Date: September 19, 2021 12:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great fic! I love the ending!
Date: December 29, 2009 04:41 am Title: Chapter 1
For some odd reason, the fourth time is my favorite. I mean, the fifth is obviously the happiest one, but the art show... still breaks my heart, and there was so much hope... wonderful!
10 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2009 09:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, so this was absolutely wonderful. Perfect. So, so angsty and intense and truthful and wow!
One of my favorite parts, "...the steadiness in the world that only comes from him. She’s shaking with sobs. “I love you too,” she whispers into an empty room.
Also, loved the art scene one... I HATED how he didn't show up!
ANYWAY. PERFECT! Absolutely perfect!!
Date: July 21, 2009 01:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
I have a real fondness for 5-things/5-times stories, because I think a strong framework allows for real creativity. This does not disappoint. You've captured very vivid, strong, real emotions in each section, leaving just enough detail to tie the paragraphs to real events but letting us fill in the blanks ourselves. That's an excellent way to draw the reader in, because you can then focus on creating the emotional content rather than describing the action. I'm rambling, but that's because I loved this so much. My favorite sentence, because it describes something we didn't see but feels breathtakingly real: He’s in love with me, she thinks to herself, and soon she’s crouched beneath his chair, leaning against his desk: the steadiness in the world that only comes from him.
Date: July 19, 2009 10:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
Lovely! I especially enjoyed the 5th time. ;-)
10 [Report This]Date: July 19, 2009 06:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
really beautiful!!
8 [Report This]Date: July 19, 2009 10:35 am Title: Chapter 1
This was lovely. You packed so much emotion into each little section. I just loved these lines:
"She kneels to pick up the pieces of a shattered cup, wishing with every breath in her body that picking up the pieces of a shattered world was just as easy."
"With him, it was color. Without him, it was motel art."
10 [Report This]Date: July 19, 2009 08:35 am Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely love how beautifully descriptive your writings are and this one is no exception. Gorgeous! And a great idea! :)
Date: July 19, 2009 07:30 am Title: Chapter 1
wow that's like... the exact opposite of my story.