1 [Report This]Date: September 11, 2020 11:05 pm Title: Quake
This is one of the best versions of the talk out there. Kudos.
9 [Report This]Date: October 20, 2008 06:17 pm Title: Quake
I am so enjoying this, I don't want it to end :)
Date: February 07, 2008 01:57 pm Title: Quake
I love the way this transitions so easily between seriousness and the funny bits -- of which there are many, by the way. The part about Pam helping buy her own ring but still not wanting Jim to tell her it was all a waste -- I love the realism of it. That was probably my favorite part of this chapter, which is saying something because I laughed straight out loud at least three times.
Hooray for chaptered stories! Onward!
Date: November 23, 2007 09:52 pm Title: Quake
Wow. Maybe Pam wasn't quite ready so quickly for the "in love" part? This is so very good...
8 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2007 07:46 pm Title: Quake
“I’m going to break up with Katy,” he states simply.
“You’re going to call her up and tell her over the phone?” Pam demands.
Jim frowns.
“No…” Jim says slowly. Then, very quietly he adds, “I was going to text her.”
Ahhh, Jim. He sure knows how to break-up with a girl, doesn't he?
Date: November 18, 2007 04:59 pm Title: Quake
You have no idea how difficult it is to resist the urge to read the next part and just leave one review. You deserve two so here goes.
This is quite simply, brilliant. I've been enjoying this story but something about this chapter has updated my sentiment to loving it. The opening is so well expressed that even I was nervous reading it, wondering how this was going to go. I love that you slipped in a mention of worrying whether the new Jim/Pam couple would have the old Jim/Pam teasing fun friendship relationship because that's definitely something I think they would have worried about. And finally, this line killed me in the best way possible:
“It’s not stupid. We could just call a contractor,” he says matter-of-factly.
This prompted my response that's usually reserved for actual episodes: "Oh, Jim."
Author's Response: Awww, firstly, thank you for reviewing both chapters separately. That's just awesome. Secondly, the contractor thing seemed so Jim. Like, I imagined him actually running through a list of local contractors as she was talking. So I'm so glad you liked that bit :) Thirdly, you rock.
Date: November 18, 2007 03:05 pm Title: Quake
Amazing update!!! I'm so wouldn't be surprised if the ring with Roy story were actually how it had happened...that seems very true to the relationship we got to see of them on the show. And I love how Jim just understands Pam...the terrace convo--very true to character as was his attempt to make her feel better about not having wasted the last 10 years of her life....basically just amazing all around :) Ok off to read the second part, I just wanted to get those thoughts down for you
Author's Response:
Yeah, I really felt like Roy would buy the ring at Sears. I actually went on the sight and found a ring that was only a seventh of a karat, but I thought it would sound unbelievable in the story so I went with one fifth. Heh.
Thanks so much for reviewing both chapters separately too! I truly appreciate that.
Date: November 17, 2007 09:22 pm Title: Quake
Oh, God. So, so good. Excellent dialogue. You've got Jim down to a science. His lines are great: "I feel unsafe in my own home," "Do you like me like me?" Fabulous. Just fabulous.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks invis! I find myself inserting a lot of italics into Jim's dialogue because he has such a great, specific delivery. So fun!
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 01:01 pm Title: Quake
I'm re-commenting due to massively screwy formatting...
So I definitely just did a head!desk at work when I checked and saw that not only had you added chapter 4 and I missed it (and have it sitting on my computer with comments and yet never sent it back...) but you've added chapter 5! GAH! It is unforgivable on my part. As pennance, I shall comment on this chapter thoroughly before allowing myself to move on to chapter 5. Somehow that seems to fit....
<<His voice is sort of grumbly, if that makes any sense, and his eyes don't stay on hers, which is new. >>
I believe this was spotted in Survivor Man! I went back and watched the ‘do you think it's a good idea' scene and couldn't figure out why I liked it so much. It's the voice!
<<"No, I mean, this... is huge,">>
How did you pass up the giant ‘twss'?! (Oh, an when I say "giant twss"? ...twss.)
<<"It's not stupid. We could just call a contractor,">>
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!
<<"I was going to text her." >>
It says bad things about me that I find this semi-reasonable.... It also explains a lot...
<<"That's not all they spread," Pam mutters.>>
Aaaaw snap! Nicely done!
<<"Oh... I said that out loud," Pam muses. >>
HA! I love it.
<<I just split chapter 4 in two bits.>>
... Oh. Well, now I feel less guilty... Off to chapter 5!!! Yay!
Author's Response:
Hahaha! I love that you're such a perfectionist you had to recomment. LOVE.
As for the twss.... d'oh! How could I? seriously, what is wrong with me? Although, on to your texting comment, what is wrong with *you*?
j/k! Thanks so much for the awesome review. Perchance you'll find the epilogue in your inbox later in the week :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 12:12 pm Title: Quake
Shan! You already know how wonderful I think this is, but I wanted to tell you that I love where you're taking this chapter! And it actually works quite well to split it right here--I'm a big fan of the cliffhanger, as you know. ;)
It's simply a treat to see this story being updated, and now, if you'll excuse me, I have to read the next part!!
Author's Response: Thanks Mose! Having to split it up actually worked out :)
Date: November 17, 2007 11:09 am Title: Quake
Hey, I'm really sorry that I didn't get back to you this week. i can't really explain, but work was awful and left me kinda brain dead. But this, this has revitalized me. It's even better than what you sent me before, and I think you've really done so well with this idea. I love how open he is, but I also love that he totally freaked her out at the end. She may just be realizing this all, but he's known for a while. Good work.
Author's Response:
You know you never have to apologize to me! You are the absolute best, and I was not upset in the least. This is why I have multiple betas-- because you all have lives :)
I have chapter 5 up now too. I have to split them up because of weird formatting issues.
Glad you feel revitalized!
10 [Report This]Date: November 17, 2007 11:07 am Title: Quake
"This is you saying that you aren't going to let the next 10, or 20, or however many years be a mistake," he says firmly.
Lovely. I simply adore this chapter, and Pam's surprise at the end is already setting us up for another exciting turn on this ride. Keep it up!!
Author's Response:
Thanks, Becky :) I'm glad you liked that line.
Chapter 5 (or really, part two of chapter 4) is already posted, so I hope you like it!