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Reviewer: Donnamour1969 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 17, 2019 07:25 pm Title: Chapter 5

I'm still enjoying this story very much, especially your heartbreaking characterization of Jim.

Author's Response: Thanks Donnamour! I’m hoping to have an update out someday, it’s proving to be a busy time of year at the moment though. 

Reviewer: Dernhelm Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: December 13, 2019 02:41 am Title: Chapter 5

I love the way the story is going! Can't wait to see their talk (they are going to talk, aren't they?).
And the line “As friends,” she clarifies. “Not like a date.” - I'm just screaming there. That's very cute.

Author's Response: Oh, they’re definitely going to talk! I’m glad you liked it... 

Reviewer: SprinklesTheCat Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: December 10, 2019 04:03 pm Title: Chapter 5

The banter is so good. Very in character. Excited for the next installment.

Author's Response: Thanks Sprinkles! I’m glad to hear that you enjoyed it. 

Reviewer: HonestAndCourageous Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: December 10, 2019 11:49 am Title: Chapter 5

I'm relatively new here and have been following this story from the start. I've really enjoyed the "Pam in Stamford" setting!
I couldn't help grinning through this entire chapter... I love how patient Pam is being with Jim's guarded behavior and how slowly and softly you have them coming back towards each other here.
It's also nice to be able to enjoy Karen here, though I've been secretly worried she'll somehow slide in and derail Jim!
And Andy and pig Latin? Perfect! Nice to have that in the middle of this chapter to give pause to Jim and Pam's sweet and cautious interactions. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I had a little bit more fun with chapter, I feel is if they’re returning to themselves a little bit more. I’m glad to see that translated well. I have no plans to use Karen for evil in this particular story... 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: December 10, 2019 02:03 am Title: Chapter 5

Oooohh I like this chapter. Like, a lot. Jim may think himself still anchored, but there's a lot more slack in that line. I think he's finding the water's aren't nearly as rough as he thought they were, thus he doesn't need so tight of a lifeline. There's life in his sails again and perhaps the first yearnings to chart a new course that once again leads to her. He's starting to behave like himself again and it's all thanks to Pam.

Speaking of Pam, her plan to just be the warm loving person he fell in love with looks to be working great for both of them. I also really liked that she's learned from the mistakes of Casino Night here. That after a big thing like his kiss or her showing up, there needs or should have been some time to process everything. Jim didn't give her or him that time and now he's in Stamford. She IS giving them that time and they're moving closer together. Great way to bring that out.

I loved that she put out the jelly beans full of his favorites. Yes, she's here for him and there he goes getting sucked back in as if she's an inescapable whirlpool. Which let's face it, she is for Jim. So yes, she's cleared the rip tide. Wonderful to see, but it also looks like she's creating her own current as well. One that is pulling and straining at that anchor line holding onto Jim. Hopefully it won't be long before that line snaps and her current pulls him ever closer towards the safe harbor that is her loving arms.

Great way to incorporate things from canon here. The sicking Andy on Pam prank in this context was a great way to show they still have a deep connection to each other. Oh boy Andy, you really have no idea what you're up against when you start to mess with the Dunder-Mifflin Partners in Crime Pranking Society that is Jim and Pam.

Author's Response: Thanks for this lovely review, Warrior. I enjoyed writing this chapter, I feel as if they’re returning to their true selves a little more - which meant a little more humor/fun. I’m glad that came across.

Reviewer: Dernhelm Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: December 06, 2019 09:17 am Title: Chapter 4

I love this story and looking forward for more. Pam is precious and I really glad that she became friends with Karen. I've always felt sad about their possible friendship, and hope they'll have more great interactions. Jim is... well, he is evolving Jim, though there are glimpses of good old Scranton Jim. Hope, he'll be back soon!

Author's Response: I think Pam and Karen would’ve made fantastic friends without Jim messing things up for them so dramatically. If you haven’t already, have a read of anything Duchess Cupcake has written - she writes the most wonderful Pam and Karen friendships into her stories. 

I forgot to say in the review I left on your wonderful story, but my twitter handle is in my bio here if you want to hit me up if you’re still keen to have someone beta anything 😊
Thanks for your review! Hopefully the next chapter won’t be too far away... 

