9 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2008 07:29 am Title: Chapter 1
I really liked it.
I mean, it kinda just spoke to me. It had the nice flow. Alot of fics don't have it and I like the flow of the storyline.
I have read so many fics about Jim if he did see the message. But the end of it just was just so thrilling. I mean you wanted to just read so much more. That simple "Why". It kind of just broke my heart a little because I can imagine Jim saying/typing that. His expressions and everything. I just adored it. Also, Pam's message spoke so much in a few words. It's quite wonderful if you can do that. I think this fic is like on my top 10!
It was just perfect.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, that means so very much to me that this fic reasonated with you. I worked really hard on this part, and I'm glad that it rang true. Thank you so much for the review.
Date: July 26, 2008 10:47 am Title: Chapter 1
Excellent writing!
B
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: July 26, 2008 10:11 am Title: Chapter 1
I love this beginning. I am so glad the whole thing's written because I can't wait to see the next chapter.
Jim was so heartbroken at this point, you really conveyed the pain and anger he was feeling.
Author's Response:
Thank you JKfan. Now might be a good time to confess that I had musical help on evoking the emotion. The first two chapters were written with the song "The Glass Parade" on in the background. It is always heartbreaking and I believe it helped me get to place to write it. I'm not really much for dark Jim, but there is a time and place for everything and I think that he was in a bad place at this point in the series.
Thank you so much for reviewing, I haven't written in a while and I'm LOVING that people are enjoying this fic. I will post again very soon and I hope you enjoy it from here on out.
9 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2008 09:38 am Title: Chapter 1
no you don't leave me hanging like that, you are pretty evil, you know that right.
anyways, this is a great start. drunk!jim is always fun, but you still make him seem very jimish, so thats a big plus. and man, i can't even hate your karen because she is just nice and normal. oh well. fine. i guess i can live with the non-hatred, because, yep. its Jim/Pam ;)
Author's Response:
I am not evil! I promise. I may be a little sneaky, and I do love a cliffhanger, but I'll make it okay in the end. You know me.
You know, I do think that Karen's okay. I mean, really, if I worked in Scranton because I thought Jim was into me and in the end he left me by a fountain.....I'd be a little stern too. And I would fight to keep him.
But, yes in the end, it's JAM and that's okay by me. ps, enjoyed getting to know you better via facebook...
10 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2008 07:30 am Title: Chapter 1
argh! uncgirl, you can't leave us here!! I hope you are posting that second chapter as I type this. I love Diwali AU fics, and this one is off to an excellent start!!!
Author's Response:
moxie, i am planning to post today, so don't worry. I'm trying to enjoy a beautiful and not too hot day here. And I'm proofing the next part, but I will post it soon. I won't say the second chapter fixes this, but the third will.
Date: July 26, 2008 06:45 am Title: Chapter 1
OMFG. Finally, a text reply back!
This pounded me in the grief bone: The only person who lived here was him, if you could call it really living.
Author's Response:
Lisa, take care of that grief bone will you, because I may tweak in a bit more in the next section. Just warning you. Thank you for the review, as always. I really appreciate it! I'll confess that if I post and you don't review, I get worried that I've lost my touch. :-)
I really love Diwali for its potential, but I hadn't read something where it went the way I wanted it to go....so I wrote it. Gotta love the fanfic world. Enjoy the rest.
10 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2008 06:41 am Title: Chapter 1
This is amazing. Such an evocative portrait of Jim here; we can see the seeds of the Karen relationship and his whole S3 persona. And I have a sneaking suspicion that this story is only going to get more amazing. So awesome that you are writing.
Author's Response: Hey BL, thanks for the support as always. I certainly hope that we'l be hearing from you soon. Of course it does go AU from here, but it could stand alone and work I think. But in my world, I can't stand to drag Jim, Pam or Karen through the horror of Season 3. Course you might have a "suspicion" about where it goes from here. ;-)
Date: July 26, 2008 04:12 am Title: Chapter 1
But he was grateful whenever his mind would allow him to think of Karen, to think of possibility instead of pain. Even if he was just distracting himself, and he knew it, he could pretend for a minute that his heart wasn’t broken.
And there's S3 Jim. Beautiful. I also love the detail about his ties all being dumped on the breakfast bar - so evocative of how distraught he was at that point, and how painfully alone. Ouch. And his reply message (love how he rationalizes that texting isn't as desperate as calling) is a fantastic mini-cliffhanger, in 3 letters. Can't wait.
