Date: May 29, 2008 11:14 am Title: Love Peacocks
"took a walk by the Wallempaumpack"
I've never heard it phrased "the Wallenpaumpack" ... wouldn't it make more sense as "took a walk by LAKE Wallem" instead of the?
"why, hello pam beesly!" I can totally hear Jim sayin that!
Karen and ROY? Haha!
Random - but I was looking at this challenge earlier and thinking it would be good (but sadly, since we know the state of Kevin and Stacey, never could happen).
I know I have issues with this also, but you may want to use contractions more. Such as "I will" seems to be better said I'll in this chapter. Its minor, and I have trouble with it also, but its somethin to watch out for. Because its more conversational.
Date: May 27, 2008 05:29 pm Title: Love Peacocks
My jaw litteraly dropped! You are a really good writer!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so so much! That's really awesome of you to say! Those few words you wrote caused a big smile to spread across my face, seriously!
Date: October 02, 2007 08:57 am Title: Love Peacocks
I'm loving it already. I can't to read about the wedding.
Author's Response: thank you for that kindd feedbackk !! [: i`m going to try and write part two noww !!
8 [Report This]Date: October 02, 2007 06:56 am Title: Love Peacocks
I'm so happy! I've been waiting for someone to answer my challenge. Looking forward to more : )
Author's Response: thank you !! i'm going to start writing part 2 as soon as i can !! i hope it will turn out well ;; thank you for the kind words !!