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Reviewer: Colette Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 05, 2006 05:30 am Title: Chapter 29: Conflict Resolution

Wow. It's 8:30 am, and after reading this, I think I need a drink too.

Seriously, this was really effective - you so captured the impending sense of doom and devastation Jim could feel in his worst moments as the wedding approaches. Very dark, but very well done. The part where she holds him and he sleeps with his head in her lap was especially moving. So so sad.



Author's Response:

I am so glad you liked it!  I know it was really dark - darker than they'd ever go on the show because it probably wouldn't even be remotely plausible - but....I don't know; I like exploring the tragic undercurrent between these two.  Mainly because I believe they'll have a happy ending.  And cause it's fun. :o)

Yeah, when I was writing about him sleeping with his head in her lap, I was thinking, wow, what I would not give....

Reviewer: nomadshan Signed [Report This]
Date: September 04, 2006 11:47 pm Title: Chapter 18: The Client

You sneaky, sneaky girl.

 I was all, "Wait, that's not how the dialogue went", then "Is she talking about a dream omelette?", then "OMG she's kissing him!  Whaaaaa????!!!!"

Hee. Thanks for the post-angst jammy goodness :)



Author's Response: I could not stand it any longer, so I just did a very naughty, sort of against the rules thing.  :o)

Reviewer: nomadshan Signed [Report This]
Date: September 04, 2006 11:22 pm Title: Chapter 16: Boys and Girls

Oooo, Pam's hug on stiff, unresponsive Jim was really effective.

And also, "brown basket weave"?  TieLove!!!



Author's Response: Oh yeah - you have yourself to thank for that one!  :o)

Reviewer: Token Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 09:02 pm Title: Chapter 27: Performance Review: part II

Yay - Pam's denial is starting to crack! I am SO anxious for your Casino Night chapter.

I really hope you're going to continue as the new season starts - it seems like there's a huge opportunity for more angst this year!



Author's Response: Thanks!  And I don't know about keeping it up - I have such a single-minded manner that I get so distracted by thinking about what I'm going to write that I have a hard time getting anything else done!

Reviewer: Token Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 25: Drug Testing

God you make me want Jim ... I mean more than I already did -- which is amazing. You did a great job of really exploring the depths of Pam's denial this chapter and while I admire Jim's restraint, I can't wait until he breaks.

Reviewer: Luna Mystik Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03, 2006 07:43 am Title: Chapter 27: Performance Review: part II

Why do you insist on making me cry at 10:45 in the morning? Great job, seriously. I'm going to miss Jonathan, maybe you could bring him back someday...?

Reviewer: kaystar Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 06:01 pm Title: Chapter 27: Performance Review: part II

This line really shows how much in denial Pam is:

"It was that realization that made the tears come as she clung to him desperately, not wanting to let him go, seized with the insane urge to beg him to move here, just so he could keep an eye on Jim after she got married. "   I love how Jonathan is trying to help facilitate a breakthrough.  Makes my heart break for Jim.

Reviewer: Lissa_Maylee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 04:05 pm Title: Chapter 27: Performance Review: part II

Pam, Pam, Pam...how can you be so blind?  With two hot guys to convince you?  *loves Jonathan*



Author's Response: Ha!  I love your little *loves Jonathan* note. :o) Yeah, I'm thinking that between Scott Foley and John Krasinski, I'd just...do whatever. 

Reviewer: halfbaked Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 12:49 pm Title: Chapter 26: Performance Review - part I

I'm enjoying seeing Pam's feet being held to the fire. Can't wait to read Part 2.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 12:09 pm Title: Chapter 27: Performance Review: part II

You're killing us. Really.

Author's Response: I'm hoping that's a good thing.....?  'Cause there's more where it came from.  I'm watching the JK Without  A Trace episode now, so....yeah, stubbly, angsty, drunk Jim coming soon.  :o)

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 11:49 am Title: Chapter 27: Performance Review: part II

Tears in my eyes on this chapter. WOW

Author's Response: Yay! I worried that it might be too over-the-top....

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 11:43 am Title: Chapter 26: Performance Review - part I

Oh I so loved this chapter. The humor and the coversation were wonderful.

Author's Response: Yay!  Thanks so much!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 11:06 am Title: Chapter 26: Performance Review - part I

I love this chapter, I love that it's a two-parter, I love Jonathan and  I absolutely love the last line!  What a great idea to introduce Jim's brother.  Double the hotness and lankiness.

