Date: June 09, 2008 12:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very cute. There's One thing. I think there is a misleading typo in your story. I think you mean you really want to marry me? but you have written him not me. Easy fix with the edit button on this site.
I really like it when stories include a dose of reality in the insane office world. I'm sure Jim and Pam would think about where their lives are headed and so forth. That will be the focus of the upcomming chapters of After the fireworks. I think Pam is over idealistic at times with what a career in graphic design would actually be. It's still an office job sitting in front of a computer. Sorry blithering on too much. I liked your story. It had some nice realism to it.
Date: June 05, 2008 12:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like this one too! It's definitely not a pile of crap. It would be if it were opposite day! You're doing a great job on all of your stories and I'm looking forward to more!
Date: June 04, 2008 10:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like this one a lot because it really feels like Jim and Pam to me. I like their exchanges.
Date: May 28, 2008 10:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
I am loving these really happy/sad/scared wrapped up all into one stories! I think you're really touching on a topic no one seems to get: are they actually ready to get married? I really enjoyed this variation. Jim is so sure of himself, like he always has been, and so it is very in-character for him to convince Pam that everything will be alright. I thought the ending was great too; gotta end on a humorous note!
Author's Response: I just got done reading an extremely angsty story that wsa basicaly going to ruin my morning. Just seeing a review for this story has changed everything. I'm really glad that you took the time to read it and actually liked it. It makes me want to write again.