9 [Report This]Date: September 21, 2008 09:02 am Title: Chapter 2
Aw I love larissa :(
Date: June 02, 2007 06:45 am Title: Chapter 2
Oooh. Very cool AU. I can totoally envision this happening. It seems a very plausible reason for Jim to end up at Dunder-Mifflin. And since JK played college ball, it totally fits.
To say "I can't wait for more" would be an understatement. More, please!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you think it works as a story. I mean I can see how most of those guys could have ended up in the paper sellin' biz, but Jim just seems out of place. Hope you like the next bits
Date: June 01, 2007 11:29 pm Title: Chapter 2
Can't wait to see what happens next. I love how Jim's mom already loves Pam. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. But really, who wouldn't be smitten with Pam? Can you imagine how Jim must have described her to his mom all these years? Maybe I should put some of that in.
9 [Report This]Date: June 01, 2007 09:58 pm Title: Chapter 2
I'm hooked. Really like this story a lot and look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. The encouragement really helps
Date: June 01, 2007 09:19 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is just so good. I love how you've given this backstory to why Jim ended up at Dunder Mifflin, and how fate sort of intervened to change how things went at The Merger.
My one little nitpick is that I think Jim's Dad is alive; at Safety Training, he said "Um, might even bring my parents tomorrow, to the matinee."
I'm looking forward to what happens next.
Author's Response: Still alive, huh? Sorry I missed that. I guess my AU just became a little more A. Thanks for reviewing and pointing that out. I'm really interested in getting better at this, so any comments I get are really valuable.
Date: June 01, 2007 08:25 pm Title: Chapter 2
I love this, great twist
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
Date: June 01, 2007 08:09 pm Title: Chapter 2
woo hoo as a future Temple alum i have to say yay to the shout out, this is interesting...def a neat concept, but you may want to be a little careful with Larissa, she seems a little like a Mary Sue, but maybe you'll fix that in the next few chapters can't wait to read more....
Author's Response: Thanks for the constructive criticism! I hope the next chapter helps make the character more believable.
Date: June 01, 2007 07:53 pm Title: Chapter 2
OMG!! Keep it coming!
Author's Response:
Hope you like how the story goes. Thanks for reviewing.