Date: September 14, 2007 06:34 pm Title: Not Backing Down
Well, I love the premise of this story. And you really have the whole Pam/Jim interaction down quite well, I must say. I can only imagine Jim's expressions as he's reacting to Dwight and similarly to Pam when she bets him to go hunting with Dwight.
I have to admit, I was a little surprised that Jim told Pam about her "company" for the weekend; I sort of figured he'd leave that to the element of surprise. But, you know, either way, Angela & Pam are going to have some quality time together, so that's always good stuff.
I also liked the detail of having the cameramen follow Jim & Dwight -- it totally seems like something like this could happen on an episode. And yes, that cameraman would have drawn the short straw; poor guy. I wonder if the presence of the camera will throw off the whole camoflage thing, though. Like, wouldn't it be a little distracting to them trying to take cover? I think Dwight would make a comment about that.
Anyway, great start so far. Can't wait to see where this goes. I love anything involving Dwight & Jim.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the detailed review, humoring me in my shameless pleading for feedback. :)rnrnI did like the thought of Pam curling up with her chick flick, only to have Angela show up ready to cat party. But I just had the feeling Jim would not have been able to resist getting Pam's reaction to what he had done, plus he might get Pam to back down once he upped the ante. Of course, he should have known better than that....rnrnI really appreciate your feedback-I'm always worried when I venture into humor territory that I am only amusing myself.
Date: September 14, 2007 05:49 pm Title: Not Backing Down
This is going to be a lot of fun. Angela & Pam, too?? I am looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks! Angela/Pam scenes always crack me up on the show, especially when they have those tentative moments of friendship that can dissolve so quickly. I'm glad you're enjoying it-it's been fun to write!