Reviewer: Jimboree Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: December 04, 2019 07:08 pm Title: Chapter 4

Okay, gotcha. I remembered the chip-hunting taking place after "The Convention" and so thought that you had placed your story there - thanks for the explanation.

I wonder what will keep Jim from Pam if Karen is no longer an obstacle...? Maybe Jim hasn't had enough time to build up his defenses?

Author's Response:

That totally makes sense. I’ve picking using bits & pieces from basically any episode up to & including The Merger. I might add a note to clarify the timeline a little in the next update. 

There won’t be too many obstacles to come - this is probably about the halfway point of this story.  

Reviewer: Jimboree Signed [Report This]
Date: December 04, 2019 08:31 am Title: Chapter 4

First three chapters are really good; however, I feel that this fourth chapter presents some problems. Pam making friends with Karen is perfectly fine, good even, but I don’t see her doing exactly what Jim did, word for word. It’s also unfortunate that Pam’s actions result in Jim staying at odds with Karen - he clearly needed a friend during his time at Stamford and now that Pam has essentially stolen his opportunity, Jim has lost a possible anchor to keep him from her. Next, you might not be keeping a strict timeline here, but presumably these events take place after “The Convention”, so shouldn’t Jim be inclined to think that Pam is dating, i.e. not single?

Obviously there’s more to come, so maybe these events will be re-contextualized in later chapters.

Author's Response:

Hi Jimboree, 

Thanks for taking time the time to review. 

The timeline of this is a little clunky, I agree, but the convention has not yet happened. Essentially these events are taking place around the same time as Gay Witch Hunt. Jim has had no contact from Pam. Pam hasn’t dated. 

In regards to Karen, very early on in Season 3, she doesn’t appear to be interested in Jim. She comes across as more perplexed/annoyed by him. I’m basing this entirely how she speaks about him in Gay Witch Hunt - as this is about the time it’s set, I’ve aimed to recreate the same Karen here. 

I decided to use the same prank, & basically the same dialogue for a number of reasons. Mostly because Pam & Jim have pranked together for so long it doesn’t seem out of the bounds of reality for them to approach something in a similar way... Plus, it worked for Karen in canon & helped us see another side of her. 

 You said “Jim has lost a possible anchor to keep him from her.” That was exactly the point. Without Karen, Jim would have returned to Pam far, far earlier on - that’s the plan here.  

I hope this all makes some sense! 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 03, 2019 02:47 pm Title: Chapter 4

I like the this tactic that Pam's come up with. Be the Pam he fell in love with, but since he's being cool towards her, direct it at Karen. Pam makes a new friend, starts to chip away at Jim's feelings, and starts to feel good for herself. Win-win-win.

Bit of ebb and flow with Jim here. Lots of mixed feelings that come across well. He may be all serious workaholic Jim, or at least telling himself that. But under it all, he 's still Jim. The nice guy who tries to do the right thing. His guilt over how he treated Karen show this nicely.

Wonderful update as always.

Author's Response: Thanks Warrior! 

Yeah, Jim is all over the place - I’m hoping it mostly makes sense for him to be that way though, at least at this point... 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 29, 2019 10:44 pm Title: Chapter 3

Ok, so basically "The Merger" but in Stamford. I do like how Jim's instinct is to have her in his arms. Trust that instinct Jim, it'll lead you to a safe harbor. Still, he's scared. Pam threw him for a loop by showing up here and it shows. Hopefully the crash of the waves will settle a bit for him to hear that voice inside.

Pam though is doing as well as can be expected. Yes, swim diagonal or parallel to shore to get out of the rip, but once, out of the rip and into calm water, one still needs to swim to shore to get to the safety of the beach. Hopefully she'll get of the rip soon and then take the more direct approach. It worked with getting away from the sinking boat that was Roy. It could work well to get to the safe harbor that is a relationship with Jim too.

Lovely writing. The nautical metaphors are still working well in my opinion.

Author's Response:

Yep, basically “The Merger” in Stamford (for now). It’ll deviate a little more in the next chapter - mostly because Pam arrives in time to disrupt the Karen thing from becoming a thing...

