yeah, that whole how long after cocktails was the negotiation was confusing. the day after... week? month? whatever. it is confusing. so i am willing to buy whatever.

pam's mom pushing her again. i love that relationship you have made the two of them have. and jim and larissas. both someone to point out the obvious which they won't admit to themselves, and how they can be as honest and real with those two.

i think its safe to say i am willing to buy these relationships however you write them, and i don't ever really think of them as unrealistic. that could be just me, but it is my two cents. 

Oh, I love that you have both sides here - you've done so well with both of them. They both just seem so down and ready to give up, and I love that her mom and his sister are so realistic, encouraging, and seem to be much more in tune with what's going on here than either of the people involved. I especially love Larissa's advice about looking out for Pam expressing her feelings because it'll probably be subtle - when we all know by now that while that was probably true at the time of Negotiation, her declaration at beach games was hard to miss, and coming from a much braver Pam!

I can see how hard this one would be to write, but I think you got it all down perfectly.  I like how both of them have been left with something to think about, that they're both going to be more aware of each other now, which is exactly how I felt after this episode - they might not be talking, but they're totally zoned in on each other.  Very nicely done.