9 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2011 11:39 am Title: exactly what you've waited for
Azlin, not sure if you'll see this since this story is an oldie-but-goodie, but I just wanted you to know how much I enjoy revisiting it now and again. It looks like I never reviewed it, which is truly egregious. I must have first read it way early in my fic-reading days. I never tire of first-date fic and this is one of the best.
Date: May 29, 2007 10:28 am Title: exactly what you've waited for
So, about an hour ago, I was like, okay, I will read one fanfic and then get to real life... and yet, here I am, an hour later. But really, this will be the last one. I need to get to target and the post office. And so, I decided since this really will be the last one, I needed to make it something good.
I don't lie awake with memories, I lie awake with daydreams... way to often. Its this show I tell ya. This show and fanfic. Suddenly, I have to just spend days and days dreaming about Jim... and just everything about this show. But mainly Jim. And there is a lot of grinning on my end. Hehe. I was grinning just reading about Pam grinning. I am such a dork.
"Just Jim." Okay, so I totally did a Just Jack/Will and Grace flash when I read that!!! AHAHAHAH
GAH! So smiling!!!
Yes, so my face has a huge smile, and a weird little giggle is coming out of my mouth, and my hands where making wierd little movements until I calmed them down enough to type this, so I consider this chapter a sucess...
Author's Response:
Okay, since I don't mind outting myself as a total dork, can I just say that your saying "I needed to make it something good" in reference to picking my story totally made my day!
Also, I think weird little hand movements may be one of the early warning signs of hot dog fingers, so if you start feeling the urge to dip your digits in ketchup be sure to get that checked out. ;)
Date: May 28, 2007 09:10 pm Title: exactly what you've waited for
"I love you, Jim. I love you, I love you, I love you..." She smiled again and rolled over onto her side. This was exactly what she had waited for.
Perfect, this entire story. Don't worry about it being too sappy at the end, woman; Jim and Pam are dating for chrissakes, sappiness and tears of joy are to be expected and encouraged! Hee.
Wonderful job with this, Azlin!
Author's Response:
Oh good! I can definitely do sappy, but I didn't know if I'd gone overboard on this one, so I'm glad you thought it was okay. Thanks for the review!
Date: May 25, 2007 12:08 pm Title: exactly what you've waited for
Hooray for Pam's stream of consciousness! It's really lovely, and I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.
I think she's lying in bed, not laying in bed, but I wouldn't bet my life on it or anything.
And your unbeta'd stuff has fewer mistakes than most people's beta'd stuff, so, I think you have a pretty good eye for those things.
Author's Response: Yep. You're totally right. It's lying not laying, because you lay something down, but to lie down is to recline/rest. Anyway, I knew that, but it's one of those things I always forget to check, so thanks for pointing it out. I'm so glad you liked it!
8 [Report This]Date: May 20, 2007 08:15 pm Title: exactly what you've waited for
"And when five o'clock came, her whole body felt like it was fluttering around in swirling circles on the inside and she couldn't be sure that she wouldn't just float away as soon as she stood up to gather her things. But then he looked over at her and smiled and even though the fluttering got worse, she knew for a fact that his pull on her would be more than enough to keep her on the ground." Those lines were such a beautiful way to put her feelings into words. PS I don't find your style confusing at all! My thoughts are always wandering so it's quite normal for me to read!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I'm so glad you liked it. My thoughts tend to wander too, and I do a lot of my journal writing in this style, but I wasn't sure if it would work for an audience that was bigger than just me, so I'm glad it wasn't too confusing.
Date: May 19, 2007 01:06 pm Title: exactly what you've waited for
I love it. It's ok that it's wandering (it wasn't hard to read) because I am sure that's what was really going through her head after. I love how she's crying for happiness and how she knows how honest she was being all day. Absolutely lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm so glad you liked it and that it wasn't too confusing. I really like writing this new version of Pam. It's nice to see her so happy, you know?
Date: May 19, 2007 05:40 am Title: exactly what you've waited for
Today she sang them as a victory anthem.
Oh, yay! Gorgeous. The "wandering" style is spot-on. It isn't confusing at all, and it captures the tumult of her emotions perfectly. So pretty!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad the style worked. I was nervous when I posted it, but the more I wrote in it the more I enjoyed it!
Date: May 19, 2007 05:23 am Title: exactly what you've waited for
Hey, don't be so hard on yourself. This is really well written, and I personally love the almost stream of consciousness feel to it. I had no trouble following the style you'd written in, and I think you've captured Pam's thoughts and experiences perfectly. Okay, I'm off to read the second chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm so glad you like the style and Pam's characterization. She's a lot more fun to write now that FNB is showing her true colors! Thanks again for the review!
Date: May 18, 2007 10:12 pm Title: exactly what you've waited for
I just love the idea of them looking at each other for the first time without having to worry about what anyone else thinks. YES! I have to say, I got a little teary-eyed :)
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I started this story as my own personal form of catharsis, just trying to process everything, and I'll admit to a few tears along the way too.