Date: May 14, 2008 12:41 am Title: Prologue
I absolutely love this story, but I'm so sad that you probably won't finish it...please update it!!! it would make my day!!! so good!!!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks for taking the time to comment! I know I haven't updated in forever, but I've decided to re-work this one when I finish my other story. I wrote this before I'd even seen all the episodes of the show and I just feel like I need to start over with it. When my other story (Graceless) is complete I'll be back to work on this!
Date: March 10, 2008 08:32 am Title: Prologue
Yikes, I'm looking forward to Jim and Pam finally talking (hopefully). I really enjoyed this last chapter.
Date: January 29, 2008 02:28 pm Title: Prologue
I was hoping we could skip the part where Pam backslides with Roy. Hopefully Jim and her will work it out soon. Enjoying this.
Date: January 15, 2008 01:28 pm Title: Prologue
I swear I have thought of some of what you are writing in fan fics in my head. You are doing a great job describing poor Pams mindset. I LOVE it.
Date: January 14, 2008 08:47 am Title: Prologue
I'm gonna follow this one to the end, Strawberry. I like it, and I'm interested to read your take on this oft travelled fanfic path.
Date: January 14, 2008 08:08 am Title: Prologue
NO! I don't want him to be gone when she gets to work!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Date: January 14, 2008 07:03 am Title: Prologue
I like this concept so far. I look forward to your story!
8 [Report This]Date: January 14, 2008 06:18 am Title: Prologue
Promising beginning! Looking forward to the next installment.
Date: January 14, 2008 12:29 am Title: Prologue
Well done on starting your first multi-chapter fiction! I think this chapter sets up the rest of your story wonderfully. It doesn't dwell on any particular fact, it's elloquent, and seems very "Pam" - even if this kind of thing wouldn't happen on the show. But i think that you are right, and exploring things that doesn't/wouldn't happen on the show is exactly why fanfiction is writen. I mean, have you checked out the smut on this website?! I could only wish for that to happen on the show : ). The only thing i wasn't too sure about was Roy's "He never expected her to end this, especially when he is so close to complete control of her life" because it changes from Pam's perspective to Roy's momentarily, and it makes it seem like Roy's objective the entire relationship was to purposely and objectively control Pam's life, when i believe it would have been much more an ignorant behaviour (but not less violent, abusive, or destructive) on Roy's behalf. The line comes off a bit "evil genius". Basically, I don't think he's smart enough to actually be aware that he's nearly in complete control of her life. But, goodness, that's just nit-picking. I really do like your premise and your writing. I do hope Pam can get to Jim before anything (or anyone) gets in their way...but I'm sure it's not going to be that easy for them. I can't wait to read how you continue this. And again, well done!
Author's Response: I get what you're saying about that line, but just to clear it up (though I'm not sure it really matters!) - that part isn't really what Roy's thinking, but Pam's perspective on the situation, if that makes sense. It was confusing the way I wrote it, but it's all going on in HER head, so when she sees him stunned, she's processing why. I agree, he's not smart enough to come to that conclusion on his own :-). This is just how Pam sees it happening. Thanks so much for the thoughtful response!