Author's Response: Ah yes -- double the deliciousness.  Seriously.  It's too much to think of JK and S. Foley in the same general vicinity of one another.

Reviewer: nomadshan Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 09:10 am Title: Chapter 15: Office Olympics

Wow, way to give away the ending, spoiler!  LOL

This chapter is just really good. What Ryan did and Pam's reaction were so real when I saw the ep, and you've captured perfectly how she and Jim would have felt about it.

Ooo, and the conversation about his collection, and her kiss,...

And her recent admission to herself about The Love!  I seriously gasped a little there.

Oh, girl7, you're ramping it up. I'm buckling my seatbelt, and clicking on "Next"!



Author's Response:

Eeee!  I'm glad you're enjoying it! I had to give a little future glimpse of happiness because sometimes I feel so damned guilty for torturing them the way that I do.  ...Well, that and the fact that I'm just a Jim/Pam whore, basically.

Thanks for the feedback!

Reviewer: Lissa_Maylee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 08:16 am Title: Chapter 26: Performance Review - part I

Oooh...I love Johnathan, and the dynamic there.

"the sexy-lanky leaning thing"--I know exactly what you're talking about there, Pam, and I certainly wouldn't be able to resist it!



Author's Response: Yay!  And I wouldn't either -- of course, if I were Pam, there would BE no story, because I'd have left Roy for him around about episode 2, season one.  :o)

Reviewer: kelly518 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 08:15 am Title: Chapter 26: Performance Review - part I

okay, Scott Foley and John Krasinski together is just too much.   But he would be perfect as Jim's brother.  I hope we see more of him.  I just loved this chapter!!!!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it!  I would seriously PAY to see them cast SF as his brother.  Sigh.  But then, it might just be too much.....

Reviewer: Luna Mystik Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 07:33 am Title: Chapter 26: Performance Review - part I

Yes, this totally works. I'm even a little jealous of Pam, sitting there with her two Jims. I think you created the perfect character to push Pam...enough like Jim to put her immediately at ease, but not Jim so he doesn't mind pushing to find out what he wants.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the thoughtful feedback!  (For all of it, actually -- you are so great!)  Yeah, I'm totally jealous of her.  I think I'd just go slack jawed and drooling if I was ever in a room with JK and Scott Foley.  WOW.

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 07:19 am Title: Chapter 26: Performance Review - part I

Poor Jim- it's obvious to everyone!

Author's Response: Ah yes, poor Jim.  Isn't it a shame we can't all just make it up to him?  .....What?

Reviewer: Colette Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 06:33 am Title: Chapter 26: Performance Review - part I

Once you end a chapter with a cliff hanger, it's incumbent upon you to update (new Fanfic Rules of Conduct, section 14A.3.1.) Seriously, please do!

And coincidentally, I'm also finishing a chapter in which Pam gets some unequivocal advice from an unlikely source - though in a v. different context - so maybe we're starting a trend...I like it!



Author's Response:

Listen sister, your wish is my command. :o) 

I have GOT to go read your fic now!  And I love it that we keep having these parallel ideas -- flatters me to think we may think alike!

Reviewer: Kath Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 05:49 am Title: Chapter 26: Performance Review - part I

Keep going...  i LOVE this story!!

Author's Response: Yay!

Reviewer: proposals Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 02, 2006 05:18 am Title: Chapter 26: Performance Review - part I

Jonathen is the poor man's Jim and clearly so awesome. I love that he's grilling Pam like this! I love this because Jim is always so alone in things, so it's great to see someone that's on his side.

I giggled so hard at the "sexy-lanky leaning thing." What a perfect way to describe that. I think it's getting a little warm in here just thinking about it.



Author's Response:

Oh good, I'm glad you like it!  And yeah, I couldn't resist the reference to his sexy-lanky-leaning, because....damn.

Reviewer: nomadshan Signed [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 11:07 pm Title: Chapter 14: The Fire

Love that they both think they need to try harder, but at the wrong things.

Reviewer: nomadshan Signed [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 10:54 pm Title: Chapter 13: Valentine's Day

Nice! Oh, yay for Jim. And lucky Pam. This is an insipid review. Sorry. But yay! On to the next chapter :)

Reviewer: LittleKidLover Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 02:49 pm Title: Chapter 25: Drug Testing

Definitely my favorite chapter! You're a great writer, keep it up :)

Reviewer: aggiegurl22 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 02:44 pm Title: Chapter 22: The Secret

I have the most ridiculous grin on my face right now. This made me all kinds of happy!

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