Runs off to see!)


Author's Response: not a happy chapter was it :(

Reviewer: takemyhandx Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 19, 2007 06:50 pm Title: Mixed Messages

No, it's not confusing one bit! Loved thier inner thoughts! God they need to hook up, BAD. lol<3

Author's Response: Do they ever! Its slow going for those two.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: March 19, 2007 06:25 pm Title: Author's Note

So sorry to hear the bad news about your computer!  I hope you're able to get connected and recover your chapters. Oh, and recover your school work too of course. This is a really cute story - and I'm enjoying your author's notes too!  (Till I got to this one.)  I look forward to reading more



Author's Response:

I recovered everything - thankfully. Fluffon is just behaving, but like, threatening me.

I enjoy writing the A/N's almost as much as a story. Haha.

Hopefully I will get something posted today, it depends on my betas :)

and hopefully fluffon won't like, kill my computer 

Reviewer: molly_connelley Signed [Report This]
Date: March 19, 2007 04:17 pm Title: Author's Note

Computers are evil whores. I'm so sorry about your evil whore of a computer, and I hope that it is happy and healthy soon - not for the sake of fic, but for the sake of your sanity, cause I know how that goes. So, hey, good luck. If things don't work out, you and I can have an Office Space moment in a field somewhere where we beat our computers senseless with baseball bats.

Er... I didn't mean it! It was a joke. Out of love... now I'm screwed.



Author's Response:

i would agree to that plan, but i can get a free computer if it keeps screwing up. not that i want it to keep screwing up.

i live off of my computer - and even worse, about 90% of my school work is via computers... eek.

right now it is behaving, but, with this computer, i don't trust it.  

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 19, 2007 12:19 pm Title: Mixed Messages

totally not confusing -- and totally true to character, painfully true to character...  Can't wait to see what's next.

Author's Response:

Glad everyone seemed to be able to understand it. Maybe I am just the one that got confused (actually, my beta's really helped!).

I agree, it sucks it is too true to character. Those two... they need a giant shove to tell the truth. 

Reviewer: Maybe Once Signed [Report This]
Date: March 19, 2007 10:41 am Title: Mixed Messages

Must....resist....urge...to...smack....fictional....characters......

 

 I so wish that this chapter wasn't in character....but it IS.

 



Author's Response: You want to slap them too? Good. I think we all need to. Maybe then they would do something about it.

Reviewer: justy Signed [Report This]
Date: March 19, 2007 08:20 am Title: Mixed Messages

I really wish these chapters were longer. (That's what she said.)

That being said, those two stupid kids. That was like a whole conversation of "Let's see who can hurt who the most without actually being mean." - something they both would totally do. Just going off each other.

By the way, it wasn't confusing at! 



Author's Response:

haha. well, normally i do write longer pieces, but for some reason, these come to me in shorter snipbits.

I swear, I think those two are slightly masochistic about each other and two themselves. Its like, lets suffer as much as we can all while injuring the other person. Someone needs to hand them a pack of condoms and lock them in a closet and let them work out their fustrations that way. wow, my mind is so oddly dirty right now. 

Reviewer: lapdogdesign Signed [Report This]
Date: March 19, 2007 08:18 am Title: Mixed Messages

I can totally see this kind of internal dialogue happening every time Jim and Pam talk.

 

Just a co-worker? Ouch! 

Definitely looking forward to more! 



Author's Response: I know, that link hurt me to write even. god, those two are just crazy. now, if only the thoughts were spoken, it would all be so much easier.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 17, 2007 08:39 pm Title: Experimental Design

An accidental meeting!!  I did NOT see that coming, and I love it!  I have some ideas on how Jim and Pam can combine their passions.  Well, their passion, anyway!

Thanks for mentioning there was another chapter - I might have missed it.  Of course, I would have caught it at the next update, but still!

Yay for Pam and Jim face time!!!  "Enjoy" your classes (okay, tolerate them then - a degree is important!). 



Author's Response:

Haha, well,maybe the next chapter will just be them throwing themselves at each other and making wild wild love right in the middle of an art class... or maybe not.

Classes suck. Just had my first one back from break. And all I got out of it was blah blah blah chemistry blah blah blah. Oh and the always fun, you won't get a job, you won't get into grad school pep talk. newest chapter up. :) read on my friend, read on. 

Reviewer: takemyhandx Signed [Report This]
Date: March 17, 2007 09:25 am Title: Experimental Design

Hey this is great! Please haev them do a project together! I need something to make my day better! =) Great, great work!

Author's Response: Haha, well, if they do, it won't be soon. I have about the next five chapters written, and they don't... yet. :)

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 17, 2007 09:11 am Title: Unrealized Beauty

I enjoy this contemplative Jim, just enjoying being out in nature and taking pictures.  I enjoyed the part about the gift for Karen.  Your Jim is definitely not very "into" your Karen.

I laughed at the part about Pam and the bit of song you threw in there.  It's very sweet to think about Jim still dreaming about a future with Pam.  (Oh, yeah, I'm a bit of a Jammer.)

Thanks for the shout-out.  I like to make people's days!

For a beta, some people mark themselves as beta-ers in their profiles.  I don't know if there's a way to request one from the powers at be at MTT, but you could check that out.  Also, if you are on TWoP (I only lurk, myself), people ask for beta-ers on the fanfic thread.  You actually do very well un-beta'd, though. 

