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Reviewer: Alex Wert Signed [Report This]
Date: June 26, 2007 05:59 pm Title: By the DVD section, past the Playstation/Xbox Display...

Bwahahahahaha.

Ahem.

Bwahaha.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: June 26, 2007 05:13 pm Title: By the DVD section, past the Playstation/Xbox Display...

"The woman who was once their boss doing unspeakable acts in her bedroom with her husband...who was still their boss." I never saw the picture switch coming...too funny! After this I bet Jan invests in her own photo printer!

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: June 26, 2007 07:13 am Title: By the DVD section, past the Playstation/Xbox Display...

Too, too funny!  Oh, to be a fly on the wall when Jim and Pam open those photos.... :-)

Reviewer: feared_or_loved Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: June 26, 2007 06:08 am Title: By the DVD section, past the Playstation/Xbox Display...

I think this has been my favorite chapter so far.  Work it, Jan!

Reviewer: kgarrett Signed [Report This]
Date: June 25, 2007 11:59 pm Title: By the DVD section, past the Playstation/Xbox Display...

That was just hilarious. I was laughing out loud at the end. If I wasn't enjoying the chapter so much, I might have caught on before the end. Great job.

Reviewer: desert island Signed [Report This]
Date: June 25, 2007 11:33 pm Title: By the DVD section, past the Playstation/Xbox Display...

Haha. So perfectly Jan. And I just love the Jan/Jim relationship; you've written it perfectly here. And made Michael and Jan happy in their strange way. Well done!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 25, 2007 10:44 pm Title: By the DVD section, past the Playstation/Xbox Display...

Freaky Jan.  OMFG.  This sounds totally like her.

Reviewer: larrymcg Signed [Report This]
Date: June 25, 2007 09:40 pm Title: By the DVD section, past the Playstation/Xbox Display...


Heh. I have a feeling that Jim and Pam will stop at the first "compromising position". Actually I hope he sees them and recognizes the mistake before she looks at them, lest not both parents be scarred for life.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: June 22, 2007 08:54 pm Title: Plastic cups, plates, forks, spoons...and oh dear, knives....

Hee!  You used the word 'inseminate'!!  This series is really great.  I adore married Pam & Jim, working through married people stuff.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: June 22, 2007 08:35 pm Title: Plastic cups, plates, forks, spoons...and oh dear, knives....

Aww.  What a nice ending.  Jim saying it could take many many tries reminds me of a bit from The Alliance: "But listen, I'm going to have to talk to her a lot. All right? And there may be chatting, and giggling."

Up until the end, I thought maybe Pam was already pregnant, and that's why she was: a) moody, and b) so upset about his reaction!

I laughed out loud when she said he didn't want to have another baby with her!  Pam, you couldn't be more wrong!

I'm glad there will be some more! 

Reviewer: bealsa Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21, 2007 08:29 pm Title: Plastic cups, plates, forks, spoons...and oh dear, knives....

This was so great: Pam turned and planted on the phoniest and biggest smile she could muster. "Karen! Hey! How are you?"

I love how women can do that. We'll be absolutely pissed, but if we run into someone or the phone rings it's instant big fake smile. Amazing.

I love this series! 

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: June 21, 2007 03:12 pm Title: Plastic cups, plates, forks, spoons...and oh dear, knives....

"Tension level down, heart rate back to normal, collision and impending catfight avoided."  Great line!  I loved that Jim helped keep the conversation where Pam felt comfortable. How awkward to run into her when they were fighting!

Reviewer: luchy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21, 2007 12:47 pm Title: Plastic cups, plates, forks, spoons...and oh dear, knives....

this story is just so cute :)

Reviewer: khand3stooges Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21, 2007 07:34 am Title: Bread Aisle

I love this story sooo much.  Each chapter is incredible.  I hope they run into many, many more people.

Reviewer: redziggy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21, 2007 06:27 am Title: Plastic cups, plates, forks, spoons...and oh dear, knives....

Yayy! You updated. I'm a really big fan of this fic. I love it, so well written and you've done a really good job of capturing all the character. This was such a good fight, very well written and so believable. I can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: Semby Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21, 2007 03:51 am Title: Plastic cups, plates, forks, spoons...and oh dear, knives....

Oh, this was great. I love Karen in this, slightly surprised at how far they've come so soon, but not bitter at all, and moving on healthily in her own life - awesome.

Reviewer: larrymcg Signed [Report This]
Date: June 20, 2007 10:35 pm Title: Plastic cups, plates, forks, spoons...and oh dear, knives....

That was really nice. I love your characterization of Karen. Good job!

Reviewer: Semby Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11, 2007 09:11 pm Title: Clean Up, Aisle 10, I repeat....Clean Up, Aisle 10....

These are all really great so far - you've done a great job of showing how these little supposedly insignificant meetings can turn into something more meaningful - with Katy and Roy just getting a look at their past and the relationships/lives that got away from them, and Ryan and Meredith actually learning from these moments and maybe making something better of themselves in the future. Great stuff!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: June 11, 2007 07:22 pm Title: Clean Up, Aisle 10, I repeat....Clean Up, Aisle 10....

I just love that this story shows what an awesome dad Jim is -and what a wonderful marriage they have, and what great advice that Jim gives. 

Reviewer: bealsa Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11, 2007 12:11 pm Title: Somewhere between the toothpaste, the hemmoroid cream, and EPT tests

Way to mix it up with Ryan's POV. Keeps us on our toes :) I love how you portray Jim in this story and in your others. Very good! 

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11, 2007 11:44 am Title: Clean Up, Aisle 10, I repeat....Clean Up, Aisle 10....

I had to come re-review to say:  don't even think that your "Office Space" reference got by me, because it didn't.  Hey, how much 'flair' are you wearing today?

Reviewer: Fliz0nToast Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11, 2007 09:05 am Title: Clean Up, Aisle 10, I repeat....Clean Up, Aisle 10....

I just read your response to my review, and I wanted to let you know that I am totally okay with the similar wavelengths.

I think that's why I'm enjoying your story so much.

Super Wal-Mart is a great breeding ground for stories, but I absolutely hate going there. :)

Besides I would say that our stories aren't all that similar, just the setting and the running into people.  Mine are just meant to be silly, absurd even, but I feel like yours strike a more serious, heartfelt chord.

I love this and can't wait to read the fifth installment.

And your story has made me want to finish mine. :)

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11, 2007 12:15 am Title: Clean Up, Aisle 10, I repeat....Clean Up, Aisle 10....

Nice!  I really like the T-shirt and the conversation with Pam! 

It's nice you had him meet up with Meredith; I feel like she had "screen time"! 

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11, 2007 12:07 am Title: Somewhere between the toothpaste, the hemmoroid cream, and EPT tests

Good chapter! 

I was confused very briefly; I wasn't expecting a Ryan POV!  But it was great to see Ryan's thoughts, particularly about Kelly. 

Jim in his PJs was a fun image; I've been in Jim's "must buy kiddie medicine" state - no fun.  I liked Pam's call to Jim also and Jim saying of course he knew where to find it!

I like that Kelly's going to get flowers, but I also thought Ryan's "she'll just have to wait" thoughts were pretty amusing.

Fun story. 

Reviewer: invis Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10, 2007 10:50 pm Title: Clean Up, Aisle 10, I repeat....Clean Up, Aisle 10....

Oh, Meredith.  It's probably good she passed out right away or she might've molested Jim.  ;)

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