1 [Report This]Date: January 09, 2019 10:31 pm Title: Shoot
I think you could go either way, but I would love to see more! You do a great job of writing that nervous tension + companionable silence between these two. Good stuff!
1 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2019 04:33 pm Title: Shoot
This is a good stopping place to be sure, however I for one wouldn't mind seeing how things would develop. Does Pam forget all her musings once she sobers up? Does she wake up to remember everything leading to more introspection about her life choices? Does Jim think about how she ditched Roy to come back to the Dundies thus giving him courage to say what he feels? Lots of ways this story could go. Still if you want to end it here, this is a good spot. Nice short little story too.
Author's Response: Wonderful suggestions!!! Thank you very much for your jellybeans and kind words. I will work on updating this
Date: January 06, 2019 07:33 am Title: Shoot
This could definitely turn into a great story, if you continue it. With that being said I also believe it is amazing on its own!d84;a039;
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate it! I will work on updating it with another chapter :)
1 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2019 10:37 pm Title: Shoot
I like this a lot. It's very to the point, and the point is pleasant. I'd be interested in a continuation if you have more to say, but not just for it's own sake--this could definitely be complete as it is.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much! I have a couple ideas in mind...