Date: September 25, 2008 04:21 pm Title: and sings the tune--without the words
It gets better and better :)
Author's Response: Ah, I'm glad you think so! I've got two more chapters in the works and then it's done. Thanks for reading and taking time to review! :)
10 [Report This]Date: May 28, 2008 09:52 pm Title: and sings the tune--without the words
Fancy New Beesly asks for what she wants.:D I loved that line!
9 [Report This]Date: May 12, 2008 10:27 am Title: and sings the tune--without the words
Here's another review, as promised! This was an awesome interpretation of their first date, and like it says at the end of this chapter, no wonder he bought a ring after only a week! You definitely proved it was plausible. As for "emo bits" that may stand out, I definitely noticed some (especially in chapter 2) that seemed out of place, but I didn't find most of them too distracting. And you could definitely, DEFINITELY expand this, especially if you have more ideas for it. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks for coming back and reviewing this for me!! I'll probably go back and chop some stuff out of ch. 2 eventually but right now I'm just trying to work out something for the next chapter. I have about three different versions but I think what I've got going now is going to be the final draft. Thanks again for reading and I look forward to hearing what you think about what I come up with. :D
10 [Report This]Date: May 06, 2008 09:35 pm Title: and sings the tune--without the words
Wonderful and real and sexy and just the right emotions - I love it!
Author's Response: :) My editing instincts keep asking if it's too ...sappy?... in places...so thanks for that!
Date: May 01, 2008 04:25 pm Title: and sings the tune--without the words
Slow day today, not much new ... so I reread this story. I just love how you have made Pam the aggressor here. That she's got Jim half undressed while she's still fully clothed.
Favorite line that makes me smile every time I read it:
I’d waited how many years and now I have stage fright?
Yup, I'm voting for nine, count them nine, more chapters.
Author's Response: I'll come back to this one VB...want to finish up my other one first. I promise there will be more though. Thanks for the encouragement!
10 [Report This]Date: May 01, 2008 12:56 pm Title: and sings the tune--without the words
Callisto, you're a great author! Keep up the good work, please!
Author's Response: Thanks!!
Date: April 29, 2008 07:07 pm Title: and sings the tune--without the words
I'm with Vampiric Blood: more, more, more! We're greedy, but we're appreciative : )
Author's Response: All right, coming back to work on this one now! Sorry I haven't gotten around to responding before, had to finish that other one, it was just bursting to get out. Next chapter of this one is giving me a heck of a time...
Date: April 29, 2008 06:14 pm Title: and sings the tune--without the words
That was fantastic writing, especially them affirming their love for each other, both verbally and physically.
I could easily see Jim thinking, "She's the one, always has been," as he picked out her engagement ring the following week.
Author's Response: Wow...thanks! :D
Date: April 29, 2008 03:42 pm Title: and sings the tune--without the words
great job...hopefully more??
Author's Response: Yah, getting back to it now!
Date: April 29, 2008 12:07 pm Title: and sings the tune--without the words
OK, I looked for the Emily Dickinson poem. Hope has 12 lines. If you're taking a line per chapter title, that must mean we get 12 chapters! Yay!
This is just beautiful! Can't even pick a favorite line because it's all so good. You have a fine voice and define the characters really well.
Author's Response: Um...yeah...about that...I wasn't thinking of getting past the first stanza, but...well, we'll see what I can come up with! Probably done after the next one though. Thanks again for the kind words. Constructive compliments make my day :)
9 [Report This]Date: April 29, 2008 10:33 am Title: and sings the tune--without the words
Love it! I like the perspectives. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Date: April 29, 2008 10:12 am Title: and sings the tune--without the words
I don't know why I thought this story was complete, but I'm so very glad it's not. It's like a gift! This was absolutely breathtaking, Callisto. Truly. Your details are so lovely. Really looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks! I have at least one more.
Date: April 29, 2008 10:01 am Title: and sings the tune--without the words
Oh, my. Icing on the cake. This is just how I imagine that date went. Not that I do that or anything. Hee.
Author's Response: Hee. No, none of us do that... *chants "these aren't real people these aren't real people"* Thanks! :)
10 [Report This]Date: April 29, 2008 09:55 am Title: and sings the tune--without the words
Again Wow, selfishly I hope this isn't the end but you wrapped up their first date and first night together really well, I'm impressed and jealous of the talent here. Your writing really brought me into the story and I love it!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm brainstorming how to do more. Don't think it's too overemotional weepy emo? Sometimes, I fear, but I'm leaving it! :D