Date: April 12, 2007 11:07 pm Title: Red
Ooh, burn! Good thing he didn't call her Pammy...God only knows what could've happened then. I love this story. Great job, and please update soon. :)
Date: April 12, 2007 05:16 pm Title: Red
“Would you stop this whole poor-me-put-upon-Death-Cab-angry-boy-pout fest you‘ve got going?”
Love that line. Made me laugh real hard and it is so him.
Date: April 12, 2007 03:30 pm Title: Red
*guh*
That last line just hits the proverbial nail on the head, doesn't it?
But the question is, is it the final nail on the coffin or is it what they need to snap out of this angst fest?
I LOVE that she's angry. She's got a right to be angry.
Anyway, thanks so much for this.
cheers.
--Lex
Date: April 12, 2007 03:07 pm Title: Red
Whoa! SNAP! I love Strong Pam stories, and this chapter is excellent. And it's not just because you've got such a great handle on the characters and their dialogue. You've created some instantly classic images and lines, such as, "because he knew my favorite flavor of yogurt," and "I just didn't realize your love came with an expiration date."
Brilliant stuff. Bravo, and keep it up!
Date: April 12, 2007 02:09 pm Title: Red
This chapter is Red, so she's definitely his lobster.
This is very good. Poor Pam, listening to Michael spill out all this information! I love Oscar attempting to diffuse the tension; that's perfectly Oscar.
That final line is just wonderful!
Author's Response:
If that means they're going to get drunkenly married in Vegas, break up, have a kid together, and then finally get together in the last thirty seconds of the show, I think you may be onto something. Thank you for reading and reviewing so much!
Date: April 12, 2007 02:03 pm Title: Red
Ooooh. Perfect ending to Emboldened!Pam's speech. Finally she really is becoming the Fancy New Beesly - new clothes, new forthrightness, the beginnings of a new attitude. You go, girl!
Especially loved this line..."Would you stop this whole poor-me-put-upon-Death-Cab-angry-boy-pout fest you‘ve got going?" I love how she pointed out that others besides him have been hurt -- I think canon!Jim is absolutely clueless to that fact.
More, please! Can't wait to see Jim's reaction to THAT.
Author's Response: Hee, that was my favorite line too. He is just acting like such a sullen teenager, especially in TN. I'm glad you're liking it!
Date: April 12, 2007 01:49 pm Title: Red
“I just didn’t realize your love came with an expiration date.”
OMG if I could just hear her say that for realsies!! So good!!
I cannot wait to see his answer to THAT!
Date: April 12, 2007 12:37 pm Title: Red
I loved her sketching his neck. I can just totally picture it... at first I was like, its just a neck, but then as I read it more, it just was like, wow. all of this in like four sentences...
" Michael was off in his own little Michael-world" totally reminded me of Friends. just thought you should know.
I liked how Pam didn't really say why, but she did, why Jim had the black eye. It was because he knew it was Mixed Berry, but, its like, not saying Roy. It is a really interesting way to go about it.
OMG, amazing last line... I loved everything about it.
AND I TOTALLY believe Pam is his cheeseburger!! Is it wrong that I have been thinking about that video all day... because I love it... but, haha, seeing that line made me happy
Author's Response: It is hilarious to me that everyone knows what cheeseburger means! I am listening to it on my iPod right now, actually. It seems my long-time love of Friends is deeply ingrained in me, because I swear I don't realize I'm doing it all the time. Sorry if it took you out of the story:). Thank you for continuing to read.
Date: April 12, 2007 12:10 pm Title: Red
Wow. The last line- "I just didn't realize your love had an expiration date." Brilliant. Absolutely perfect. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response:
Doesn't it really seem like that is what basically happened? Like it was a limited time only offer, like the McRib? Thanks for reading!
8 [Report This]Date: April 12, 2007 12:05 pm Title: Red
It would be amazing if they actually had this conversation on the show. The two of them just need to duke it out and then have lots and lots of make up sex.
And yes, she is absolutely his cheeseburger. Fabulous job. Can't wait to see what you do with this.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading this! I'm glad you're liking it.