Date: October 28, 2011 12:30 pm Title: Chapter 2
There's so much I like about this. The matter of fact tone just makes Jim's day seem even more empty. Ah, it makes it clear how he's totally not engaged. That's it.
I like how you introduce Andy and Karen namelessly.
I like how you close with the same phrase of the opening.
I'll be interested to see how far you decide to take this. Will the story end in angst-land? Go AU?
And, like Deedldee, schedule permitting, I'd be happy to help out if you need feedback getting back in the saddle on the other story. I'm not writing anymore but I still like to beta.
Date: October 28, 2011 12:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
Tuna, I'm sorry to hear life's been crapping on you. I hope your being able to sit down and write is a good sign for you!
I like this. So much ache. I think it's very much in character.
Date: October 15, 2011 07:37 pm Title: Chapter 2
Such a melancholy mood you've created here. Sad and beautiful.
Date: October 14, 2011 02:22 pm Title: Chapter 2
Poor Jim, I feel so bad for him. It sure seems like you have got inside his head and heart with this.
Date: October 14, 2011 12:01 pm Title: Chapter 2
I really like this story! It's the most realistic one I've read about what happened to Jim immediately after Casino Night. It's hard to read, that's for sure, but I have to keep reminding myself of the happy ending.
I hope you continue updating quickly! :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 13, 2011 03:26 pm Title: Chapter 2
Poor Jim. I want to give him a cuddle :(
10 [Report This]Date: October 13, 2011 01:55 pm Title: Chapter 2
UGH! You're making me tear up! Poor Jim. :( Great job describing Andy and Karen. She seemed awfully dismissive. I wonder how things changed from that to having the hots for him. I'm so happy you've updated so quickly. Looking forward to more!
Date: October 13, 2011 09:54 am Title: Chapter 2
It's interesting how Karen quickly dismisses him the first day, isn't it? Anyway, I'm liking the fast updates, I hope you continue to update this fast. Pweess :)
Author's Response: Yeah, pretty sure she didn't like him for the first few months he worked there. Silly girl. I promise I will update as fast as I can write! Which might not be much...but I promise I'll try.
Date: October 13, 2011 06:24 am Title: Chapter 1
Sorry to hear about your troubles. I hope things start working out and looking up for you soon.
As heartbreaking as this is, I am loving it. I look forward to you taking us on this journey.
Author's Response: Ah, thank you! Oddly enough, writing all this angst is really helping me work through some things. Go figure. :)
Date: October 12, 2011 07:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Jim's reaction to Casino Night is one of my favorite things to muse about, so I really love your subject matter from the get-go.
"But she can't" I could definitely believe his thought process here - and it's true. At that moment, she couldn't. Well done.
Hope things are looking up for you, TEN.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, I imagine his thoughts would be all over the place right now. He still loves her but she's completely broken his heart and devastated his world. I'm sure there's a good bit of anger and resentment mixed in with the pain.
10 [Report This]Date: October 12, 2011 02:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
Holy Grief Bone, Batman! That was beautiful, but so painful.
I'm so sorry to hear about your hard times. Beering you strength and hugs!
Author's Response: Thanks! It's gets a little easier every day. :)
9 [Report This]Date: October 12, 2011 01:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Tuna! Where do I begin? First and foremost, I'm so very sorry for the tough time you've going through. I'm glad to hear that you're rallying. While I certainly miss For The Love You Bring, I was delighted to see that you're still around. Believe me when I tell you that this made my heart skip a beat. Sometimes angst--good angst, like this--is so satisfying. I'm hoping you'll continue this and be inspired to continue with your other story--such a contrast of moods, by the way!
Author's Response: Thank you, Nan! I think that's why I'm so stalled with my other story. I know exactly what's going to happen next but every time I try to write it, the whole mood of the story is off. Hopefully, writing this one will work some of that angst out of my system. Thank you for all the encouragement. It really does mean the world to me.
10 [Report This]Date: October 12, 2011 01:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
Firstly, welcome back. You have been missed around here. What a fantastic story to come back with. I cannot wait to see where you take this :)
Author's Response: Ah, thanks, lovey! It's good to be back!
Date: October 12, 2011 12:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ouch. Season three is so painful. The only way I can read these fics, now, is thinking about the happy ending.
Looking forward to this one. :)
Author's Response: Ditto. Season 3 is still hard for me to watch.
Date: October 12, 2011 11:25 am Title: Chapter 1
Agh, depressed already. Keep Going :P!
Author's Response: Haha. Yeah, have a feeling this one is going to go in that direction for a while so buckle up. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 12, 2011 09:02 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow. First, it's great to see you back here and I'm so sorry to hear you're going through a rough time. Writing can be therapeutic, for me it is at least.
As far as this story goes, it is amazing. You've hit every single emotional nail on the head. I'm hoping you continue this.
If you need help getting over writers block with your other story, I'd be happy to help. You can message me on the MTT Message board or email me at djyankees@gmail.com
Hope things are getting better for you. Sending hugs your way! :)
Author's Response: Well, that sounds healthy. Unfortunately, as of late, I have found trashy television and cheap wine to be therapeutic. :(
I'm so glad you like this story; I was convinced it was crap and I was really nervous to post it. I might email you about For the Love a little later on; I'd love to get some help with it but right now I think I need to take a break from it. You're the sweetest. Really. :)