Date: March 31, 2007 08:29 am Title: Busted
haha, this was really clever use of the quotes. i recognized most, so it was like, whoa! but awesome
Author's Response: Thanks, it was fun to work with the quotes, but pretty funny how interchangeable they can be. I'm glad many are recognizable.
9 [Report This]Date: March 30, 2007 07:38 am Title: Busted
I really like the concept of this story (it happening so subtly just like so much of their relationship). You might want to work on formatting, though.
Author's Response: By formatting I'm assuming you mean what the next reviewer was talking about. It seems to be difficult to follow who is saying what. I had a feeling it might be. I will have to work on that. Thanks.
Date: March 30, 2007 07:36 am Title: Busted
This is such a cool idea, but I'm a little confused with what's going on -- partly because I had trouble keeping track of who was talking. I like how them getting together isn't some giant dramatic scene though. That's a nice change.
Author's Response: Yeah, as I had said, I knew in the back of my mind that this might be confusing. I struggled with it because I really am uncomfortable with the whole "he said, she said" deal, and even though there are ways around it, I would much prefer to find a way to make it clearer without using those types of phrases. In any case, I'm glad you liked the idea; it wasn't mine but I think everyone should try it because it was so much fun. Thanks for the response.