Looking forward to seeing what happens with Karen at some point.  Willing to wait as it unfolds, though! 



Author's Response:

Haha, no, my Jim isn't into my Karen. Well, this is going to eventually be a JAM fic, so, I can't have them be all happy, now can I?

Yay someone else caught the lyrics. It just popped in my head.  And thenunfortionatly, got stuck in my head.

I had some betas for a previous fic, but most of them are busy for this week. So, maybe starting soon, I can get some. Or I may start browing random profiles. Most of my problems are with tense changes. It gets more obvious in the coming chapters. I already caught a few of them, but yeah.

I have a bit more written, and Karen is dealt with eventually.

Also, jut want to make sure you know, I did two chapters today. Since you replied to the first of two, just wanted to make sure. But it was two today, because I don't think I will be able to do any tomorrow. Depends on how fussy it is reconnecting my internet when I get back at school 

Reviewer: DayDreamBeliever Signed [Report This]
Date: March 17, 2007 09:05 am Title: Experimental Design

this fic is really great and i cant wait to see where it goes!  also, im a bit of an author myself so if you really do want a beta id do it for you!

Author's Response: Thanks. I am emailing you about being a beta... even if its just a second pair of eyes, it can't hurt

Reviewer: takemyhandx Signed [Report This]
Date: March 17, 2007 08:29 am Title: Unrealized Beauty

Hey I love this vreative side of Jim! Very cool! = ) Rating it a 10 btw <3 Sorry i have no money tyo spare for a camera haha

Author's Response: darn, well, reviews and ratings are still nice, even if its not a fancy new camera. I am like second away from posting the next chapter, so yay! iwas about to do it and then mom distracted me. so yeah. :)

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 16, 2007 11:05 am Title: Memories

I love the secret!  But why wouldn't he tell Karen?  Is it because he doesn't love her and never will and doesn't want to share more with her than he has to?  (Whoops, pull back, Kev!)  But it's great!  I'm enjoying your story.

Couple of things a beta probably would have found: 

It should be "he"  instead of  "him" for his friend and him had been walking along the tracks. Also "he and his friend" sounds better to me than "his friend and he". I'm not sure if one order is correct and one isn't, but if you say "his friend" first, then the mind immediately has to say "whose friend?" until you get to the "he". 

Unless Jim's friend's name is John, you referred to Jim as John.

Anyway, very nice!!  I'm going to submit this review, then go look at your pics. 



Author's Response:

Hum, why hasn't he told Karen. Your reason is as good as any. I think I have a reason in my head, but I haven't quite written that aspect yet... maybe I will explain it more, I dunno.

In regards to the he/him/friend stuff, that is how we were always taught to write it... not sure if it is correct, but yeah, it was using that phrasing and order and stuff like that. i always thought it sounded strange, but that is what my 3rd grade teacher taught us. who knows.

And yes, I named his friend John. Because I like the name John, and yeah. :)

Thanks so much for all your reviews, each one totally brightens my day! 

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: March 16, 2007 08:22 am Title: Lies Revealed

Oh no sounds like an angry Karen

Author's Response: Yep... I haven't written her reaction yet, but I think it will be fun fun fun!

Reviewer: SaveTheReceptionist Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15, 2007 03:55 pm Title: Lies Revealed

I go to summer camp, and I totally know what you're talking about. =] I still love it though.

But ANYWAYS. You have a good start here - I'm intrigued to see what happens next. More, please!

Author's Response:

Yeah, I love summer camp... most of the time the activites are sorta fun. But, yeah, it gets boring sometimes.

I have more written, so will be posting it tomorrow :) 

Reviewer: takemyhandx Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15, 2007 03:48 pm Title: Lies Revealed

No matter how much I hate Karen, I actually feel bad for her about that....I've kinda been in that situation, & I know how she feels! Very nice!! rating it 10!

Author's Response: I know. I think reading these fics here make me a lot more sympathetic towards her.

Reviewer: grapenutbeats Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15, 2007 03:45 pm Title: Lies Revealed

I like where this is heading... hope to see more :)

Author's Response: Ihave a bit more written, so will be posting it soon. Thanks!

Reviewer: injoy Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15, 2007 01:19 pm Title: Lies Revealed

pretty cool addition.  interested to see where this goes.

Author's Response: Thanks. I have a bit more written, and willbe posting it soon

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15, 2007 12:47 pm Title: Lies Revealed

I really like your "slow and descriptive" style.  I'm finding these very interesting.  I like Karen's thought process when she's deciding to go over to Mark's.  

I look forward to the next chapter! 



Author's Response:

this review = nearly complete and total happiness on my part :). so seriously, thanks (see, doesn't take a lot to make me happy.

the next two chapters are really really descriptive, and thats all i have written so far. it really develes into jim and jims secret, so hopefully those will be good also.

writing karens thoughts was surprising easy for these chapters. i thought it would be hard since i really don't find myself like karen, but its just, putting myself into her shoes and figuring how why she would act the way she has been, and just sort of going from there.

but yep, hopefully still will have the next chapter up tomorrow if all goes as planned.

thanks again! 

Reviewer: Maybe Once Signed [Report This]
Date: March 15, 2007 12:09 pm Title: Lies Revealed

Pam Patch....Dawesome.  I really like this so far....


Author's Response:

Haha, thanks. I really liked that phrase, it was ust a random thought I had.

Thanks for the review. more will be posted tomorrow hopefully 

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