I’m glad the metaphor is still working. I’m really trying to balance overusing it & not mentioning it at all. I hope I’m mostly hitting that sweet spot in the middle. 

Thanks for reviewing! (As always).  

Reviewer: Donnamour1969 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 29, 2019 08:49 pm Title: Chapter 3

Ugh! Why can't these two just communicate?! Lovely chapter. Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Communication is definitely not their strong point... It’ll take less than the entirety of Season 3 for them to sort things out here though. Thanks for the review! 

Reviewer: Sam Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 28, 2019 06:21 am Title: Chapter 2

I'm really enjoying this. And definitely keen! Looking forward to the reunion

Author's Response: Thanks Sam! Hopefully I won’t leave you waiting too much longer... 

Reviewer: SprinklesTheCat Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 26, 2019 05:57 pm Title: Chapter 2

"Get keen". 😁 I'm very keen for the next update. Can't wait. I love the bit with Michael and the mints. Hilarious.

Author's Response: Thanks Sprinkles! Oh Michael, he has no idea how well he’s playing into my metaphor 😉

Reviewer: Clover Signed [Report This]
Date: November 26, 2019 04:35 pm Title: Chapter 2

Oh, I am also loving this set-up. I'm so excited to see this come together! Great job Jenna! Woohoo! :)

Author's Response:

Thanks for taking the time to review, Clover! I really appreciate it a86;a039; Hopefully it lives up to your excitement! 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 26, 2019 04:37 am Title: Chapter 2

Good build-up to Pam's arrival. They both have such hugely conflicting emotions right now. "What if, what if, what if..." Clearly there's a lot of fear in both of them still. However what I really liked in this chapter is there's the first few glimmers of hope starting to peak through. Not all is lost. That's nice to see.

Looking forward to seeing them both in the same room again.

Author's Response: Thanks Warrior - not all is lost, but it’s going to take a little while for them to get there. Hopefully I’ll have the next chapter up sometime this weekend. 

Reviewer: agian18 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 25, 2019 07:53 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh BOY am I ready for this!!! I don't think I've ever seen "Pam and Jim work in Stamford together" and I love that you put a time table on the position.

"Bring our boy back."

Can't wait to read more of this!

Author's Response: Thanks Agian! I think I’ve read a couple of twists on The Merger where Pam (& others) end up in Stamford, but I’m hoping this is a bit of a unique take - particularly the idea of Pam putting herself in the situation... 

Reviewer: Donnamour1969 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 24, 2019 06:48 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow! I'm loving this scenario! Excited to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks! I’m glad you’re enjoying it. More to come someday in the not too distant future... 

Reviewer: SprinklesTheCat Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 23, 2019 07:12 am Title: Chapter 1

This is so great! More please. What an original story! And the metaphor is excellent. I can't wait to see what comes next.

Author's Response: Thanks Sprinkles! It’s nice to hear you like the idea, & the metaphor - I’m not sure how long it’ll end up being just yet so hopefully it doesn’t wear too thin 😂

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2019 06:01 pm Title: Chapter 1

Ok, so wow. This looks to be really good. You've really got a knack for coming up with these unique ideas and also different metaphors to describe them and this is proving to be no exception.

I do like the dichotomy between Jim and Pam here. They're both lost, but in different ways. Jim clinging to the one thing that can ground him, even if it goes against most of what he used to be like. Pam and her almost aimless drifting. I do like that she has the wherewithal to realize what her old relationship with Roy was and what a relationship with Jim could be. Great introspection on both their parts.

Then of course there's Micheal. I love Sincere Micheal here. Usually when he has a moment like this it pays off well. I get the feeling that this is one of those moments. I loved that he's held Jim's position open. The "go get our boy," is telling. He really considers DM Scranton his family and that shows here nicely.

Can't wait to see where this one goes.

Author's Response: Thank you, Warrior. You’ve really made my day here, mostly because I know you give frank (cushioned in kind) and constructive feedback to literally everything. It means a lot to have you say that this idea/metaphor isn’t completely ridiculous. 

I’m glad you got what I was going for with how I’ve represented where both Pam and Jim are at. Sincere Michael is the best version of Michael...
Hoping to have an update up the next day or two... 

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