Date: February 12, 2010 04:50 pm Title: Chapter 6
Ah! They finally run into each other. I was a little hesitant, but I really like how you are writing this story and moving the plot along. Can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Thanks megegg! Look for more soon!
Date: February 11, 2010 04:49 pm Title: Chapter 6
So close, yet so far! Nice having Pam meet Claire before meeting Jim. Still really interested in where you're headed.
Author's Response: Thanks NanReg! I'm pretty excited about this story, stay tuned new stuff soon!
10 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2010 04:39 pm Title: Chapter 6
YYYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSS! I love that 'Oh My God.' Just brilliant. Alrighty, great job and GET WRITING - HURRY UP! I can't wait much longer!
Author's Response: It'll come soon! So glad you're enjoying this!
Date: February 11, 2010 04:36 pm Title: Chapter 6
OH MY GOD!!!!! come on!!! finally the moment we're all waiting for, u have, no, u MUST update this soon!!
Author's Response: lol I love me a good cliff hanger! I'll be updating soon!! Thanks so much for the review dmbd!
Date: February 11, 2010 11:11 am Title: Chapter 6
Damnit cliff hangers!!
Really fun so far, keep it up
Author's Response: Thanks Nard Dogg! So glad you're liking it, and I appreciate the review!
More to come soon
Date: February 11, 2010 10:22 am Title: Chapter 6
Well, THIS was certainly another unexpected twist! Daniel is intriguing ... I'm a sucker for a nice British accent! I'll be interested to see if he's yummy agressive or aggressive-aggressive. And to have Pam meet him and run into Jim in under an hour ... well.
I think you do a really good job with plot development. This is fun.
Author's Response: Mmm Daniel will definitely be an interesting plot twist..I'm excited for readers to continue and see what happens with him. He'll be playing a large role in this story :) Love me some British accents! ;)
Thanks so much for the review Vampiric Blood!
Date: February 11, 2010 09:09 am Title: Chapter 6
I don't usually read much AU, but I am now totally sucked in on this one. I thought you did an especially good job with the Jim/teenager conversation.
Please continue.
Author's Response: Thanks jazzfan! I'm so glad you're liking it, I appreciate the review. I also enjoy writing Jim/Claire's conversations..it's interesting to see him deal with that as a character, and I like delving into it.
7 will be up soon!
10 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2010 08:51 am Title: Chapter 6
OMG first, I can't believe I missed chapter 5! I wish we'd get notifications again! I loved these latest two chapters! A new character, Daniel, I'm totally intrigued! BTW I love that he has a British accent, I totally love men with British accents, I could totally see Pam swooning over it a bit. Claire sounded a little different in the 6th chapter, but she's still adorable! I'm so loving this story, I can't wait to see what happens next! Go, write! LOL :-)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review Deedldee! I'm so glad you're enjoying it, I miss the days when we got notifications too. Now we don't even get review notifications..ah well, guess we just have to keep up with them.
So glad you like Daniel, I do too.. :) He's going to be an interest plot twist so look forward to that. I'll be writing 7 soon!
8 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2010 05:30 am Title: Chapter 6
Very interesting. Looking forward to seeing what happens when Jim and Pam get the chance to talk.
One small issues I had with this chapter, and you know I'm only telling you this because I love ya, and you're constantly looking to improve your writing :)
I didn't hear Claire as well in this chapter. For example, when she said, “Say, what are you here for?" < I just don't think a girl of 12 would use the word say in that context, you know? You need to jump back in your twelve/thirteen year old brain and remember how you spoke lol =)
Apart from that YAY :)
Author's Response: Thanks Sally, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Claire, for me, is somewhat of a different character to write. I'm sorry you didn't hear her voice as well, but maybe later in the story you'll feel differently about the way she speaks when more is revealed. :) Thanks for the review! ♥