Date: March 22, 2020 10:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
Welcome! So happy to have you with us at MTT. I am a sucker for a post CN story and I love seeing all the different takes! I really liked switching back and forth between Jim and Pam and how they both stayed up, unable to sleep. I like that Jim got kinda mad or frustrated with Pam after she called. And my heart just broke for her when she found out he had transferred. I am excited to read more from you!
First of all, I adore your username. Secondly, thank you so much! I'm also a sucker for a good Casino Night fic, especially if it ends up a lot better than I let it end up lol. Jim only ever gets frustrated with Pam when he can't handle his love for her (;
Thank you again for the review!
Date: March 20, 2020 04:16 am Title: Chapter 1
Welcome to MTT! This was an epic one shot, both in length and the emotional punch it was. Wow. I had my fingers crossed for a happier/less canon end to the weekend, but this filled the gap wonderfully as to what could have gone on in canon.
As you mentioned in your note, there were a few he/she’s in there amongst the “I”s, but they didn’t detract from the flow too much.
Really lovely job, I hope you feel inspired to write more Pam and Jim in future!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm definitely inspired to write more, and will hopefully be posting something soon! Just trying to decide if I should so another one shot or more of a story. I really considered turning this around and making it a happy ending, but we all need a little angst sometimes. Thank you so much for reviewing!
Date: March 19, 2020 09:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
I enjoyed the emotional beats here (I'm a sucker for a good third rejection on Casino Night fix). I want to emphasize that because what I'm going to say next will feel nitpicky, but it's true. The moments where the tense (present/past) and especially the person (first/third) would randomly switch for a sentence really threw off the rhythm for me. I say that because generally, through most of it, this had really good momentum that pushed the emotion on through, so those points where it failed were really jarring. It was a good fic and I really liked it overall though.
Author's Response: Thank you for the criticism! I knew I was going to mess that up throughout the story, but I did really try not to lol. Years of high school and college essays where professors banned using "I" makes it hard for me to remember how to use it lol. I reread the story this afternoon after posting it last night and saw all my slip ups, whoops. But anyway, thank you again, I'm really glad you liked it!
Date: March 19, 2020 04:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh wow. I was so hoping for a happy ending. But this was so good. So raw and heartbreaking. I can definitely see something like this happening in the show!
“No, he had no right to love me the way that he did, because it made it completely impossible to stop loving him right back.”
That. That killed me.
Please write more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, this means a lot!! I'm all for happy endings when it comes to Jam, but who doesn't love a little angst every now and then? I feel like there were so many times that their timing was just barely off, and Casino Night was definitely one of those times, so I was excited to write about it.
Date: March 19, 2020 03:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. Great job for your first story here. Excellent take on the after effects of Casino Night. I'm not sure I've read a story like this one where Pam calls Jim like that after he leaves her at his desk. Lots of very real emotions going on. Written heartbreakingly beautiful too. I'd love to read a companion piece to this that happens after "The Job." If that's what they were feeling when they separated, I can only imagine what kinds of emotions you'd have them going through when they finally get together.
Very well done. Welcome to MTT.
Thank you so much! I'm so glad people seem to like it, especially since this is my first story since I was in high school lol. I love and cherish all the cutesy and fun Jam moments, but I also love when they have their moments of trouble. I will definitely consider writing a similar story about The Job, that is a great idea!