Date: April 06, 2019 02:45 pm Title: If I Had a Million Dollars
Let’s be honest, a fairy-tale romance is what I wish for for Jim and Pam in every fic ever so I’m very excited to see where this goes. Michael with the not so motivational posters is amazing, and so very in character. I can’t wait to see where you take us next.
Thank you! And yes, I really believe Michael would have grabbed the wrong motivational poster and not realized it - it was that idea that really sealed with me where I was going with this story.
And right? That’s all we want for Jim and Pam - one of the good fairy-tales, not like, Rumpelstiltskin, because that would be kind of weird...
Date: April 06, 2019 11:13 am Title: If I Had a Million Dollars
Why did it take me as long to review this as it did for Jim to confess his love to Pam?! Unacceptable.
I LoVe, lOvE, LOVE when you write a "let's get Pam and Jim back in sync" a la S3 story. AND, I love the serendipitous moments of undiscovered soulmates trope. God, you are delivering on that in spades and this is just the first chapter.
To begin, those (de)motivational posters are the best in a terrible way, only made better by the satirical versions. Because YES Michael would have never bothered to read the whole quote, only looked at the picture and the "motivational" word. God that's brilliant.
Not only did you give us this amazing song-lyric exchange between Jim and Pam (and the fantastically on-point Andy moment; you can't hide from me! You can write Andy and you NEED to write more Andy because you have hit his characterization square in the head) to "If I Had a Million Dollars" BUT there's also references to karaoke nights where they sang that so I could use a one-shot about that, 'kay?
You know what I also realize in this chapter? You're great with the Jam banter and spot-on dialogue but your nonverbals are SO on-point with the characterizations. Like, Michael's facial expressions and Kelly pressing the paper and pen into her hand. There are these subtle things you add in that make me SEE the characters.
I love that I use my AUs to make you love Karen while I'm pretty sure you enjoy using Season 3 to remind me why I should hate her. :D
"Watch out for the meteorites" and "She wished for a fairy-tale romance" and oh my god, I want more of this story.
(Now I remember why I didn't review right away; I tried searching for short stories so I could figure out what is going to happen because if this is all a dream or something...)
I think you’re going to love how I use Karen in this story. (I hope so anyways, but feel free to let me know if I’m wrong about that later)
So tell me - did you find the short story this is modeled after?
As always, thanks for reading! Like I said, it’s dumb but I love it so much. 😊
Date: April 04, 2019 01:53 pm Title: If I Had a Million Dollars
Love this! Your dialogue for all characters is spot on. This could have been an episode of the show. Can't wait for chapter 2.
Oh and if you haven't heard that song a million times then you are not Canadian! Its practically our national anthem. :-) I was waiting for Jim to say "Haven't you always wanted a monkey?"
Author's Response: Thanks Sprinkles! I’m always afraid to tackle the rest of the characters but I’m just going for it with this story :) and no lie - I had the monkey line written and I deleted and retyped it like 7 times before deleting it for good. It was almost there! ;)
Date: April 03, 2019 07:26 am Title: If I Had a Million Dollars
Oh I am loving this! Get chapter 2 up soon, not just because I wants it (but I do want it) but also because MTT doesn't display chapter titles unless there's at least 2 chapters.
Also, loving the wishes theme, hoping Pam gets it with Jim and not with someone else (and of course that we're not in the Grimm world where fairytale is a very bad word).
Thanks, Comfect! Fear not, the next chapter will go up sometime tonight. Its not going to be a very long story (15k might be stretching it, but you know how we tend to get long-winded sometimes!) and most of it is already written, so the wait for updates won’t be long at all.
Lol! Can you imagine if I took this into the world of Grimm? Poor Pam! No, it’s all fluff and fun from here on out. Well, mostly anyways. :)
Date: April 02, 2019 11:18 pm Title: If I Had a Million Dollars
Coley! Your writing is so natural and believable and I can just see them and hear them and BELIEVE that it is all happening! I don't know what you have in store, but I am sure it will be just a real as the room I am sitting in!
So I was not familiar with the Barenakedladies song so I looked up the lyrics (did my research) before reading the story. The next story that's posted has 'treehouse' in the title, but I got a little confused and assumed there would be a treefort. But I like the not-real green dress. And poor Karen is so confused and I cannot wait for the next chapter.
I really adore your writing. All your story notes had me prepared for something weird and a stretch, but so far, it is just . . . I can just hear Pam breathing in and breathing out. And chuckling. And grinning. And I can't wait!
Author's Response: Clover, your words are always so nice and they always make me smile, so thank you for that! Don’t worry, the ‘something weird’ is coming but it’s fun and worth it, I hope!
Date: April 02, 2019 09:45 pm Title: If I Had a Million Dollars
So here I am, sitting in the parking lot of a gas station in my ambulance having just brought a guy to the ER because, and I wish I was kidding, he had a toothache. I hit refresh to see if I've got any new reviews on my story and...well no I didn't. However there was something just as good. A new story by one of my favorite authors. Hooray!
Okay now that I've got that out of my system. This story was actually a lot of fun. We start out feeling for Pam here in her season-of-angst blues and slowly we're seeing hope start to bloom. Great Jim and Pam banter to start things out. The addition of that song was a lot of fun. The images of Jim leaning in to have some classic Jim and Pam type moments was wonderful to imagine.
So far this isn't dumb at all. I'm really looking forward to seeing how it all pans out.
Author's Response: Thanks warrior! Hopefully the next chapter is just as fun :)