1 [Report This]Date: August 24, 2020 03:58 pm Title: The Discovery
A) I love the idea of a JAM wedding at Schrute Farms. That has some amazing comic potential.
B) The remix of The Secret to be about Jim and Pam's secret engagement is maybe my favorite thing you've done so far.
Author's Response:
Indeed it does, I only hope that I can do it justice.
Thank you! I'm glad you liked that, it just fit the timeline so well that I couldn't help but repurpose that premise!
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Date: August 16, 2020 06:38 am Title: The Discovery
This was great, but also SCHRUTE FARMS!!! I am so here for that. So very here.
Author's Response:
Hah, I'm glad you're all aboard the farm train- or would it be a wagon? Happy to hear you liked the chapter.
Thanks for stopping by!
Date: July 20, 2020 08:47 pm Title: The Discovery
HA HA HA. I hope they have their wedding at the beet farm. That's fantastic. lol.
Author's Response:
I'm glad that tickled you. I'm fairly certain I'm committed at this point, but we'll see!
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Date: July 20, 2020 10:18 am Title: The Discovery
I like weird mashups, and I'm thrilled to see a JAM Schrute Farms wedding! That has to be something pleasantly odd and yummy :)
Roy's the worst, but that's not news... but I feel a little bad for Toby. But I kinda always feel bad for him so...
That was a lovely chapter, and I'm looking forward to the next one!
Author's Response:
Well, that's certainly a unique way to put that, I'm glad you're on board with the Schrute Farms runaway train disaster though! I dislike Roy too, hence he got his requisite pepper spray. Toby does kinda get the short end of the stick, crushing on what seems to be the perpetually engaged Pam.
I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed the chapter, thank you for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: July 19, 2020 07:49 am Title: The Discovery
Ooooh wow loved it!! I'm sucker for a little bit of drama
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Date: July 19, 2020 02:47 am Title: The Discovery
“Pam realised their fatal mistake.” Oh this sets it up so very well for what’s about to happen. I love Kelly’s enthusiasm. It’s such a delight!
“It’s pretty serious,” I love that you still had Toby ask them that - even though they’re engaged! Toby, Toby, Toby... So very predictable.
“We set a date,” Jim is so steadfast in this. It’s so very meaningful given Pam’s history. I like that he’s confident in it.
“it was becoming horrifyingly attractive” Hahaha. This is perfect! Yes! Have them get married at Schrute Farms! It aligns so nicely with their first night away together in canon.
“Did you find your ring,” Oh. My. God. Of course Roy doesn’t recognize a completely different ring. Why am I not surprised?! That’s terrible, and so very in character.
I’m so onboard with a Schrute Farms wedding! Your endnote made me laugh. I have lots of wedding planning stories, but I’ll spare you from that insanity for now...
Author's Response:
I'm glad that Kelly's enthusiasm felt genuine there for you, I rewrote the discovery encounter a few times in a few different places, and that was the one we ended up with.
Toby just can't catch a break - in canon or my story it seems. I felt kinda bad for his character but I really wanted him to have that line regardless, and I'm glad it landed.
That's a really interesting read on it! I read/wrote the "We set a date" line in my head as though he's being aloof and giving a non-answer, so I'm glad to hear your perspective on it, and that it didn't detract from the story.
Jim was channeling me as I wrote this, and realized that it was inevitable that I was going to make them get married on Schrute Farms, because for all of it's weirdness it was really well done for Dwight and Angela's wedding, and Andy's garden party.
Yeah, Roy. I had been building to that moment since the first chapter of Pam 6.0 if you'll believe it. Back when Roy was cleaning up and rushing out he threw Pam's ring in the trash with her takeout container that she left behind. His obtuseness has probably been turned up to 11 to suite my purposes, but I'm all in at this point anyway! I'm it rang true with you.
My sanity thanks you for this small mercy, let us hope it prevails in the future ;)
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Date: July 18, 2020 10:43 am Title: The Discovery
So I'll admit I went back through "Pam 6.0" to skim though the Pam and Roy stuff in there. It's just been awhile since we've seen him so I figured it would be good to get a baseline of everything.
Despite everything, going out with Katy and the "chick from wings night," it seems Roy still hasn't gotten over Pam. Now I'll grant you that Pam's great. It just seems an interesting tack to take. I'm thinking when he saw the ring back on her finger he had hopes of something re-starting. But then of course his inner selfish child flares up and he gets the pepper spray he so rightly deserves. Nothing wrong with that.
The JAM wedding at Schrute farms? Why not? It's a uniquie twist I'll give you that. Thing is I feel they could have some fun with it. They're the paying couple so they could really lean into the whole "customer is always right" schtick to insist there are as few Dwight inspired oddities as possilbe.
Kelly was fun with her gushing over things and I also liked the change that Jim and Pam insist on signing the paperwork rather than let things trail off. Good way to call back to canon but still keep things new for this story.
As an aside the best way to deal with pepper spray is flush out the affected area as soon as possible with warm water and then a long hot shower with a mild soap as soon as possible. There are wipes available that can take away some of the sting so those can work too.
Author's Response:
I had to do a re-read too, to make sure that I kinda had the tone right for the Roy obtuseness. My thoughts being Katy and wings night chick were honest attempts to move on, but they wouldn't put up with him when the cards were down and Roy misses that about Pam. Too bad Pam stopped putting up with him too. I didn't start the chapter thinking that this is the route it would take, honestly it was going to be a bit more awkward banter and a defeated Roy, but then this happened and I felt like it could work. I agree, Pam is great.
The arrangements at Schrute Farms will definitely be fun, just I hadn't planned the location and that's where the chapter took me and it was just all sorts of ironic. Dwight played a part in the formation of their friendship, so it's funny that he gets to play a part in their wedding as well.
Jim's not going to let Toby have those forms slide, they're engaged! I'm glad you liked that change. Kelly is of course the primary source of office gossip, followed closely by Phyllis and then Angela. I also felt like she would totally listen in on everything that goes on in HR for the ammunition.
Thank you for the pepper spray aside, that bit was actually a subtle nod in my mind to your great story This Thing Called Life! I re-read that a little while ago and for some reason the cleaning wipes stuck with me. Too bad that Pam didn't get that same advice.
Thank you for the kind and constructive feedback as always! I for one am happy that Roy may never need to be seen again, unless of course he crashes the wedding. I don't think I'd be that cruel to his character though, Dwight probably has a spud gun just for such occasions.