8 [Report This]Date: September 26, 2006 05:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very, very lovely.
And this: and even if the last three years have been like the most painful high-school crush ever, the truth is you're both staring down thirty and you both know the basic steps of this dance.
is just an incredible line.
7 [Report This]Date: August 25, 2006 07:07 am Title: Chapter 1
Love the POV. And, of course, I love that JAM has a chance :)
6 [Report This]Date: August 23, 2006 08:44 am Title: Chapter 1
very very good! i loved it!
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 08:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
This really described Jim's longing so well - "You'd imagined it a thousand times. More than that. Five hundred sheets of paper to a ream, ten reams per case. Fill a truck with cases of paper and maybe you can approach the number of minutes you've spent imagining what this moment might be like." Such a beautiful story.
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 06:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Second person -- I, uh, WOW WOW WOW. Great stuff. Amazingly written.
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 11:18 am Title: Chapter 1
WOW -- Just beautifully written! And it seems so realistic as well -- poignant but not over the top; dramatic but not ridiculously so. I could totally see this as what really happened. Great job!
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 10:45 am Title: Chapter 1
Wouldn't it be nice if this was canon? I don't think they're going to make it that easy, but this was lovely to imagine.
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 10:34 am Title: Chapter 1
I love this. Thank you for writing it :)
Date: August 21, 2006 10:22 am Title: Chapter 1
This had the same hushed quality as the actual Kiss. Beautiful.
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 08:47 am Title: Chapter 1
This was fantastic. Great style. Second person Jim is really hard to pull off but you did it brilliantly.
Yay for second kisses. I so hope this is the way it went after our screens went black last May.
Fingers crossed!
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 08:33 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow. That was fantastic! I really liked your writing style - simple yet elegant, and your use of the second person to capture Jim's POV was beautifully done. Just really lovely.
I wish I could pull out a particular line as my favorite, but honestly there were so many parts I loved that I can't choose. A truck of paper for the number of minutes he's dreamed of kissing her, neither of them being afraid anymore, a high-school crush but they both know the steps of the dance, a kiss on the neck being the new line... all beautiful.
I really wish this is what happened after the finale. Great job!
Date: August 21, 2006 07:21 am Title: Chapter 1
Lovd this! Liked how you were really able to get a bit of their usual humor/banter in there while still keeping it intense
7 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 06:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Mmm, I like this. The second person and how everything's different when he has nothing left to lose and the knife edge moment, not knowing how far to push things. A second kiss. And her going to answer the phone, hee.
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 06:27 am Title: Chapter 1
That was so tense and charged that I held my breath as I read it. You really did a great job!
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 05:23 am Title: Chapter 1
This piece gave me the same wide-eyed, barely-breathing feeling that the actual confession/kiss scenes did. I can't think of anything better I can say about it.
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 05:05 am Title: Chapter 1
This is how I would see them after The Kiss. Very well done.
10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2006 12:45 am Title: Chapter 1
"Making her happy comes naturally to you." Doesn't that just say it all?
This is fantastic. You really nailed how well they know eachother. I like your style of writing a lot. I can't wait for more stories from you.