Date: April 17, 2007 07:35 am Title: Twisting the Knife
Haha. I like how you were talking about Jim not really being able to hate his competition. It made me think of two things - I think he was able to in Basketball with Roy. And for me, it wasn't about hating the competition. it was about hating myself. Whenever we were losing, I was pissed at myself - like, why did I let them get that goal. I am not getting off this field until I score another goal. This lead to a LOT of injuries for me, but, I was a star athlete. So, it all works out.
Okay, and then I read the rest of the paragraph and you mention Basketball (Yes, I comment as I go... I am odd. And I apparently don't even wait until i finish the paragraph)
I love your description of Pam in the break room and Jim's thoughts. It breaks my heart a bit more. Although, makes it better in a way. Because even though Jim was an ass, reading this makes it better... I don't really know how to explain it.
Oooh, I can't wait for the next chapter (and yes, I know it is already posted)
Author's Response:
"This lead to a LOT of injuries for me."
Yikes, what did you play? Field Hockey? Soccer? I'm sure you're on-field self-hatred is an interesting, but no doubt effective way to get an edge. I've always played soccer, and for me it's the fear of losing... I get so riled up thinking about how lousy I'm going to feel if we lose, and then I play better. Whatever works, right? Hey thanks for all the feedback!
Date: April 08, 2007 10:02 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
Wow. Dark!Angry!Jim. This was really excellent. I'm so glad there's another chapter right away.
The last little bit about it being a fun little world is maybe too dark for my taste. I love the line "He had twisted the knife in her, in Pam. Pam." There, he at least knows he was awful! He scared himself; he scared me a bit too. Are you channeling DinkinFlicka's Dark!Jim from "Dirt"? (The full title is something like And you can have it all, my dark empire of dirt.) Yikes!
So, I am curious to see what happens next, so I will go on to the next chapter!
Date: April 08, 2007 04:01 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
I think it's funny how we're writing the same story except your hot new guy is a badass and mine is a sweetheart. But we both have Jealous!Jim. My favorite, I like how mean your's is. Can't wait for the fall!
Author's Response: Hey thanks. I've always liked your work a lot, but I've been so busy writing that I've gotten behind on my reading. I just read your story and its really neat to compare the different ways we torture Angry New Halpert.
Date: April 08, 2007 11:05 am Title: Twisting the Knife
Cannot wait to see where you are going with this!
Date: April 07, 2007 09:31 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
*cue dramatic music*
I'm enjoying this. Good luck with further continuations!
Date: April 07, 2007 05:43 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
This rekindles all the hate I felt for Jim in that break room scene on Thursday...but it's really really well written. As least you make Jim's spite poetic :) Good job!
Date: April 07, 2007 04:50 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
oh man this is so depressing but so good at the same time. Love how you've gotten inside Jim's head and are exploring the dark side of him. You've captured his resignation and bitterness towards Pam really well, as well as his twisted enjoyment in intentionally hurting her. this is really good
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback -- much appreciated! Jim has been so hard to watch lately -- so cold to Pam (and Karen too for that matter). Anyway I finished this story with a healthy dose of wishful thinking applied. Thanks!
Date: April 07, 2007 04:32 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
I've never felt prouder to know what "regicide" was. And yes, it has everything to do with the fact that I heard it on The Simpsons once.
Anyway, this was great. There's been a bit of Jim-induced rage going on, and this is a nice little insight into why we're getting front row seats to the Cold!Jim show now. I can't wait for an update!
Date: April 07, 2007 04:13 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
Ok...I'm gonna have to look up regicide. But I LOVED this. There was something about that opening - talking about that killer instinct that Jim was never able to conjure artificially on the basketball court until THAT day. That was great. I also loved your description of what happened in the break room. Great stuff here. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: April 07, 2007 04:13 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
Ooh, this is a Nasty New Halpert. And I am wondering who came in, of course!
Date: April 07, 2007 03:45 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
wow, this was really good. way to explore the new evil jim. you really hit the nail on the head with this one. i love it
chelsea
ps. who is the stranger?
10 [Report This]Date: April 07, 2007 03:38 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
Wow, I actually knew what regicide was. -feels like a dork-
Anyways. I can definitely understand Jim here. I'm part of the minority that doesn't blame Jim for acting like a jerk in TN. Good writing, with the kiss in the beginning, and adding in basketball.
Hmm, I'm curious to the stranger now. Write quickly! =)
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback.. much appreciated! If you feel like a dork, I actually thought of the regicide line first, and had to write the whole story backwards from there, so I guess that makes me the uber-dork! Thanks again!
Date: April 07, 2007 03:34 pm Title: Twisting the Knife
Oh man. This was rough. But I can see him feeling this way -- hopefully subconsciously, because I really don't want Jim to be this harsh in canon. I interpret those same things as kind of a defense mechanism, but I bet subconsciously there is a little enjoyment there.
Who is the stranger? I'm totally wondering...
More, please! (And yes, I had to look up the word 'regicide'. *facepalm*)