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Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 07:02 pm Title: Chapter 1

This story was utterly delicious, too. Your words painted such beautiful scenes in my head as I read it.  I love that you made them so normal, still a bit of jealousy, some anger, some teasing at work - but above all else, all the love in the world. And hot, hot sex.

Author's Response: Exactly - they are normal (ok, maybe a little better looking than average...) Seriously, I think that's what makes them so relatable - and how much they love each other so real. Thanks for reading and reviewing, kaystar.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 06:56 pm Title: Chapter 1

One word:  yummy : ) 

Author's Response: Three words: thanks so much, NanReg!

Reviewer: bossbeth Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 06:36 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh, that was beyond satisfying.  And so well written.  It made my heart ache, in a good way.

Author's Response: Aw, the good kind of heart ache...my favorite. Thanks so much for the kind review, bossbeth.

Reviewer: Paper Jam Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 06:19 pm Title: Chapter 1

‘Can I kiss you for a little bit?’ his voice was low and raw.

*jaw falls open at the awesome*

 

 

(I'll be back with a real review later.)



Author's Response: That seems to be the line. Cool. And back later? You're going to spoil me (which works for me, LOL.) Thanks Paper Jam.

Reviewer: Maybe Once Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 05:14 pm Title: Chapter 1

I love this story so much that I was forced to make spaghetti for dinner.   It was delicious!

 You have such a gift for just getting these characters in such a believable way....and then you show them in situations that we can only guess at....(read:  naked) You rock my world, girlie.



Author's Response: Well, this review rocks my world! Nothing better than hearing they come across as believable - and if I can make them naked too, well...win, win (win.) Yum, spaghetti. Thanks, you!

Reviewer: jamfan99 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 04:29 pm Title: Chapter 1

Colette, that was absolutely fabulous! I really don't have the words to say how great that was. Every tiny detail rang so true to the characters. Plus, hot too! Bravo!

And congrats on the ribbon. Verrry [/Jim] well deserved!



Author's Response: So glad it rang true for you jamfan99. Thanks so much for reviewing.

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 03:33 pm Title: Chapter 1

Ok, so right now I'm sitting in Logan Airport waiting for my daughter's flight from France to arrive. So I decide to check my Blackberry for some new fic on MTT.
And well now you've got me all choked up and teary-eyed with this lovely story, and I hope my mascara isn't running, a la Kelly,
Essentially, I have really nothing to add that hasn't already been said by others. But I can totally feel Jim's sense of desperation here, that it simply HAS to work out with Pam, because he's chosen her as the focal point of his future. Pam, of course, is still growing into FNB, and moments of insecurity are bound to crop up, especially early on, especially if Karen is still around.
Ok, I'll shut up now, and simply say I adore everything you write!

Author's Response: First - hope your daughter's trip home goes smoothly. Lucky girl! And absolutely - this is IT for Jim. She's just the one. Call me a big sap, but I find that indescribably romantic. (Oh no! Now I'm making myself cry. This has got to stop.) And yes, FNB may have some residual insecurities to get past, but she will. And I think regular bowls of spaghetti will help. Thanks so much EverybodyHurts!

Reviewer: larrymcg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 03:14 pm Title: Chapter 1

That was amazing. It was hot, but even more importantly, it felt real and in character for both of them. Great job.

Author's Response: Real and in character...the best praise of all. Thank you so much, larrymcg. And, being featured in your story? An honor ;-)

Reviewer: dundiefromgod Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 03:11 pm Title: Chapter 1

Posted for an hour and already a blue ribbon! Well deserved I might say as well. I really enjoy how and how well you write Jim and Pam. They're not invincible to the pitfalls that other normal couples go through, yet their determination to love each other and make it work pulls them through. Really well done.

Author's Response: Very well put - they're only human beans, not romance novel characters...and all the more interesting for it, IMO. Glad you liked the portrayals of Jim and Pam. Many thanks, dundiefromgod!

Reviewer: batman29 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 02:25 pm Title: Chapter 1

very nice!

Author's Response: Thanks, batman29!

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 02:18 pm Title: Chapter 1

colette -

I love you.

Do I tell you I love you enough?  Do you know that I really mean it when I do?  And if I say it in the middle of reading your story does that count?

PS:  I'm not gay. [/Pam]



Author's Response:

xoxoxo -

Please pass the gravy. I really mean it.

Love you too, sugar. And thanks so much, as ever, for the wonderful review, and for making me laugh when I read it. 

 

 

 

Reviewer: supergirlsudz Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 02:15 pm Title: Chapter 1

Honey, Greg Daniels should be calling you - for TIPS! I will add to the chorus of praise, what an amazing story. There is something so minimalistic (in a good way) about your prose. It's like every word and every sentence was carefully crafted. Every single word was chosen for a reason. And "Can I kiss you for a little bit?" Melts my heart...

Author's Response: Hee (hey, GD, have your people get in touch with my people. We'll talk.) Thrilled by what you said re: word choice - that, and phrasing, are really important to me when I write (sometimes to an insane degree) so it means a lot. And, as I said below, that's kind of the line that hits me too. So glad it resonated with you too. Thanks so much, supergirlsudz.

