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This is just brilliant and creative and I really don't have the words for it.

Wherever you are, I hope you're still writing.

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Starting a reread of this and had to register how much I adore it. This is great, creative storytelling at its best.

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Oh my god. So usually when I read a story that already has a ton of chapters/is finished, I just read it straight though and comment at the end. I literally just guffawed at the Miffy review. Omg. Spot on. Also this entire story was adorable.

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This story is AMAZING! I admit, I'm a bit dense so I didn't get and was confused at first. I caught onto it being Jim pretty fast but it took until I think chapter 6 until it dawned on me that Pam was a reviewed then I had to go back and read each of their inrteractions, just AWESOME. I admit, I never caught on to Kelly, Phullis or Toby but I did wonder when in the review the reviewer who now I assume was Toby, put in the warning about the contract with the production company. BTW, I admit that it breaks my heart A LOT to think that Jim would have really went to Katy's just for sex after the Booze Cruise just because he was broken hearted. Actually, I don't even picture Katy riding home with him and I picture her truly despising him. Yours is a really unique take on that situation. I truly ended up loving this story, LOVED when Pam gave up pretenses and said Halpert I'm coming over to kiss you in three seconds. OH and I also really loved that Pam got to really explain to Jim what was on her mind when she left the wedding with Roy. I mean, I ALWAYS have thought that Jim's reaction to the was ridiculous. I've always kinda wanted to have him in front of me (yeah, I know he isn't real) and say, you have a girlfriend who you danced with and rubbed in Pam's face all night completely breaking her and you know it because you saw the look on her face, and I think you were secretly glad at her devastation. Who are YOU to even care WHO Pam gets together with whether you like him or not. Just because you're plaing your games with Karen you cannot expect Pam to wait! WHEW! Glad I got that out of my system. Sorry it had to happen in your review! Anyhow, LOVE LOVE LOVE this! You are a great writer!

You come up with such interesting stories and I really liked I didnt catch on until chapter 3 but it was great guessing and wondering who was who.

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Wow.  I must say, GodInThisChilis, you come up with the MOST intriguing story premises!  I am plowing my way through all your back fiction while waiting for the next chapter of Observer Effect. 

I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE your stories!

*grins*
That's...perfect, really.
The ONLY thing I ask for is a copy of Toby's notes. Because that would simply be AWESOME.
Hee.
Thanks so much!!
cheers.
--Lex

Author's Response:

Glad you liked it and I think I'd be afraid to read Toby's notes: ) Thanks again!

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That was nice.  Good job :D  I enjoy the quirky-feeling of the story and the way you inject new situations into the same basic stuff.  Keep writing!

Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate your comments and I'm glad you found it quirky.

Aww, it's all finished! But it's hard to be sad when the ending is so lovely. They got it together! Excellent. And thanks for the explanations of when/if they knew - it makes everything come together perfectly. Silly old Jim! Though, as I've said, if I were him, I would have almost giving up hoping that Pam would come through for me (which is not to say I don't love/trust Pam because I DO! Just for Jim's point of view, it would be a little hard to keep hoping). I know I've said this many times, but I LOVE this story. It was fantastically unique, it was heartfelt and it was really well-written. Thanks for every single chapter! I'll miss it.

(Oh, and I know this is random, but I'm not a guy. I just thought suddenly that people might think I'm a guy because of the name, but I'm not. Yeah, that was an extremely random comment of me to make, but I just woke up and my mind's kind of jumbled right now.)

Yay, the resolution we were all expecting/hoping! I'm glad that you cut away from the review/response format for the epilogue, because the whole time I was wondering how you'd have this resolved - didn't seem like they'd be admitting all of their true feelings and identities in that moderately impersonal space. Anyway, it worked well :)

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm so glad you liked the ending. I was nervous about changing the format.

This was really great for your first story! I loved it, keep up the good work :-)

Author's Response: Thanks for your encouragement.  I appreciate it.

Teehee! "NeckWatcher's" "review" made me shriek with laughter, in a really excited way. Yay, she's finally making a move! This is excellent. Ah... Jim. Hmm, and no reply to her last review? Strange that. Oooh, I really liked the way he just wrote what he wanted to happen, because I can imagine Jim thinking, "Well, this is the closest I'm ever going to get to happiness". Yay for Pam, though! I should chastise Jim for being "that dense", but she hasn't really given him much reason to hope, maybe, sometimes in the past, so it makes sense. Oh, and even if it doesn't happen like he wrote it, I liked what "Jim" wrote in his "story" about just walking out of the office together. That would have been lovely. Okay, I just woke up so this review is a little disjointed, but I loved this chapter and I love this story!

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I always look forward to your reviews.