Date: December 04, 2007 11:06 am Title: Chapter 4
Damn. I'm not even sure how to sum up this one. All I know is that I think I'm a little bit in love with Frankie. Kid is wise.
Date: November 30, 2007 02:07 pm Title: Chapter 4
Painful, awkward, and Roy. Poor Jim. Selfless and still kicking himself for selfishness, even justified. And then Roy, who is as blind in his love now as he was when he was with Pam.
8 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2007 06:48 pm Title: Chapter 4
"They're just...it's just memories in there. That's all they want. It's all they have room for right now...They're not stupid. They'll snap out of it...She will too."
I loved Frankie's discussion with Jim. So very true, but poor Jim is just to hurt to see it. Same with Roy's conversation in the car with Jim - I can see where Roy wants to be there with the family and acts with them the way he always has. What a tough holiday for all of them.
Date: November 18, 2007 06:47 pm Title: Chapter 4
Ugh that was an ugly scene in the car...but in Roy's defense I can see how he'd still be attached, but there were some things I think that he did that were rude.
I'd love to have seen what Pam's dad talked to Roy about...also would love at some point for Frankie to elaborate on the "shit" that Pam went through....still loving the story, can't wait for more (even if it is a bit sad)
Date: November 18, 2007 08:44 am Title: Chapter 4
I love this story so much. And right now it is a welcome distraction from the ginormous paper I have to write by tomorrow morning.
10 [Report This]Date: November 18, 2007 08:29 am Title: Chapter 4
Whew. I just couldn't stop reading--and there are a lot of distractions in my house at the moment. The dialogue between Jim and Roy--spot on. Just perfect.
Date: November 18, 2007 07:09 am Title: Chapter 4
I thought Jim was going to throw Roy out of the car for a second. And wouldn't that be nice. But...and I can't believe I'm trying to defend Roy here, I think he really is affected with Frank being sick. Ten years is a long time. He was part of that family. And I'm sure close with Pam's dad. So I could see where he would want to be there. It's hard to just wake up one day and pretend everything you had is gone and be fine with it. So although I don't want him there, it makes sense he would want to be there. And now that my small moment of Royness is gone, I love Jim. How hard was that, "I'll take you home Roy." Always taking one for team JAM. But at least he got Roy out of the house...until he comes back for his truck.
Anyway, another amazing job. You really make my heart break for all of them. Can't say enough about how much I enjoy this story.
Date: November 18, 2007 07:03 am Title: Chapter 4
Lovefool - you are so, so good with the fluffy but this...this is so real. Amazing the way you can do both happy and sad with the same degree of excellence. So yay you.
Date: November 18, 2007 05:34 am Title: Chapter 4
Oh, that subtle shift away from Roy and toward Jim in the living room...that was brilliant. Roy, you need to go now! You've served your purpose. Bye bye! I love that you had Frankie tell us that Frank and Allison were really just being kind to Roy and the "love" wasn't all Jim thought it was. I love that you had Jim drive him home, too. He would do that - he'd hate it, but he'd do it, for Pam. The conversation in the car was pitch perfect.
Date: November 18, 2007 12:55 am Title: Chapter 4
I love it when Jim and Roy have fights. And I'm so proud when he doesn't back down. I don't know if I've reviewed this before but I love it! Usually a fight with Roy would seem pretty farfetched but you made it fit perfectly. You're an awesome writer!
Date: November 17, 2007 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 4
This story is amazing. I just reread it from the beginning because it's just that good. So, so intense. What a horrible situation for Jim to be in, being the newest member of the clan. Driving Roy home must have been one of the most horrible experiences of his life. All the routines and emotions of the day are so tainted with Frank's impending death, no one is acting normally. Poor Jim is just walking on eggs trying not to screw up. He feels like an idiot for continually asking people how they're doing, but he's honestly doing the best thing possible by just being there and showing that he cares about them, which Mrs. Beesly acknowledged in the driveway.
I can't wait for more of this story. You're doing a marvelous job lovefool.
Date: November 17, 2007 08:20 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oh holy carp. The Jim/Roy smackdown. Of sorts.
This story is both making me simultaneously look forward to and dread Thanksgiving. Nothing like being locked in with some combination of your family & your in-laws to test your patience, is there?
Date: November 17, 2007 06:57 pm Title: Chapter 4
I just noticed this sentence.
I licked his lips and kept my eyes on the road as I backed out of the driveway.
I think you meant to write I licked MY lips. or HE licked his lips.
Other than that this was great and the rest of the story was fantastic too.