Date: July 21, 2006 03:52 pm Title: So Close
Awwww, poor Pam was worried about Jim, and she couldn't go to sleep because she didn't know where he was. It is so sweet to know she cares so much for him. (I somehow think she would be worried for Roy too, but I can see why you made that story choice.)
Author's Response: Ahh, you know - I thought about your point, and if I was to re-write this story, I'd tweak it just a bit so she comes off just a tad less heartless, there. Thanks for the review!
Date: July 20, 2006 06:55 pm Title: So Close
I've told you so a few times - but what the hell.
I still love this. And it looks like there was no need to worry. You've gotten your point across. ;)
Author's Response: Hee, seems so. And hey, nothing wrong with repeat validation! ;-)
Date: July 20, 2006 03:52 pm Title: So Close
Great story. I liked how Pam couldn't go to sleep until she knew Jim was home but yet she had no trouble going to sleep before Roy got home. Based on her talking about her dad coming home, that is very telling!
Author's Response: Isn't it though? :) Thanks for the review, I'm so glad you liked it!
Date: July 20, 2006 02:33 pm Title: So Close
Nice! An unexpected but completely believable take on the "Rain" challenge.
Author's Response: Thank you! I actually started writing this long before the challenge - inspired by the wicked T-storms we were having in the Northeast - and it made my day to be able to fit it into a challenge. :)
Date: July 20, 2006 02:28 pm Title: So Close
I loved this. You might want to correct the formatting though, it's a little distracting. I know it's a pain in the ass, but it's worth it.
But great job with the story. I loved it.
Author's Response: ARGH. You have no idea how many times I have corrected the formatting and had it look fine, only to then... not be fine. Let me try again. Thanks for the review!