Date: July 21, 2010 11:31 am Title: The Birds and the Bees
Just anted to add another quote from chapter one that led to the confusion about the age difference of the two eldest
" Pam marveled at the differences between Jackson and his big sister. Just as she was now as a four year old, Olivia had been a noisy baby"
Date: April 14, 2009 06:07 am Title: The Birds and the Bees
Squee! So cute! This is such an adorable story...I love it! Yeah, it's mostly fluff, but somehow it feels like there's a little bit more to it, you know? I think you've nailed Jim and Pam's characters, and I love Olivia!
I dunno if you've got parts of the story planned out already or what, but d'you think you could maybe do a story taking place at the beach? I just got back from a trip with some friends, and I thought about how much I'd love a story about that! Anyway, I look forward to an update!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I don't have anything planned specifically, I just have a few different ideas that I have started working on for the next chapters. And it's funny you mention something about a beach, because that may be coming up soon :)
Date: April 12, 2009 11:10 am Title: The Birds and the Bees
Haha, thanks for the shout out. I'm blushing over here =)
Anyway, great job as usual. I really love Olivia--you do such a great job with her characterization, and the way that she and Jim and Pam interact with each other is so exactly how I'd picture them with a child--it's really fantastic. And this entire chapter is just...freaking cute. Adorable. I love it.
KEEP IT UP!
Author's Response: :):):) Thank you. There's a lot of pressure now, yeesh! Haha.
9 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2009 05:47 pm Title: The Birds and the Bees
awwww, this story is just precious. keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you, I will try!
Date: April 11, 2009 05:47 pm Title: The Birds and the Bees
Aw, this was so sweet. I love how you go for such a simple, beautiful moment between the three (four) of them. I'm sorry I have no suggestions for you, but I do hope you keep writing. :)
Author's Response: It's okay, compliments are more than welcome too :) I'm glad you liked it!
Date: April 11, 2009 03:49 pm Title: The Birds and the Bees
I agree, Big Tuna IS awesome, she's just started beta-ing for me and I want to squeeeze out all of her awesomeness and EAT IT, so that I am just as awesome as her lol.
This my dear was fabulous :) I demand more. I have fallen in love with Olivia already!
Author's Response: Thank you!! I was having a tough time writing Liv at first, I was trying to remember what my cousins were like at that age, how well they could speak, etc. I hope I'm doing okay so far!rnrnAnd don't worry, there's still a lot of mischief for Olivia Halpert to get into :)rnrnLOL @ the awesomeness comment, but I concur, she rocks!
Date: April 11, 2009 01:18 pm Title: The Birds and the Bees
I like this chapter. Such a sweet family moment. I don't know why but this line particularly tickled my funny bone:
Even so, her three-year-old mind was racing now at the thought of all the things he would get into once he was here.
I can just see a toddler with her little face scrunched up in disapproval. I like the dialogue and flow of this chapter. It seemed more realistic and less contrived than the prior chapter. I LIKED "The Oliv ia and Boomer Show" ... I just liked this BETTER.
Author's Response: Thank you!rnrnJust curious, what didn't you like about the last chapter? If there's something that needs to be improved, definitely let me know! :)
10 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2009 11:57 am Title: The Birds and the Bees
Please continue! This is such a cute story, and I can't wait to read more. :-)
Author's Response: Thank you! That makes me feel much better :)