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Reviewer: naomi_dylan Signed [Report This]
Date: February 22, 2008 11:26 am Title: Pianissimo

My favorite line:  "“I needed someone to want me,” she said softly, “and you didn't.”"  Awwww. Poor Pam.  Poor Jim.  Yay for them being mad at each other and consoling themselves by making out!   Very enjoyable!

Author's Response: thanks for the review, naomi!

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 22, 2008 07:39 am Title: Pianissimo

Fantastically wonderfully good.  “No, but I certainly thought you did,” she quipped, her eyes growing big as she realized what she had said.  LOVE it! 

Author's Response: you are too too kind, Nan. Whatever will I do when you find someone really good to read???  Thanks, hon!!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: February 22, 2008 05:57 am Title: Pianissimo

Go, Pam!  "I don't want just food".  Honesty is working out pretty well for her.  Bonus points for driving a stake through the heart of the PLoD.


Author's Response: yeah, anytime I can make the PLoD the PLoHSSS, I'm happy.  (the Parking Lot of Hot Steamy Sexy Stuff!)  Unfortunately Jim's gonna have to take a few cold showers in chapter 3......  ;-)

Reviewer: deerinthepark Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 22, 2008 12:53 am Title: Pianissimo

Cuuuuuuuuuuuute :)


Author's Response: Thaaaaaaaaaaaanks! :)

Reviewer: bootyz30 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21, 2008 09:48 pm Title: Pianissimo

Love it!


Author's Response: Thanks so much, bootyz30!!!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: February 21, 2008 08:54 pm Title: Pianissimo

You said you left with Roy because I didn't want you.” He kissed her again, this time ever so gently. “But I did. Believe me, I did."

That made my heart melt. Wow.

PS I think you left out a "not" in this sentence:  "Pam knew he was disappointed in her reply and she knew she needed to reassure him that this was a rejection." 

And an "m" here:  "He was sure she was about to turn hi down"



Author's Response: Thanks so much for catching the typos, Kay - care to sign up for my beta list?  :-)  I love getting reviews from you!

Reviewer: Azlin Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21, 2008 08:47 pm Title: Pianissimo

I don't have anything original to say, but I loved it, Mox. Nice job, as always. And I loved the tension/angst of the first chapter, too. Well done!

Author's Response: You don't need to say anything original here, Azlin - I'm just delighted you read this and like it.  :-)  Thanks for the review!!!

Reviewer: onceuponajam Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21, 2008 08:47 pm Title: Pianissimo

I stand by my earlier statement. As always, a wonderful 2400 words. :)

Author's Response: LOL - thanks, ouaj!  I hope the next 2400 work just as well for you :-)

Reviewer: kgreene Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 21, 2008 08:00 am Title: Silence

OH. MY. GOD. I was about two thirds of the way through this, thinking to myself "WOW. I have to look back at Moxie's previous stuff, I don't remember anything quite this passionate..." when suddenly Karen walked in! ( Not... here at work where I'm writing this but in the story... you probably knew that, though). OH, NO. You caught me completely off guard with that one. Wow. As usual, another Moxie classic!

Author's Response: wow - thanks so much, kgreene!  I admit it was a bit more angsty than my usual fare, but it think I was channelling all my stress over the length of the strike!  :-)  Thanks so much for taking the time to review.

Reviewer: I_Still_Believe Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 21, 2008 06:26 am Title: Silence

oh moxie, how do you do it? this was amazing! cannot wait for more!

Author's Response: I wish I knew, ISB!  I'm just glad you liked it so well - Chapter 2 is up so I hope you enjoy that one, too!

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21, 2008 05:48 am Title: Silence

I love Pam in this.  I love Karen walking in on them even more. Great job.

Author's Response: Thanks, gotkona!  Feisty New Beesly is my favourite flavor too!  :)

Reviewer: Marcele Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: February 21, 2008 04:45 am Title: Silence

You know, I love the way YOU work things out between Jim and Pam. Awesome fanfic, specially all angst parts and the surprise of Karen's appearance. More, please! :-]

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Marcele - so glad you liked it!  Chapter 2 is up and waiting!

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21, 2008 02:40 am Title: Silence

Yowza. Talk about closing that angry disconnect between them (which you made really vivid) - I think that conf. table may literally burst into flames. You know, of all the fics where they pounce on each other, I can't recall one where Karen actually walks in on them. And I like that it's Pam taking the lead (not that Jim seems to need much prompting. Sexy detail: when Pam starts to step away when Karen enters and he doesn't let her.) Okay - please no shenanigans where they go 18 chapters before getting back to bizness - a girl (and by that I mean me, not Pam) can only take so much, Mox, lol! Hurry!

Author's Response:

18 chapters before they get back to bizness?  I'm sorry, Colette - but you must be confusing me with some other author.  I'd never force those two to wait it out that long - would I??  ;-)

No, I promise - just a bit more tense, angst and build-up, and then the fun will being.  Thanks for reviewing!!!!! :-) 

Reviewer: jecksia Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 11:00 pm Title: Silence

damnit Karen! Just when things start to get good... she's gotta come in and ruin it! DAMN HER! 

Author's Response:

yeah, she has the worst timing of any character ever.  She will be stopped.  :-)

Thanks for the review, Jecks!! 

