1 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2020 11:10 am Title: Chapter 1
This one is interesting, because it occurs to me in reading it that if you changed Roy to Jim and lost the word forced, it could actually qualify as fluff as opposed to a heartstring-tugger. Kinda striking how the same experience can mean two VERY different things.
Author's Response: Yep. Roy wasn’t a bad guy, just the wrong guy.
9 [Report This]Date: August 24, 2009 05:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yes yes yes. Great metaphor. Simplistic writing at its best.
Author's Response: Wow, shortlatte, you commented on this a year ago! I don't get notifications and I'm not around here much anymore, so I didn't see it. I am very, very pleased that you liked this and that you thought the metaphor worked. Thank you so much!
Date: July 16, 2008 07:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wait, waking up early at 8:27? Sorry, thats what I consider sleeping IN.
Anyways, this reminds me of my friend. Her facebook status was "i fell off the bed and woke up boyfriend. oops" and i wanted to yell at her. she is 9 months pregnant, she falls off the bed and she is saying oops cause she woke her boyfriend. mostly its cause i know the boy would just be upset he woke up, not that his super pregnant girlfriend fell off the bed.
yes, that was what i thought of when I read about Roy.
Author's Response:
That boyfriend sounds like a Roy. Yuck.
Yeah, that was an early weekend for me back before I had my baby! Ha!
9 [Report This]Date: September 05, 2006 11:48 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm awed by people who can convey so much with so few words.
Fantastic.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much, xoxoxo- that means a lot from someone whose work I love so much!
9 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2006 02:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was a perfectly subtle and lovely explanation of that question that burns up all our brains: "What the hell is up with Pam?"
Wonderfully done.
Author's Response: Thank you, Rose! It burns my brain, too.
9 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2006 12:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, you were able to pack so much in so few words. Pam feeling pulled and restrained from what she wants to do by Roy, even though he probably means it in a loving way. Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks! Roy's not even aware of it, but that doesn't mean he isn't doing it.
10 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2006 11:18 am Title: Chapter 1
Lovely. Nice metaphor and great comment on the ambiguity of being 'held'...so true to Pam.
Author's Response: Thank you very much.
Date: September 02, 2006 11:10 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, nice metaphor for Pam's life and choices. Yes, it definitely came across!
Author's Response: Thank you! (yay!)
10 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2006 10:52 am Title: Chapter 1
This was lovely. Poor Pam. Sometimes later never comes.
Author's Response: Thank you. I hope she wakes up soon!
10 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2006 09:46 am Title: Chapter 1
This was fantastic! You used such a great analogy to get Pam's essence across in so few words, which served to make it more powerful. Particularly loved the line about her "matching her breathing to his" at the end.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I appreciate it!
10 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2006 09:21 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow - great analogy!
She has plans (errands), goals (getting them finished early), dreams (reading her book), and gives them up for Roy. This is perfect:
He was warm against her, and the bed was comfortable. If she tried to get up, she knew it would wake him.
Awesome!
Author's Response: Thank you, shan! I'm relieved it worked like it was supposed to.
10 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2006 08:11 am Title: Chapter 1
Short and to the point...Pam putting aside her wants for Roy, but with emphasis on how Roy's alternative is enjoyable too. Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was hoping that came through, and people wouldn't be all, "WTF? So, Pam is sleeping in, who cares?" Heh.