Ha.  I like your changes.

You know, not that anyone really 'clicks' with Michael, but he and Jan aren't really on the same wavelength, are they?  What are they doing together?  I guess it makes a little bit of sense once they started showing how screwed up Jan is; they're two misfits.

I think two of my favorite lines are "Sex with Jan was no longer Sex with JAN! to him but he was still in awe of their relationship at times" and "the chickens coming home to the rooster." I also liked the little mention of Hunter.  I hope he's not letting them change him. ;)

Eh.  My kid is "timing me."  I said we could do something on the computer "in a minute."  Aargh.

Nice job on the stories, Swedge. :)