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 07:26 pm Title: Silence

Every time I see a new story or chapter from you I'm so happy because every word you write is so perfectly perfect. (Yes, I am the self-appointed president of the VA chapter of the Moxie fan club, why do you ask?) But this story is so amazingly awesome that I think I'll be hitting refresh repeatedly until you update - even if it takes days and I have to miss work and then lose my job...

I love that Pam took the bull by the horn, or Jim by the tie, or whatever. So very passionate. And I s'pose I should say I feel a little badly for Karen but honestly the only feeling I have is fear that Jim will try to make up with her and have 5 more nights of talking and this will drive them even further apart.  Oh - and I liked the references to what Pam said in BG, too. Such a great beginning.



Author's Response:

Kay - I would be honoured if you really wanted the thankless job of Moxie FanClub president.  :-)  Chapter 2 is up so I hope you didn't miss too much work time.  Chapter 3 should be up over the weekend.  

Thanks for the review - I'm always happy to see you've commented!! 

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 07:11 pm Title: Silence

Bad. Timing. Karen.  Now please leave so that our two lovebirds can get back to what they were doing.  Ok, now, we were unbuttoning the shirts, yeah, that's right....

Yeah, I wish it would be that simple.  So I'll be patient and wait to see how you work this out.  Sigh. 



Author's Response:

all good things come to those who wait, EH - or something like that.  But I'll do my best to earn that MA rating soon....

Thanks for reviewing, sweetie!!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 06:45 pm Title: Silence

Sweet jeebus, Moxie, I think you killed me.  Who needs a supply closet when we have the conference room table of love? 

Nothing like anger bubbling over into tearing each other's clothing off.  Especially if it gets Karen to get the hell out of Scranton.  Was that mean?

I can totally picture Pam trying to button up her shirt, kind of like when she was rebuttoning the top button when the skeevy cartoonist turned out to be such a lech. 



Author's Response:

ha - that's exactly how I pictured it too - thought i didn't realize I'd picked that up from that date.  Good catch!!

Karen is not yet gone, but at least she'll not have any more opportunities to flash those mint green panties.  (Which yeah, I know - she hadn't purchased yet at this point in the real world - but in my AU she wore them all the time, much to Jim's chagrin.  He'll be totally ready for pink......)  :D

thanks for reviewing - you know it means the world to me! 

Reviewer: hues8 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 05:08 pm Title: Silence

Wow! This is fantastic! And Karen walking in?! Please update soon! Again, wow!

Author's Response:

thank you, hues8 - I'll take a double wow review anyday :D  Chapter 2 is up, and 3 shouldn't be too far behind....

 

Reviewer: MostAssuredly Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 04:35 pm Title: Silence

It is so hard for me not to feel bad for Karen. It really does suck for her. But after I move past that I start jumping up and down, wishing this is the way it happened on the show. I really liked the line where Pam thinks even his skin is trying to reject her. But she just doesn't care anymore. Very nicely done!

Author's Response: Yes, Karen really did the short end of the stick when she thought she could win Jim - but as we've seen in the show, she's not always the person most likely to realize when her dance is truly over.  I think a more dramatic face off (like this) might have forced her to fold a lot earlier.  Not that we've seen the end of her here yet.  Thanks for reviewing, MostAssuredly - it's greatly appreciated!!

Reviewer: waltisafox Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 04:33 pm Title: Silence

i did NOT see that coming! in fact, i dont recall reading a fic ever where karen has walked IN! is it wrong that i love it?
you do have a way with words my dear and i am eagerly looking forward to more.

Author's Response: not wrong at all, waltisafox - love it all you want!  I probably took a bit too much pleasure in writing it.... :-D  thanks so much for your kind words, and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

Reviewer: khand3stooges Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 04:16 pm Title: Silence

WOW! That was intense and full of every emotion possible.  Keep it coming.

Author's Response: Hmm....i was trying to think of what emotion I might have left out, but maybe you're correct.  I probably shouldn't be so greedy, huh?  ;-)  Thanks so much for the review - glad you liked it, kh!

Reviewer: JamLover101 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 04:00 pm Title: Silence

This is so well written. I love it! And I was not expecting Karen's appearance, must be quite awkward.

Author's Response: um, yeah, awkward will be a work we see a lot of in Chapter 3.  ;-)  Thanks so much for the kind words, and for taking the time to review, JamLover101.  (How exactly can I get into that class?)  

Reviewer: pam_beesly Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 03:56 pm Title: Silence

:O More, please!!

Author's Response: Yes ma'am - chapter 2 is up!  Thanks for reviewing, dear!  :)

Reviewer: Vampiric Blood Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 03:37 pm Title: Silence

Wow!  You've got me breathing hard here.  That was one torrid scene!  Did not foresee Karen's appearance at all.  I actually thought it was going to be Michael as I read her first words. 

Can't wait to see how this develops.



Author's Response: yeah, Karen turns up in all the wrong places.  Kinda like a cold sore. (kidding!)  so glad you liked it, VB - I really appreciate you taking the time to review - it means A LOT.

Reviewer: Green Eggs and ME Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2008 03:33 pm Title: Silence

Wow wow wow!!! I LOVE this. I love that Pam was the one to confront Jim and the amazing analogy with even Jim's skin being more abrasive rang so true to me. Please update soon!!!

Author's Response: a 3 wow rating?!  Thanks, Green Eggs!!!!  Chapter 2 is up, and Chapter 3 is working it's way through my brain.  Hope you continue to enjoy it.  :)  Thanks for reviewing!!

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