Date: July 24, 2008 10:39 am Title: Act One
Wow. I don't even know how I'm going to remember all the things I want to call genius! Michael saying "revolutionish" and calling a meeting for 40 minutes later. Oh and Michael telling everyone to strap themselves on. HEE! I love the set-up and that everything follows so smoothly from the events of the finale - from Holly's crush on Michael to the Slow Kevin bit to Phyllis seeing Angela with Dwight. Brilliant work.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you for such a nice review. I'm glad that you felt like things flowed from the finale, that was really a main goal of mine in writing this. It only takes place around a week (At the beginning) from it, and so most of the storylines are still relevant. Thank you again for the review belsum.
Date: July 01, 2008 11:18 am Title: Act One
There were just too many lines here that made me think, I'll have to mention that in the review, so I'm just going to do a bulleted list, if you don't mind. :o)
"I haven’t decided on the honeymoon yet. Angela doesn’t like the heat [beat] or the cold." Bwah --poor Andy...
- (Sorry about the formatting here; can't get this to stop centering everything....)
PHYLLIS
(while picking up a bag of chips from the vending machine, and looking at the camera)
Well maybe she can decide. -- Hah, this is vintage Phyllis. Just perfect!
Okay, Michael's whole Ryan-related speech was brilliant, right down to the pauses (which you write so incredibly well).
"Strap yourselves on, here we go!" You know, I find Michael-isms really difficult to write, because his slips are usually so subtle (and it's easy to write them in a way that comes off as forced). But this? Quintessential Michael slip. Well done. :o)
Of course Andy's the first one to ask how one goes about accumulating stars! And I loved Holly's comment that everyone there seems really sad. :o) (Also like the very subtle tension you're building with the whole Jim & Pam thing.)
(voice can be heard from Reception throughout the duration of the conversation, nevertheless they both remain on the phone) Tee hee -- love that little detail
Again, the formatting is all screwy here (in my review), but I can't tell you enough how much I'm enjoying this! It really is like reading a script from the show; you have yet to hit a false note. Well done!
Author's Response: Again, another awesome review. I'm glad that you liked the details and small moments that I tried to put in this chapter. Sometimes I plan for them, like Andy and Angela, but other times they just sort of pop-up like Michael's slip. I had that actually written like someone would normally say it and then I went back and thought, "well it is Michael...." and changed it. I'm also glad that you liked the Jim and Pam stuff. I didn't want it to get too heavy or anything, which is why I started off with it. Thanks again for the great review girl7.
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 10:02 pm Title: Act One
I'm pretty sure I reviewed the first chapter. If not... you're an amazing writer! these seems so real, as if I can actually picture them on tv. Fantastic!
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words raspberryjam. I'm glad that it felt real to you, that is definitely what I was going for.
Date: June 01, 2008 06:09 pm Title: Act One
I'm really enjoying this. Everyone is so in character and it plays out just like an episode. Very funny. Can't wait to see more.
Author's Response: I'm glad that you find it in character, that's basically what I'm trying to do first and foremost. I appreciate you taking the time to review, and thanks for the kind words EverybodyHurts.
10 [Report This]Date: June 01, 2008 11:29 am Title: Act One
Hillarious! So very in character of everyone in the office. I'm impressed with you script formating.
Question: Isn't it driving you insane though? I know when I wrote a chapter of all phone calls and emails all the formating almost killed me.
Anyway love the gold stars and the Jim hijinx was perfect. Really looking forward to more.
Author's Response: To answer your question, the formatting does drive me insane. Yes. I have another story that involves a lot of bolding and italics and that is also a pain. But with the spaces and the centering, it always takes me a couple attempts to get it looking right, or at least somewhat alright. Thanks for the review Jewelsy, I appreciate it.
Date: May 31, 2008 09:57 pm Title: Act One
Nice!! I enjoyed reading this - very true to characters. I can see Angela not liking Holly - though it never occurred to me before. Thanks, looking forward to more!
Author's Response: MintChocolateChip!! Hi, thank you very much for the compliment and taking the time to review. Yes, I figured like with the Stamford people that Angela wouldn't like Holly. Not that there is any reason for it, just because she's Angela.
8 [Report This]Date: May 31, 2008 08:39 pm Title: Act One
I'm looking forward to reading the lengths people will go to to earn gold stars. Interesting and original idea for an Office fanfic.
Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked the concept. I wanted to do something in-office that could sort of pit people against each other in office politics that sometimes can get out of hand over really simple things. And yes, things are going to get heated for that coveted week's paid vacation. Thanks for taking the time jinx.
10 [Report This]Date: May 31, 2008 06:41 pm Title: Act One
great job! PLEASE keep writing!
Author's Response: I definitely will! I write a little slower then some people, but hopefully good things come to those who wait. I appreciate your kind words and taking the time to review ireallylovetheoffice.
10 [Report This]Date: May 31, 2008 04:17 pm Title: Act One
I hereby give this story five gold stars.
Author's Response: Haha, thank you RomanCandle. I appreciate you taking the time to review and giving me 5 stars, that's very nice of you.