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Reviewer: okayibelieveyou Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 08:24 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.

This is great! The dialogue is really true to the show; I could definitely imagine these conversations playing out. Can't wait for Jim & Pam to talk everything out (and maybe a little more..? hehe)

Author's Response: okiby - thanks so much!  I love writing Michael and Jim scenes so I'm happy it rand true to you.   Jim and Pam are talking as we speak. :)

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 07:19 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.

Lie to us any time if this is the result!  I love how you parallel the dialogue from the episode and work it into the new plotline.

I love Michael/Jim scenes -- now get Jim's cute little butt into that elevator! 



Author's Response: Thanks Lisa.  I wanted to make it familiar but not write it verbetim you know?  LOL!  His cute butt is in the elevator.  Stay tuned. :)

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 06:30 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.

Dying for chapter 3! 



Author's Response:

Please don't die.  I'm working on it!!!

Reviewer: standinginthedoorway Signed [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 05:49 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.

" Who names their kid Bing anyway? It's like naming your kid Toby."

ROFLMAO!!!!!!!!

Author's Response:

You know what?  I actually threw in the Toby bit after I uploaded.   So glad you liked it!

 

Reviewer: GoIrish Signed [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 05:45 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.

This is a great story - it's an interesting episode to choose to have Jam get together.

Author's Response: I did a fic exchange at Christmas time and Shan21 gave me a list of 5 fantastic possibilities.  This came from "Jim DID call Pam at The Convention".  I felt like when watching the episode he knew who to call but was determined not to which is why in the end I made it more of a (subconscious?) mistake.   I'm so glad you like it.

Reviewer: batman29 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 03:52 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.

Outstanding!

B



Author's Response: Well thank you B!  I'm so glad you think so!

Reviewer: Becky215 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 02:55 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.

xoxoxo--I'm so happy to see this is back, and I'm even happier that it looks like it'll be a long one! You've set up a fabulous premise here, and I love the twist on Michael and Jim's talk from "The Convention." Can't wait to see what happens next, of course, and keep up the fabulous work!! -CH

Author's Response: CH - Thank you!!  Not too long actually.  (twss) 3 chapters should do it.  I realized I had to put a little Jim POV in there thus the struggle w/Chapter 2.  I'm hurrying!!

Reviewer: Cousin Mose Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 26, 2008 09:07 am Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

See, THIS is why you're one of my favorite authors here, xoxoxo! Reading your JAM voice is like listening to two great musicians riffing off each other. You just make it seem so effortless, and it's simply a joy to experience.

Take, for instance, this little exchange:

"Whatever."  She rolled her eyes.

"Hey.  I could hear that eyeroll.  Are you calling me a liar?   Nice. ..."

Such a simple little moment, but it's absolutely perfect, and it manages to capture everything we love about these two in a dozen or so words. That's impressive.

I'm looking forward to where this one is headed. 



Author's Response:

Thanks Mose!!   I really wanted to go light on the banter and the angst truth be told.  I'm so glad you think I succeeded.

Chapter 2 has been a lot of fun.  Hopefully it'll be tweaked enough to post soon!!

Reviewer: Emilys List Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: March 25, 2008 08:15 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

uh i LOVE this.  you absolutely slayed me. this was so deftly done.  and the dialogue was so spot on... even in the "i um hi" kind of moments i can perfectly hear them.  i'm really into this - kind of want to marry this...

Author's Response: Well as far as I know this story is not engaged to anyone else - so you may have a shot. :)  Thanks EL.  I really appreciate it.  The fact that you think the dialogue works is so lovely to hear.  It's something I try really hard to get just right.  To know that in your eyes I've succeeded means a lot.

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: March 25, 2008 04:59 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

I've always thought The Convention was such a pivotal S3 episode - Jim's final confirmation that Pam wasn't just licking her wounds, she didn't want him. (Or, so he thought.) And thus, the wheels were set in motion for his disastrous Get Over Pam Surge. Now, if only you'd been at the helm, that pesky business could all have been avoided ;-) Love how you're subverting it here, how you didn't overwork their phone convo - sad and funny and not played for melodrama. Please do go on - I think I'm as excited that she's on the slow train to Philly as Jim is. 

Author's Response:

Exactly.  My heart broke every time they showed his face.  I was left wanting to scream..."No.  It's not what you think.  The guy's awful.   It's not you..."  And now I had Pam tell him.  Love that I can do that. :)

She's on her way to Philly as we speak.  A little frazzled, and anxious, and finally realizing what she let walk away from her all those months ago.

And Jim?  He's finding some entertaining and amusing ways to pass the time till she gets there. :)   More soon!!

And thank you.  I meant what I said.  This thing wouldn't have come to pass if not for your input.

Reviewer: bnbrice Signed [Report This]
Date: March 25, 2008 01:01 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

Please continue! Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: I plan to!! Sit tight.  I'm working on it. :)

Reviewer: purplextutu Signed [Report This]
Date: March 25, 2008 11:34 am Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

Aww, this story is totally cute. Why couldn't the writers have spared us all out 3rd season angst and gone with this storyline?

Author's Response: I know.  But they didn't ask me purplextutu.  I could have spared us all that.  :)

I'm very glad you liked it! 

Reviewer: belsum Signed [Report This]
Date: March 25, 2008 10:45 am Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

I love this image:  nibbled nervously on a hangnail.

And this realization really captures it all, doesn't it?  "The idea that it was actually okay to think about him at all."

This really would have been a wonderful twist to the episode.  Cut out all the Karen angst before it even happens.  You're a clever lady!  Can't wait to see Pam at the convention hotel...



