Date: November 19, 2019 01:02 pm Title: Chapter 17: The Office
I love seeing this side of Michael, at his heart he is so well intentioned and that’s what we see here. Dwight, grating on Jim all the more with Pam absent felt very true to character. Nice to see an update!
Author's Response: Thank you! I worry about my Michaels, so this is really nice to hear!
Date: November 19, 2019 11:52 am Title: Chapter 17: The Office
Awwww such a short chapter. But I’m really glad you’re keeping it up. I love this story and can’t wait to see what comes next. Hope the baby is doing fine
Author's Response: Yeah, it'll probably be short chapters from here on out, but I'm glad you're still enjoying! I'm dedicated to making sure this one does indeed get finished.
Date: November 19, 2019 11:20 am Title: Chapter 17: The Office
Oh, such a great update! I really fell Jim's anxiety about Pam's absence and worry along with him. Thank you!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm very glad the emotions are coming through clearly!
Date: November 19, 2019 08:35 am Title: Chapter 17: The Office
Lots of emotion right now. I can very easily see how Jim would get so tense around Dwight like this, especially since Pam's not there to calm him down.
By the way those lines at the start of this chapter? Pam in a truck with a drunk Roy. Her getting injured and losing her memory. *taps his nose* Nicely done.
However the real thing here is Michael. I really liked how you had a Good-Micheal moment here to diffuse the tension. Behind all the bluster, Micheal is a good guy and you brought that out well.
Great to see this one again.
Author's Response: *taps nose* thank you! I appreciate the thoughts on good-Michael; I find him hard to write, so I'm always concerned!