Date: July 12, 2008 06:31 pm Title: Act Two
OMG, " My job can only be done by me [beat] or any other random person." is about the funniest thing I've read in a loooong time! And Phyllis is a sneaky devil. I cannot wait to see what she does to Angela!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked that line. I'm kind of a fan of quietdesperation!Pam, which is now pretty much gone from the show, but her job can still be mined for that. Thank you for the review lisahoo!
Date: July 01, 2008 11:29 am Title: Act Two
I'm refraining from quoting so I don't throw off the formatting like I did in my other review. But I'm still doing my bullet list (lol):
- Dwight sent Mose to the woods because he has a treehouse there? Oh dear god. So funny.....
- The entire Kelly-Holly thing was pure gold, right down to Holly's last talking head. ("Is this normal?" lol)
- I feel like I'm just repeating myself, but honestly, I can't tell you enough times how perfectly you write both the dialogue and the tone -- Michael's hushed, "You're leaving," followed by his uber-emotional, "I'll give you fifteen stars if you'll stay"...spot-on.
- "My job can only be done by me [beat] or any other random person." Hah -- so perfectly Pam, that comment (and the deflated look you describe afterward).
- Both the post-it note exchange and the interaction between Phyllis and Angela (made even more perfect by Stanley's, "You'd better not be planning a party....") were hilarious (and again -- for the bazillionth time -- spot on).
- I think the tension you're weaving between Jim & Pam is also well done; true to the show's format, it isn't overdone or too dramatic, but rather, it's a situation in which they've let an inability to communicate effectively get the better of them.
Loving this so much!
Author's Response: Another great review! I'm glad that you liked the different exchanges and Talking Heads. I try really hard to hear the actors actually say them and if they would make sense (its possible I'm slightly crazy). But it helps me to lead to things like having Stanley cap off the Angela-Phyllis exchange, which is something I think they'd do on the show. Also, I'm glad you liked the Pam bit. I was uneasy about thinking it was a little too much, but I maintain that if Jim had jerked her like he has (thanks writers) she would be a little uneasy and questioning herself. Thanks again for the review girl7.
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 10:05 pm Title: Act Two
Great chapter. Sad way to end it. hope it turns out better! update soon!
Author's Response: I kind of wanted to end on a bit of a cliffhanger, and to realistically show the effects of Jim's lack of proposal. But there is more to come! So thank you for taking the time to review raspberryjam.
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 07:54 pm Title: Act Two
NO!!! NOT THE END! in other words...CONTINUE!
Author's Response: I know, I know, but we're only halfway through the episode, so theres quite a bit left. Thank you for the review and kind words ireallylovetheoffice.