10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2010 10:03 pm Title: Again
So happy this finally posted - really, really can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: October 22, 2010 08:36 am Title: Again
I like it a lot! I think you do a great job of capturing Jim's perspective. I like the alternating fear and excitement ... and how you had it take a little while for him to process what this second pregnancy will mean to Pam. I think you're presenting this very realistically and that you most definitely stayed in character for both of them. Well written!
Author's Response: Thank you! We haven't seen a whole lot of Jim/Pam angsty-ness since they've been together AND this is my first Office fic, so I'm always a little worried that I'm not getting them quite right (it's hard to judge that kind of thing on your own fic objectively). So thanks for the feedback on that because I'm really trying :)
Date: October 22, 2010 01:53 am Title: Again
You, young lady. Are a very talented writer and I freaking loved everything about this chapter. How Pam felt so guilty for not being happy, and for ruining Jim's "happy time"... actually I could go on and list everything I like but it would be literally the entire chapter. Keep writing, you are VERY much appreciated xx
Author's Response: Aw.. thank you :) I'm a little bit of a slow writer, but I really try. Thank you for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: October 21, 2010 08:48 pm Title: Again
Thank's for the update - it's so great to see Jim caring for his family and hear his inner thinking, wonderful job with that. I'm really excited to see this the rest of this story play out, it's one thing to have a Jam and their baby story, but it's entirely another to have them trying to prepare for another one, while Cecilia is still just a little baby. I know this happens to people in real life all the time, but I'm glad you decided to bring this to MTT where the idea is original.
Take your time posting, I frankly don't care if it takes three months (well, yeah, I'd miss the story) as long as you continue to give us such solid, well written chapters. So thanks for that! And let me know if you'd ever like a beta, I'm more than happy to help! I believe you can find my email on my bio page.
Author's Response: Thank you! And honestly, I'm excited to see the rest of this play out, too, because at the moment, I don't have a really solid direction. ha. : So we'll see. As for beta-ing, I have one beta, but I don't think a second could ever hurt because I want this thing to be as good as it possibly can be. I also might need someone to bounce some ideas off of, seeing as I don't have an actual plan.
Anyway, thanks so much for the comment :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 21, 2010 01:43 pm Title: Again
I'm so so glad this chapter's finally posted properly. I loved reading this chapter as a beta, second person sometimes can be tricky but you've done this so seamlessly I barely notice it. I love Jim's POV, I love how much he loves Pam, how caring he is and how he knows what she's going through and is being so sensitive toward her, especially with her being so extra hormonal. I really love how you ended the chapter, very much them. Looking forward to the next update!
Author's Response: It was easier to do second person seamlessly when it was just a one-shot, but then I felt like I had to keep it that way for consistency once I decided to turn it into an actual chaptered story. I definitely catch myself going back a lot thinking, "Okay, I've used 'you' and 'your' like 4324324 times in this sentence, and it sounds ridiculous. FIX IT!" .. haha It's also the only second person story I've ever written so that makes it a even more of a challenge. Sometimes I wish I had stuck to first or third. Anyway, thank you so much for reading and commenting and beta-ing :) I really appreciate it