Author's Response:

You know what is funny?  That hangnail bit was a late edit.   I had it as her nibbling on her lip but I'd used that later in the story.  I could picture her nervous and going for her nails.  So happy that it worked for you.

I think that was always Pam's struggle to think of Jim that way.  She was engaged so she thought she couldn't.  I'm sure it takes a lot to get used to.

I like things tidy - and Karen made things messy.  I don't pretend to out write the writers - I just like to explore neater scenarios - that's all.

Thanks belsum!  Your reviews are always much appreciated. :)

Reviewer: JRAddict Signed [Report This]
Date: March 25, 2008 10:05 am Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

Aww go Pam go!  Very cute...I like that Jim actually did call her after spotting "the hooker" because we all know that he wanted to.  I hope once Pam gets there they discover "the hooker's" identity--that would be classic :)

Author's Response: We'll see.  You never know who might sneak through the lobby under the cover of darkness. ;)   I have to confess I'm still not over Pam not fully explaining what happened during The Initiation.   I was sort of trying to kill 2 birds here.  Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Sweetpea Signed [Report This]
Date: March 25, 2008 04:46 am Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

Pam's going to the convention!!  You have just the perfect light and right touch on that phone call, xoxoxo.  And thank you so much for putting that phone into Jim's hand!  'I don't know who to call" my ass.  Can't wait for Pam's train to pull in!  TWHS.

Author's Response: Pam's going to the convention!!!  I don't think she fully grasps what she's gotten herself into yet though.  So glad you liked the way the call went.  I was as nervous as Pam posting this.  More soon!

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: March 25, 2008 03:56 am Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

Wonderful!  I love these happy AU versions of the show's events.  The dialogue is perfectly them.  I can't wait for Pam to get to Philly!

Author's Response: I'm so glad the dialogue sounded right.  I really worked on that.   I can't wait for her to get there either.  I hope she doesn't get a speeding ticket....

Reviewer: grapejelly Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 10:55 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

I really like this story. The dialog sounds true, and I like how there's not too much angst (at least, so far!), and Jim & Pam are already reconnecting. Can't wait for the 2nd part!

Author's Response: Thanks grapejelly!!  The angst is pretty much over.  I mean - it's not all resolved - but it's not going to take a downward turn either.   I'm so glad you liked it!

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 10:55 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

This has the potential to be a LOT of fun! I can't wait for more! Thanks for the story xoxoxo.

Author's Response: I hope so!!!  Thanks so much LoveFool.  Ummm...is this a good time to mention that I often wonder if Jilly is walking yet?  No?  Too bad.  :)

Reviewer: I_Still_Believe Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 09:04 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

This was excellent! I think you're off to a great start and I cannot wait to read more. I love how you captured the tension, akwardness, and sweetness between them all at the same time. And I love how bold Pam is finding herself!
Looking forward to an update!

Author's Response: I think that one date cured Pam of all others.  I really do.  And I'm glad to rewrite history a bit.  It won't be easy - but it'll be a hell of a lot less angsty than S3 really way.  Thanks so much for reading.

Reviewer: shootingstars Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 08:18 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

*flails* oh this is so good. *such* a great idea, and wonderfully explored. Can't wait to see more ...

Author's Response: Please don't hurt yourself with the flailing.  :) I'm so glad you liked it.  Mpre as soon as I can manage.

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 08:08 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

I just read this twice even though I've seen most of it before.  Sigh...there were so many realistic chances for them to get together in S3 and spare us all a lot of pain.  The one you depict here is wonderfully realistic and compelling, and best of all it is your writing, with its characteristic warmth and humor and perfect Jim and Pam voices. 



Author's Response:

Ummm...you are obligated to read all of my stories 3 times minimum.  I thought I made that clear. :)

I'm so glad it came across as realistic.  That was what I was struggling to do.  Well - I was actually struggling to write it at all - but you've heard enough about that. 

Thank you - for everything.

Reviewer: Crystalized Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 08:06 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

Hotel sex! Hotel sex! Hotel sex! Okay, okay, I'm fine with them just talking ;)
Love this bit:
"He sounded exactly the same, was all she could think. After all that had happened shouldn't he sound different? Did she sound different?"

Author's Response:

The rating is currently T - so I don't know how steamy it's going to get.  I've got a couple of different scenarios I'm exploring though. ;)  

In the end I'm going to let them tell the story.  And if the story is a romp in the Philly Airport Hilton (or wherever they really are) then so be it. :)

In all seriousness - thank you.  I hope what I have planned does not disappoint.

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 06:52 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

Okay, well I put myself through the arduous task of reading this chapter a few more times......and I'm still loving every word of it.  Cannot wait for chapter 2!!!

Author's Response: Feel free to read it again. I won't complain. ;)  Thank you!  I'm working on it!!!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 05:58 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

OMG! This left me all kinds of happy and smiling and did I say happy?  Seriously, I have had a crappy X 100 last few days and I really, REALLY needed this. Really. So thank you from the bottom of my heart for chapter 1. Oh, just so it's not all about me,  this was wonderful and sounded just like it might have sounded, if only....

Author's Response: A happy kaystar makes for a happy xoxoxo.   Thank you from the bottom of MY heart for your review.

Reviewer: nandance Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24, 2008 05:38 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult

Oh wow this looks to be REALLY good! I loved how you wrote the awkwardness between them at first and how you could kind of feel it slowly lifting as they talked. I'm really excited for you to continue this!

Author's Response: I'm really excited to continue!!  Not too much longer now.  I'm so glad you liked it and that the awkwardness came through.  It was exactly how I wanted it to read.  thanks so much!

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