Date: August 24, 2020 10:44 am Title: Take Your Daughter to Work Day
Your story makes me giddy and this time wasn't an exception :)
"They're just little people, talk to them, treat them with respect, learn their interests. And I guess bribing them with candy couldn't hurt either," I laughed aloud at his line!
And I giggled at the part about 'improving kids skills.' Oh, I'm sure they have to discuss that!
I don't quite remember that episode, but wasn't Abby that girl who gave Pam a hard time? If yes, I'd say it was a fantastic improvement of the canon!
And their mutual thoughts about future parenting... so sweet!
"Everything was going to work out, even if she had to get married in her tiny back yard with Nikita as the ring bearer," — not a bad scenario, actually :)
Thank you!
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you liked this chapter, and I'm happy to hear I got a laugh out of you with the bribery line. Yes, Jim and Pam likely will need to touch base on the kids thing, not sure if it'll happen "on screen" as it were though, I'll have to see if it fits somewhere.
Abby was indeed the on that was giving Pam a hard time, "You're already grown up" was the line that I chose to flip on it's head this time around.
Glad you liked their mutual observations.
I know right? It was actually kind of my original thought, but a backyard wedding has been done before, and thus in the game of absurdist one-upmanship, the Halpert-Beesly Schrute Farms wedding was born.
You're welcome, but thank YOU for reading and reviewing, I love hearing from you!
Date: August 24, 2020 04:28 am Title: Take Your Daughter to Work Day
“With these thoughts Pam noticed she had been unconsciously twisting the engagement ring on her finger and pulled her hand away as if physically burned.” Oooh. I love this. I feel like it’s pretty common to treat Jim as the anti-Roy and I suppose in some ways his is, but I really love this image of Pam doing this unconscious gesture that’s associated with Roy and angst, and realizing and panicking just a little. It’s such a lovely little detail.
“But you already are an artist,” Wow. This is such a small change and yet SO significant.
This was a nice change of pace from canon, with Pam connecting with the kids a lot more naturally.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked the ring twisting detail. I viewed it as Pam still has some of these thoughts, but she's with someone now who she can share them with and have her voice heard, where Roy in my head I imagine kind of just grunting and rolling over, pretending to be asleep already or something. Probably not a realistic mental portrait, but hey, haters gonna hate.
I'm glad you liked the turnabout on Abby's line there, it was a pleasure to write.
Connecting more naturally indeed, and with only 50% more candy!
I'm happy to hear you enjoyed the chapter, thanks for sharing your thoughts and reactions!
Date: August 24, 2020 12:11 am Title: Take Your Daughter to Work Day
Lots of fun with this chapter. I loved that you kept in Pam tries to bribe the kids with candy. It's a solid plan. Also that she does make a connection with Abby with art. Abby was also fun saying Pam is already an artist and asking if Pam and Jim are already married. Very sweet.
It seems a nice balance of some of the traits of pre-Fancy New Beesly we see in canon S1 and the new more confident Pam we see in this AU. A lot of that seems to be since she's with Jim now, which is fun. She's got someone in her corner to really be there and help her so she doesn't have to do things (like wedding planning) completely alone. Loved that.
Glad you got some time to post a chapter. This one was fun.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you liked it. Not only did I keep the candy... I added more, because really, how could she not have chocolates up there!? Abby and the art was fun, I don't remember if that scene was deleted or not but it was a real downer, so flipping it around felt great, glad you got something from that. I couldn't help but through some of that child-like perceptive bluntness in there, sometimes kids say the darndest things. I wish one of them would have commented on it in canon, but oh well, that's what we're here for!
Of course, she is after all, Pam 6.0 ;). Jim being in her corner is definitely a huge plus though, you've got that bang on. In canon she almost went for the internship before Roy shut her down, so with no active discouragement this time around she's in much better shape in that regard.
Happy to hear you liked the chapter, thanks for sharing your thoughts!
1 [Report This]Date: August 24, 2020 12:01 am Title: Take Your Daughter to Work Day
I loved how they were with the kids. Perfect!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for stopping by to say so!
Date: August 23, 2020 09:05 pm Title: Take Your Daughter to Work Day
Aww! I love how you kept most of this the same but touched it just enough to make it fit your happier story point. I'm especially fond of the Abby interactions.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I had a really fun time writing Abby, so I'm glad you liked that too.
Thanks for reviewing!