Date: November 16, 2007 08:55 am Title: subject: You'll never believe this
I thinkmI'm really going to like this story! I like that it's from karen's POV, it really changes things. I liked this:
Well, what she needed to say was basically that she is in love with my fucking boyfriend, and that she called off her wedding for him, and now she's pissed that he doesn't give her the time of day. Everyone just sat there staring, and I wanted to get up and slap her but I was kind of stunned. She said her feet hurt and flounced away, while Jim just sat there looking pale as a ghost. I was so angry, but I didn't know what to say, and before I knew it he was going after her.
Very nice!
Date: November 12, 2007 05:08 pm Title: subject: You'll never believe this
I am really enjoying this story, and I like your format. I keep reading the chapters, though, and all I want to know is who the mysterious "JT" is. Is that supposed to be a secret, or is it immaterial to the story? I keep making up possible identities for her secret friend (Josh "Tyler" Porter, perhaps, or some random Stamford friend). Part of me hopes the friend's identity will be revealed, but the other part of me is happy to stop asking questions and take the chapters as they come.
Keep it up! --CH
8 [Report This]Date: November 11, 2007 08:04 pm Title: subject: You'll never believe this
This really sounded like Karen! But I weirded myself out by feeling such an angsty twinge when Karen wrote "he pretty much jumped me and we ended up in bed for the rest of the morning." I guess after what Pam said to him the night before I wouldn't have expected him to jump into bed with Karen. What? This is just a story? Oh, nevermind!/Emily Latella. (Great job.)
Author's Response:
It kind of made me twinge to write it, but the way I see it is that Jim DID stay with Karen for a week after BG, so he must have slept with her during that time. Since this is from Karen's POV we don't really know what Jim is thinking, but I was trying to convey that Jim was using sex as a distraction, trying not to talk about the issues with Karen.
Thanks for the review! :)
Date: November 11, 2007 02:31 pm Title: subject: You'll never believe this
I really, really (REALLY) like this. I hope it's only the beginning...
Author's Response: Thanks! There will be more to come.
9 [Report This]Date: November 11, 2007 02:22 pm Title: subject: You'll never believe this
I love this new perspective. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you!