Reviewer: Susan M Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 01:59 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh? Are we gonna do this?

‘Seriously, Jim…maybe I’m just not awesome enough…’
‘I didn’t love her,’


Oh hell, yeah we're gonna do this!  I just wished I had something more intelligent to say than wow, but WOW!  The voices are just perfect; angsty, intense and sexy as hell.

And then...

‘Can I kiss you for a little bit?’

Yeah. I'm dead. I want this on my teevee in September! :-)!

Author's Response: Yup. Did it. And, okay, I'll admit (but, ssshhh...just between you and me) 'Can I kiss you for a little bit' is the line that gets to me too. Thanks, as always, for reading and commenting, Susan M.

Reviewer: oobadnama Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 01:47 pm Title: Chapter 1

Colette, you have killed me. I mean that in the best way possible, naturally, but Jesus, this was.. amazing? beautiful? brilliant? so utterly good? Yeah, all of the above.

My favorite line: "I fucking need this to work." Because gah. Yes. Of course he does. That just killed me, and I'm not even sure why but just.. so good.

So, somewhere in all of my babbling, you'll find that this story is so ridiculously good and you're so amazingingly good at this writing game. I'm humbled by yet another gem and I add it to my favorites.. again.



Author's Response: If I was the blushing type, I'd be beet red now. So sorry if I killed you - but I hear there are a lot of Jims in heaven ;-) Many thanks, oobadnama (and being favorited is the cherry on top.)

Reviewer: Abigail Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 01:46 pm Title: Chapter 1

OMG That was just....WOW!  It's hard to believe how sexy that was, but yet I could still picture Jim and Pam as Jim and Pam.  You are an amazing writer!

Author's Response: Saying you could picture them is the best thing I could hear. Thanks so much, Abigail!

Reviewer: StarryDreamer Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 01:41 pm Title: Chapter 1

So about 2/3 of the way through this story, I actually stopped and said (out loud and to... I guess my computer?) "God you're a good writer" (which is btw, directed to you, not at my computer for the record) So fantastically woven, and the pasta being ordinary and Jim and Pam sorta being ordinary too... perfection!

Author's Response: Wow, how flattered am I to have made you talk to your computer? (Now, if you say it answered, I'm going to start worrying!) And yeah, absolutely - ordinary doesn't have to mean boring ;-) I like 'woven' too, because I do kind of think of writing stories as trying to weave all these different threads and ideas together. Thank you so much, StarryDreamer!

Reviewer: Inanna3 Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 01:41 pm Title: Chapter 1

You do such a great job of transmitting the feel of the kind of indeterminate fight that causes real tension, and how hard it is to defuse. I actually tensed up myself while reading!

I also love all the (pitch-perfect) details of life in the office for Jim&Pam, the couple. 

I seem to vaguely recall there may have been some sexy stuff in there, too... oh, yes. Definitely. ;)



Author's Response: That's precisely it - that tension that you can't identify exactly, can't quite diffuse. At least not verbally (ahem.) So glad to hear that came across. Thank you so much, Inanna3. Much appreciated.

Reviewer: collardgreens Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 01:38 pm Title: Chapter 1

that was really... I'm kind of at a loss for words. I mean good doesn’t cut it Amazing is to lie brashy if thats even a word. It was soft and descriptive and warm and I wanted to like I dunno live in their love, even their fights are good. jesus. 

Author's Response: I don't know if it's a word, but I'll take it! Soft, descriptive and warm? I'm thrilled. Thanks so much, collardgreens!

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 01:26 pm Title: Chapter 1

Well, this was some goooood lovin'. ;)  You made it a very believable fight and I have the idea that they wouldn't necessarily know how to fight with each other since they both have a way of not expressing what they're really thinking.  So I think their first fight will likely be a clumsy one, but they did make up for it so all is good. :)

Author's Response: Exactly...they'd absolutely need to practice fighting. The whole communication thing will be an adjustment, LOL. (Something tells me the nonverbal variety will come pretty naturally, however.) And I love hearing that you thought it was believable - was concerned about that. Thanks for reading and reviewing, MA!

Reviewer: girl7 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 26, 2007 01:18 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh wow.  This was absolutely gorgeous -- and has just everything: the angst (his "It's always been you" killed me), the funny (I could sooo see Michael doing exactly that -- Dwight, too), the real (of course they'd have to slay their own demons at first), and finally, the sexiness (and whoa did you bring it -- against the door?  hands over the head?  Very nice indeed). 

I'm just in awe of the fact that you absolutely never hit a false note -- everything you write is just amazing!  So thanks for this one, too.....



Author's Response: Why, thanks, m'am. Glad you liked the little bits of Michael and Dwight - I originally had a whole scene with them, but it got edited out because I wanted to stay focused (ok, obsessive, LOL.) And absolutely there would be demons...but, slayable ones, I think. Besides, how else would they get to the make-up spaghetti? Much appreciate your thoughts, as always ;-)

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