Author's Response: Colette, I was thinking about what depressed Jim would look like and I thought that he would just let it all go. Living alone you can do that, and I figured that he would. Truthfully this "chapter" was written as half of all whole and I wasn't sure about breaking it up. But I like having it stand alone, it makes it all the more about Jim. Thanks so much for the reviews, you're the best.
Date: July 25, 2008 10:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, I'm intrigued by this one! Good to see you writing again!
Author's Response: Jenn, I may have said this before, but the return readers and who make me smile the most. You've been reviewing me for a while and it makes me feel really special. Thanks for the review and it feels good to be writing again.
10 [Report This]Date: July 25, 2008 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
Okay, first of all, love this first chapter and look forward to the rest. Second, I have seriously been looking to my Barenaked Ladies greatest hits CD all day - is the title in any way a reference to the song "Call and Answer"? Because if not it is a crazy accidental parallel:
http://www.stlyrics.com/lyrics/felicityvol2/callandanswer.htm
Thanks for the story. I really like the point about guys getting over people they were actually dating easier than Jim's situation.
Author's Response:
crystalized, I'm glad you like the line about the other guys. I really loved that line and you're the only one to mention it. But I do think he has to wonder why he can't move on. I've done that anyway, so maybe I'm projecting.
And yes, I totally forgot to credit them, which I will fix, but it is an homage to the Barenaked Ladies. So, is this an appropriate time to show my love for all things Barenaked Chicks....LOVE THEM. Break Your Heart is easily one of the most gut wrenching songs ever. Ok, I'll stop now. :-)
Date: July 25, 2008 10:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aww poor Stamford!Jim, such a heartbreaking guy. But this part broke my heart:
He hated being this guy. He hated crying into his beer. He hated isolating himself because the heartbreak was too close to the surface, too easy to see, too humiliating.
:/
I like how Pam's text made him feel though, and I'm excited to see where you go with this. Although it is never smart to had a phone while drunk.
Author's Response:
Oh, Jam Lover, so true. I will say the initial conversation they have will prove that point. I think that cell phones should come drunk proof.
So glad that you're reading and that you reviewed. I hope you like the rest.
9 [Report This]Date: July 25, 2008 09:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love your characterization of Jim here. Rings very true. This line was striking:
He hated being this guy. He hated crying into his beer. He hated isolating himself because the heartbreak was too close to the surface, too easy to see, too humiliating.
and this:
She didn’t call him back and he refused to be so desperate as to keep calling to chat. At some point he had to save some little part of his dignity.
Great premise and I look forward to seeing what you do with it.
Author's Response: Firstly, may I say, that i love when people pull lines out that they liked. It is always so interesting to see if what I liked, they liked...and I did love that part. I struggle with Jim because I'm a girl and I have no brothers, but I do think that ultimately he had to be so tired of not being able to get past all this. I think that's why we see so much anger from him in Season 3. Anyway, I hope you enjoy the rest, I'll be posting Pam's response shortly.
Date: July 25, 2008 09:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yay for Drunk!Jim! This is a nice start, and it's an idea that I can't get enough of. I mean, the writers set up the perfect opportunity for a great interaction between Pam and Jim and then didn't do anything with it. But it's not so frustrating when I can read the possibilities of what might have happened.
I'm really looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Truthfully, I've never understood why we didn't get a little more about what happened with her text, but then again, as they say, The Office is a comedy, not a romance. But not in my world! Gotta love the world of fanfic for that reason. I've been dying to write this and I'm really happy you're enjoying it.
Date: July 25, 2008 08:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Verrry good! I think you're spot-on for how Jim would be feeling and acting at this point. I'm so glad you have this basically written so I know it won't be a long time before I find out what happens next. :) YAY!
Author's Response:
KEV! I've thought about you alot lately as my commas runneth over on this piece. I'm trying to learn to put a period and start a new sentence :-)
I'm happy Jim seemed right to you, I stress the most about his chracterization. But I do think, given what he's said on the show, Stamford was a time of GREAT depression for him, so I thought I would right it that way. Yes, and for once, I'm not teasing everyone, I do have it mostly finished, but for a wee little epilogue.
Date: July 25, 2008 08:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow...that just flew by, uncgirl! Excellent start. I really like this concept. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Nan, I will say it didn't exactly fly by writing it, so I'm thrilled that it read well...and quickly...I think that's a good thing. I've always wanted to write about this episode, so I've had alot of fun explored what could have happened. Thanks for reviewing, and have a happy weekend.
Date: July 25, 2008 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ooooo....I'm intrigued! I hope you post the next chapter very soon!
Author's Response:
I'm happy that you're interested - the next chapter will be up today or tomorrow. Thanks for reviewing!