1 [Report This]Date: September 22, 2020 11:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is unfathomably adorable, and deserves many more readers than it apparently got.
Date: April 10, 2009 06:47 am Title: Chapter 1
you've got a knack for writing these two, that I just can't get enough of
9 [Report This]Date: May 05, 2008 09:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awww, I love it. My favorite is the summer one with the yellow shirt...
Date: May 04, 2008 02:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
This story is so vivid and everything I want in a story. I can completely imagine all of this happening and I feel like I am in their shoes when I read this.
There are so many great lines to choose from in this story but I loved these:
Something inside of Jim sinks a little lower than he thought it could. He's ready to hand her those glasses when her vision goes blurry; ready to carry her to bed if she falls asleep on the couch; ready to cover her in blankets and put up with her if she steals them during her slumber
and:
"I guess. It could be fun. Yeah, I guess so," she says, nonchalantly striding away from him to the edge of the roof, wind whipping her hair. Her hands are in her back pockets and her spine is facing him; she's looking out over Scranton, and she thinks if she looks hard enough, she can see all the way back to the night she told him she couldn't
7 [Report This]Date: May 04, 2008 10:32 am Title: Chapter 1
Not bad for a first five things story. I really liked it. The only problem I had was with a little realism. I think if your going to throw in names of places and streets you should just hit google maps first. You might just want to re-name the streets 'cause there isn't a Broad or Chestnut in downtown Scranton, or any grocery stores for that matter. Just a little FYI.
Author's Response: Thanks - I didn't even think about that. I just invented them for the purpose of having street names and a grocery; it didn't even occur to me that I could look up actual streets and places. That's a really great idea, thank you.
Date: May 04, 2008 10:02 am Title: Chapter 1
This was beautiful. Every single one had its own personality but stitched together in a series of unseen moments that brought them to here. Great job!
9 [Report This]Date: May 04, 2008 02:11 am Title: Chapter 1
I love all the little snippits into Jim and Pam's life. The first was plain adorable. Hiding under desks is just immature enough to be cool.
But the proposal? Amazing. With the romance and humor that is ever present with those two. I have read some wild proposals that are out of character, but this was perfect.